Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: give a clear topic sentence about location, then 1–2 specific facts. Avoid fillers (uh, umm), grammar errors, and unclear phrases (e.g. “famous of is Spring”, “famous about the mini”). Use linking words if adding reasons.

Exemplo: I come from Jinan, a city in the northeast of China. It is famous for its natural springs, which are a major tourist attraction, and because of the springs it has historically been harder to build an extensive metro system.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example with correct grammar. Reduce hesitation sounds and fix verb forms and word order. Use linking words such as ‘for example’ or ‘for instance’ to connect the general statement and the example.

Exemplo: I like the people in my hometown because they are very friendly to strangers. For example, if you get lost in the city centre, locals will often stop and give you clear directions or even walk you to your destination.

Sugestão: Answer directly with correct tense and concise structure. Use a clear topic sentence stating the duration, then add relevant supporting details in one or two sentences. Avoid fragmentary endings and fillers.

Exemplo: I lived in my hometown for more than twenty years and completed my education there from kindergarten to university. I moved to another city at 22 to study for my master's degree, but I usually return home for holidays.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and reduce filler words. Use linking words like ‘because’, ‘in addition’, or ‘for example’ to organize ideas coherently.

Exemplo: Yes, it is. Because Jinan is developing, it offers many job opportunities that attract young people. In addition, there are plenty of entertainment options such as cafes, cinemas and parks where young people can relax.

× I come from Jinan, a city uh, which located in the uh, northeastern of China, umm.

✓ I come from Jinan, a city which is located in the northeast of China.

Missing verb 'is' (therefore 'which located' is incorrect) and wrong preposition/word form 'northeastern of China' should be 'the northeast of China' or simply 'northeast China'. Use 'which is located' to form a correct relative clause and 'the northeast of China' for correct prepositional phrase.

× This city is famous of is umm, Spring, and because of Spring it is hard to construct the metro in the city and it's also famous about the mini.

✓ This city is famous for its springs, and because of the springs it is difficult to build a metro in the city; it is also known for its canals.

Use 'famous for' (not 'famous of') and plural 'springs' if referring to multiple; 'is' repetition removed. 'Hard to construct the metro' is improved to 'difficult to build a metro' for natural phrasing. 'Famous about the mini' is unclear; likely 'canals' or 'miniature features'—here corrected to 'canals' as plausible. Ensure correct preposition 'for' and noun forms.

× I love the people in my hometown. People are friendly and warm hearted to strangers, umm, especially visitors from other places.

✓ I love the people in my hometown. People are friendly and warm-hearted to strangers, especially visitors from other places.

Use hyphenated adjective 'warm-hearted' and keep adjective form; spacing/punctuation improved. No tense change needed. Hyphen clarifies compound adjective.

× Uh, when you are get lost, uh, in the city center, some locals are warmly show you the right way to go clear direction.

✓ If you get lost in the city center, some locals will kindly show you the right way.

Incorrect verb form 'are get' should be 'get' (simple present for general condition) and 'are warmly show' is ungrammatical; use 'will kindly show' or 'kindly show' for natural phrasing. Removed redundant 'to go clear direction' and replaced with 'the right way' for clarity.

× I live in my hometown more than 20 years and I finished all my education there from kindergarten to the university and since 22 years old I left my hometown to another city to finish my master's degree. Umm but every umm uh holiday.

✓ I lived in my hometown for more than 20 years and completed all my education there from kindergarten to university, and when I was 22 I left my hometown for another city to complete my master's degree. But I still go back every holiday.

Use past tense 'lived' and 'completed' for finished actions. 'Since 22 years old I left' is incorrect; use 'when I was 22 I left'. 'To another city to finish' improved to 'for another city to complete'. Added 'still go back every holiday' to finish the fragment 'Umm but every umm uh holiday' with a complete clause.

× Yeah, definitely if you go travel in China, you will see many young people from different places working there because it's a developing city which have more and more, uh, job opportunities.

✓ Yeah, definitely, if you travel in China, you will see many young people from different places working there because it's a developing city which has more and more job opportunities.

Use 'if you travel' not 'go travel'; subject-verb agreement: 'city which have' should be 'city which has'. Removed filler and extra commas. 'More and more' kept but placed properly.

× Uh, in addition, this city has more entertainment for young people to, to, uh, get relaxed.

✓ In addition, this city has more entertainment options for young people to relax.

Use 'entertainment options' rather than 'more entertainment' for clearer countable phrasing, and correct verb 'to relax' instead of 'get relaxed' (passive-like and unnatural here). Removed filler words.