Geography— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. "Yes, I enjoy geography") then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce fillers (uh, um) and avoid trailing or incomplete examples. Use exact names and correct vocabulary (e.g. "volcano" instead of "Volcan").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy geography because I love travelling and learning about landscapes. For example, I am fascinated by places like Mount Fuji and volcanic islands, which helps me understand different terrains and cultures.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one clear reason with a linking phrase. Avoid repetitive wording and fillers. Be specific about how geography is useful (e.g. navigation, cultural understanding, environmental awareness).

Exemplo: Yes, I think geography is very useful because it helps people understand other cultures and environments. For instance, knowing about climate and resources can improve travel planning and promote environmental awareness.

Sugestão: Give a concise yes/no topic sentence, then add specific details (when, what topics, achievements) and finish coherently. Remove hesitations and complete your last sentence. Avoid irrelevant remarks that confuse the message.

Exemplo: Yes, I studied geography from grades 8 to 10, and we covered topics like landforms and climate. I enjoyed it and even got the highest grade in the class, although I hadn't travelled much at that time.

Sugestão: State your position clearly, then give one or two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid casual or vague phrases like "a lot of money" without context; use professional phrasing (e.g. "higher income"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and remove fillers.

Exemplo: No, I wouldn't like to be a geography teacher because my career goal is engineering, which I believe offers better prospects and a higher income. I prefer a technical career that matches my interests.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give one specific plan or example of how you will learn more (e.g. reading travel books, using maps, visiting countries). Finish sentences fully and avoid repetitions and fillers.

Exemplo: Yes, I plan to learn more about other countries by reading travel guides and studying maps before trips. For example, I research island and mountain regions to prepare for my travels and learn about local landscapes and cultures.

× I do like geography, uh, especially because I'm more into traveling, so I like to learn a lot about new places and the terrains and, you know, all about the new stuff.

✓ I do like geography, especially because I'm more into traveling, so I like to learn a lot about new places and their terrains and, you know, all the new things.

Use 'their' to show possession (terrains belonging to the places). Use 'things' instead of 'stuff' for clarity and formality; remove filler 'uh' and duplicate 'do' is acceptable but not necessary.

× Uh, coming to geography, I know a lot of places, uh, that are so cool to visit, like Mount Fuji, uh, Volcan.

✓ Coming to geography, I know many places that are cool to visit, like Mount Fuji and volcanoes.

Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' before countable noun 'places' for conciseness. 'Volcan' is misspelled/incomplete; use 'volcanoes' or name a specific volcano. Remove filler 'uh'.

× Of course geography is very useful because, uh, this world is made-up of a lot of places and learning about, uh, new places is really helpful for people because, uh, we're often trapped in our own place and in a bubble.

✓ Of course, geography is very useful because the world is made up of many places, and learning about new places is really helpful since we are often trapped in our own area or bubble.

Add definite article 'the' before 'world'. 'Made-up' should be 'made up' (no hyphen). Use 'many' for countable 'places'. 'We're' expanded to 'we are' in correction for formality; 'own place' better as 'own area'.

× I did learn a lot about geography. Umm, I've had that subject from grade 8 through 10th.

✓ I did learn a lot about geography. I had that subject from grade 8 through grade 10.

Use parallel phrasing 'grade 8 through grade 10' or 'grades 8 to 10'. 'I've had' (present perfect) is awkward with finished school stages; simple past 'I had' fits better.

× Uh, it was actually, uh, a really cool subject because I learned a lot about, uh, different places and the terrains.

✓ It was actually a very interesting subject because I learned a lot about different places and their terrains.

'Very interesting' is clearer than 'really cool' in this context. Use 'their terrains' for possessive. Remove fillers.

× Umm, and also it was very cool because I scored the highest in that subject. Uh, which is ironic because I don't really go to any places apart from my.

✓ Also, it was great because I scored the highest in that subject, which is ironic because I don't really travel anywhere apart from my hometown.

Combine fragments into one sentence; 'apart from my' is incomplete — add 'hometown' or similar. Use 'travel anywhere' instead of 'go to any places' for natural phrasing.

× Geography is very cool and all, but I don't really want to be a geography teacher because, umm, that's not my dream. I want to be, uh, doing something which gives me a lot of money.

✓ Geography is interesting, but I don't want to be a geography teacher because that's not my dream. I want to do something that will earn me a lot of money.

Use infinitive 'to do' instead of 'doing'. 'Which gives me' should be 'that will earn me' to express future intention and correct relative clause. Remove fillers.

× So my head is uh, towards engineering.

✓ So my focus is toward engineering.

'My head is towards' is informal/awkward; use 'my focus is toward' or 'I'm leaning towards engineering'. Keep present progressive if indicating current inclination.

× So I don't want to be a geography teacher or a specialist or anything.

✓ So I don't want to be a geography teacher, a specialist, or anything like that.

Add parallel structure and 'like that' to complete the phrase; punctuation improved.

× Of course I want to learn a lot about a different, uh, places and cultures and umm, the terrains of different countries because it's very cool and interesting, umm, especially because I'm a lot into travelling at the moment, so going to different islands or mountains or.

✓ Of course I want to learn a lot about different places and cultures and the terrains of various countries because it's very interesting, especially since I'm very into traveling at the moment, so I plan to visit different islands or mountains.

Remove 'a' before 'different places' (incorrect article with plural). Use 'various' for variety and 'traveling' spelling consistency. Complete final clause 'plan to visit' to avoid fragment.