Hometown— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "good place to live for all the people"). Use articles and word order accurately.

Exemplo: My hometown is Terrace, a small city in southeast Kazakhstan. It’s famous for its mild climate and scenic countryside, which make it a pleasant place to live.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and follow with one or two specific reasons linked logically. Correct grammar ("it's" → "its"; "good for live" → "good to live in"). Avoid filler words like "actually" and repetitions.

Exemplo: I like the calm, cozy atmosphere of my hometown. In particular, residents are very friendly and supportive, so neighbours often help each other and there’s a strong sense of community.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear time reference, then add one brief supporting detail. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases ("since my birthday" is ambiguous; say "since I was born"). Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

Exemplo: I have lived there since I was born, so I’ve spent my whole life in Terrace. Because of that, I feel very attached to its peaceful atmosphere and friendly people.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion, then explain with two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fragmented sentences and hesitations. Use clear vocabulary (e.g., "nightlife and entertainment options").

Exemplo: Not really. Although the town is peaceful and great for families, it lacks nightlife and entertainment options for young people, so they often move to bigger cities for more social activities.

× It's known for its pleasant climate and beautiful nature, which makes it good place to live for all the people.

✓ It's known for its pleasant climate and beautiful nature, which make it a good place to live for all the people.

The relative clause refers to 'pleasant climate and beautiful nature' (plural), so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'good place' needs the indefinite article 'a' before it. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects (singular/plural) and include articles where required.

× Actually, I really enjoy it's calm and cozy atmosphere around the city and of course the people, because always what makes city really good for live, it's people.

✓ Actually, I really enjoy its calm and cozy atmosphere around the city and, of course, the people, because what always makes a city really good to live in is its people.

The possessive pronoun should be 'its' not 'it's' (it's = it is). 'Always what makes city really good for live' has incorrect word order and missing articles; rephrase to 'what always makes a city really good to live in'. Add 'a' before 'city' and use the preposition 'in' after 'live'. Suggestion: use 'its' for possession, place modifiers after 'live' use 'to live in', and include necessary articles.

× I've been living here since my birthday, I know this city umm as my childhood as my life began here and I really like its coziness, calmness and people are not rushed for some.

✓ I've been living here since I was born; I know this city from my childhood because my life began here, and I really like its coziness and calmness, and the people are not in a rush.

The original mixes tenses and has awkward phrasing. 'Since my birthday' is better as 'since I was born' for meaning. Use a semicolon or separate sentences instead of a comma splice. 'Know this city as my childhood' is incorrect — use 'know this city from my childhood'. 'People are not rushed for some' is ungrammatical; correct to 'the people are not in a rush'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent, avoid comma splices, and use standard prepositional phrases like 'from my childhood' and 'in a rush'.

× To be honest, not really. My hometown is pleasant and calm, which makes it ideal place for all the people, for families, but not for young, because nightlife and adventures.

✓ To be honest, not really. My hometown is pleasant and calm, which makes it an ideal place for families, but not for young people because it lacks nightlife and opportunities for adventure.

Missing articles: 'ideal place' needs 'an'. 'For all the people' is wordy; 'for families' is sufficient. 'Not for young' should be 'not for young people'. The clause 'because nightlife and adventures' is incomplete; specify that it lacks those things: 'it lacks nightlife and opportunities for adventure.' Suggestion: include appropriate articles ('an'), use complete noun phrases ('young people'), and make causal clauses explicit.

× Umm, relax. Yeah, it lacks so yeah.

✓ It lacks opportunities for relaxation and excitement, so it's not very appealing to young people.

The original consists of fragments and fillers ('Umm, relax. Yeah, it lacks so yeah.') that do not form a complete, clear sentence. Recast into a single coherent sentence that explains what is lacking and why. Suggestion: avoid filler words in formal responses and combine fragments into complete sentences describing the lack.