Jewelry— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'while I'm planning to go to any parties', say 'when I plan to attend parties'. Avoid confusing phrases like 'regular food' and replace them with correct terms.

Exemplo: I occasionally wear jewelry when I plan to attend events such as birthday parties, weddings, or annual functions. Although many people wear jewelry regularly, I prefer to wear it only on special occasions.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and clarity by combining ideas and using correct vocabulary. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases like 'I have an orbit of wearing silver rings'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Exemplo: I like two types of jewelry: gold and silver. I usually wear gold jewelry on special occasions, and I often wear silver rings as part of my daily accessories.

Sugestão: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and using appropriate linking words. Instead of repeating 'festival', use 'such as' to list examples. Also, clarify your belief with better phrasing.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually buy jewelry during festivals such as Dasara, Sankranti, and Diwali. I believe that purchasing jewelry on these special days brings prosperity to my life.

Sugestão: Improve coherence by using linking words and clearer sentence structures. Avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily. Also, express your opinion more smoothly.

Exemplo: Many people believe that wearing jewelry for a long time reflects their social status and earns respect from others. However, I personally prefer to wear jewelry only occasionally rather than for extended periods.

× Most of people like to wear jewelry on regular basis, but I don't like to wear on regular food.

✓ Most people like to wear jewelry on a regular basis, but I don't like to wear it regularly.

The phrase 'Most of people' is incorrect; it should be 'Most people' without 'of'. Also, 'on regular basis' needs the article 'a' to become 'on a regular basis'. The phrase 'on regular food' is incorrect and likely a typo; it should be 'regularly'. Additionally, 'wear' needs an object here, so 'it' is added.

× I like only two type of jewelries.

✓ I like only two types of jewelry.

The word 'type' should be plural 'types' because it refers to more than one. Also, 'jewelries' is incorrect; 'jewelry' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form.

× 1 is the gold and silvery gold jewelry.

✓ One is gold and silver jewelry.

The phrase '1 is the gold and silvery gold jewelry' is awkward and incorrect. '1' should be spelled out as 'One'. 'Silvery gold' is incorrect; it should be 'silver'. Also, 'the' is unnecessary here.

× Like gold I used to wear on occasional in my functions.

✓ I used to wear gold occasionally at my functions.

The phrase 'on occasional' is incorrect; it should be 'occasionally'. Also, 'in my functions' should be 'at my functions' because 'at' is the correct preposition for events.

× Yeah, I have an orbit of wearing silver rings.

✓ Yeah, I have a habit of wearing silver rings.

The word 'orbit' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'habit'. Also, 'an' is used before a vowel sound, but 'habit' starts with a consonant sound, so 'a' is correct.

× Usually on festivals like Dasara, Sankranti, Diwali, this kind of festival, I will purchase jewelry and I believe that purchasing jewellery on the festival day will brings me more prosperous to my life.

✓ Usually on festivals like Dasara, Sankranti, Diwali, and similar festivals, I purchase jewelry, and I believe that purchasing jewelry on festival days brings more prosperity to my life.

The modal verb 'will' is incorrectly used here; simple present 'purchase' is better for habitual actions. 'Will brings' is incorrect; it should be 'brings'. 'More prosperous' is an adjective; the noun 'prosperity' is correct here. Also, 'this kind of festival' is awkward; 'and similar festivals' is better.

× Most of the people believe that wearing jewelry will give their social status and respect from the other people.

✓ Most people believe that wearing jewelry will give them social status and respect from other people.

'Most of the people' should be 'Most people'. 'Their' is ambiguous; 'them' is better as the object. 'The other people' should be 'other people' without 'the'.

× But in my case, I wouldn't prefer to wear for so long, I only prefer occasionally.

✓ But in my case, I don't prefer to wear it for so long; I only prefer to wear it occasionally.

'Wouldn't prefer' is incorrect here; simple present 'don't prefer' is better for habitual preference. Also, 'wear for so long' needs the object 'it'. The sentence is better split with a semicolon for clarity.