Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答不够自然流畅，语法和表达存在错误，且内容重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的时态和表达方式。

Exemplo: Yes, I write quite often because it helps me record important events. My teacher also advises me to write down my mistakes so I can learn from them. Additionally, I enjoy writing about interesting things that happen around me to remember happy moments.

Sugestão: 表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，缺少连贯的逻辑。建议使用连词连接句子，明确表达原因和结果。

Exemplo: I like to write about happy experiences because when I read them later, they cheer me up. Even if I feel sad, recalling these positive memories helps me feel better.

Sugestão: 回答内容混乱，语法错误严重，难以理解。建议先理清思路，使用简单句表达观点，避免无关词汇。

Exemplo: Yes, the things I write can change because my feelings and experiences change over time. Writing about my mistakes helps me learn and improve, which makes me happier.

Sugestão: 回答中有过多的语气词，表达不够流畅。建议减少填充词，使用更准确的词汇表达原因。

Exemplo: I prefer handwriting because it takes more time, which helps me remember details like when and who was involved in the events I write about.

× My teacher tell me if I have taken some mistake, I can write it then I will not do that.

✓ My teacher tells me if I have made some mistakes, I can write them down and then I will not do that again.

动词tell在第三人称单数时应加-s，变为tells。

× My teacher tell me if I have taken some mistake, I can write it then I will not do that.

✓ My teacher tells me if I have made some mistakes, I can write them down and then I will not do that again.

这里应使用过去分词made而不是taken，表示犯错。

× My teacher tell me if I have taken some mistake, I can write it then I will not do that.

✓ My teacher tells me if I have made some mistakes, I can write them down and then I will not do that again.

mistake应使用复数mistakes，write it应改为write them，保持一致。

× And also I like to write some interesting things have happened around me.

✓ And also I like to write about some interesting things that have happened around me.

动词write后应加介词about，表示写关于某事。

× Then I can keep this happy next day or next year.

✓ Then I can keep this happiness for the next day or next year.

句子结构不完整，需补充名词happiness和介词for。

× I like to write something make me happy because I think if I write that on this app, you can keep and they come with me one year or two years.

✓ I like to write something that makes me happy because I think if I write that on this app, I can keep it and it will stay with me for one or two years.

缺少关系代词that，动词makes需加-s，代词you应改为I，保持主语一致。

× If I miss something unhappy, when I see these happy things I write, I will be better.

✓ If I miss something unhappy, when I see these happy things I have written, I will feel better.

动词write应使用完成时have written，表达已写的内容。

× Yes, I sing any wheelchair and the heavy thing is not always around me and also unhappy things.

✓ Yes, I see that any wheelchair and heavy things are not always around me, and also unhappy things.

句子结构混乱，动词sing应为see，名词复数和谓语一致。

× Yes, I sing any wheelchair and the heavy thing is not always around me and also unhappy things.

✓ Yes, I see that wheelchairs and heavy things are not always around me, and also unhappy things.

wheelchair应使用复数wheelchairs，heavy thing改为heavy things，保持一致。

× So I will be better like to write some mistakes I have taken future.

✓ So I will be better by writing about some mistakes I have made in the future.

动词like后应加介词to，且表达未来时应使用in the future。

× So I will be better like to write some mistakes I have taken future.

✓ So I will be better by writing about some mistakes I have made in the future.

动词take的过去分词不正确，应使用made。

× Maybe bright side can help me to not make these mistakes and from this way I can be happy.

✓ Maybe the bright side can help me not to make these mistakes, and in this way I can be happy.

介词from用错，应使用in this way表示“通过这种方式”。

× I prefer handwriting umm, because I think handwriting will need a lot of time prefer than typing and umm, this time can help me to really record the things happened about umm, what time, uh, what people and what just happened.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I think handwriting needs more time than typing, and this time can help me really record the things that happened, like when, who, and what just happened.

动词need应加-s变为needs，比较级more time替代a lot of time prefer。