Flowers— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct word choice; avoid hesitation and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example with correct vocabulary (e.g., 'roses') and correct grammar. Limit to 2–4 sentences and link ideas with a simple connector (e.g., 'for example' or 'so').

Exemplo: Yes, I love flowers because they brighten up a room and convey emotions. For example, when I want to show gratitude to my partner, I buy roses and give them as a gift.

Sugestão: Fix grammar (tense and subject-verb agreement), remove repetition, and make the story coherent with linking words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include one specific detail (when, what, reaction).

Exemplo: Yes. My girlfriend loves flowers — last month I gave her roses for our first anniversary, and she was very excited when she opened them.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and correct pronoun and verb usage. Use precise phrasing instead of vague fillers. Provide one clear example with a linking phrase like 'for example' and keep sentences short.

Exemplo: Yes, there are many flower shops near my home, so I can buy flowers easily. For example, I only need a five-minute walk to reach a boutique where I often buy roses.

Sugestão: Use correct verbs ('take photos of'), avoid hesitation, and complete the anecdote. Give a specific time and place and link sentences with 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I often take photos of flowers when I encounter unusual or exotic varieties. For example, last Chinese New Year a shop displayed rare orchids, so I took several photos to remember them.

Sugestão: Clarify and correct vocabulary ('flowers' not 'files'), avoid overlong sentences, and provide a clear general statement with one specific example or occasion. Use linking words like 'for example' correctly.

Exemplo: Yes, many people in my country send flowers on special occasions. For example, couples often send roses to express love on anniversaries or Valentine's Day.

× I do love flowers and besides being beautiful and delightful, I believe they serve, uh, different purposes for different types of flower. For example, uh, if I want to express my gratitude for my loved one, I will purchase some rolls and give it to to her.

✓ I do love flowers and, besides being beautiful and delightful, I believe they serve different purposes for different types of flowers. For example, if I want to express my gratitude to my loved one, I will purchase some roses and give them to her.

Errors include wrong noun forms and word choice: 'types of flower' should be plural 'types of flowers' for agreement (related to plural issue), 'purchase some rolls' is a wrong word choice and should be 'roses', and 'give it to to her' has wrong pronoun and duplicate preposition. Use 'give them to her' because 'roses' is plural. Also change 'express my gratitude for my loved one' to the more natural 'express my gratitude to my loved one'. Suggestions: ensure noun plurality matches context and choose correct lexical items; match pronouns to their antecedents' number.

× Yes, my girlfriend loves flowers on time I remember last month I gave my girlfriend roses as a present for my first year anniversary with her and she love it and she was very excited and.

✓ Yes, my girlfriend loves flowers. I remember last month I gave my girlfriend roses as a present for our first anniversary, and she loved them; she was very excited.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and incorrect verb form 'she love it' should be past tense 'she loved them' to agree with plural 'roses' and the past context. Also 'first year anniversary' is redundant; use 'first anniversary' or 'one-year anniversary'. Suggestions: break run-on sentences into separate sentences, use past tense for past events, and make pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× There are lots of us where I live and I can easily purchase some flowers just at a nearby boutique. Uh, I remember last time when I have to, uh, buy some roses, uh, from the boutique, I just have to take a 5 minutes walk and it take me there.

✓ There are lots of shops where I live, and I can easily purchase flowers at a nearby boutique. I remember the last time I had to buy some roses from the boutique, I only had to take a five-minute walk and it took me there.

Problems: 'lots of us' is incorrect pronoun; likely meant 'lots of shops' or 'lots of places'. 'I have to, buy' mixes tenses and unnatural phrasing; use past tense 'I had to buy'. 'a 5 minutes walk' should be 'a five-minute walk' (compound adjective and singular), and 'it take me there' should be past tense 'it took me there'. Suggestions: choose correct nouns instead of pronouns, keep tense consistent, and use correct adjectival form for time expressions.

× Yes I do. I often take flowers when I see some beautiful and special exotic flowers that I would not easily encounter in my daily life. I remember that last Chinese New Year, uh, there was a flower shop that displayed the exotic flower and I took.

✓ Yes, I do. I often take photos when I see beautiful and special exotic flowers that I would not easily encounter in my daily life. I remember that last Chinese New Year there was a flower shop that displayed exotic flowers, and I took photos.

Errors: 'I often take flowers' is incorrect verb-object collocation; intended 'take photos'. 'displayed the exotic flower' should be plural 'displayed exotic flowers'. The sentence ends incomplete 'and I took' — complete it as 'and I took photos'. Maintain correct verb-object collocations and plural forms. Suggestions: use correct collocations (take photos), ensure plurality when referring to multiple items, and finish sentences completely.

× Actually, I believe it depends on the type of person in my country. For example, if they're being romantic and they want to express their love and gratitude to their loved ones and they often purchase some files and send files to their loved ones.

✓ Actually, I believe it depends on the type of person. For example, if someone is being romantic and wants to express love and gratitude to a loved one, they often purchase some flowers and send them to that person.

Problems: 'type of person in my country' is wordy; 'someone' is clearer. 'if they're being romantic and they want' mixes number and phrasing; use singular 'someone is' with singular 'wants' or use singular 'they' consistently. 'purchase some files and send files' uses wrong word 'files' instead of 'flowers' and repeats the noun instead of using pronoun 'them'. Suggestions: choose correct words, avoid repetition by using pronouns that agree in number, and keep consistent subject-verb agreement.