Writing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa dan pengulangan yang bisa diperbaiki agar lebih natural dan efektif. Cobalah untuk menggunakan kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan menghindari pengulangan kata seperti 'a lot'.

Exemplo: Yes, I write frequently because my job as a product owner requires me to prepare various policies, manual procedures, and product programs. Writing is an essential part of my daily tasks.

Sugestão: Perhatikan tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar jawaban lebih jelas dan alami. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide dengan baik.

Exemplo: I enjoy writing essays because they allow me to organize my thoughts clearly on paper. It's fascinating how I can express complex ideas in just a few well-structured paragraphs.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat pengulangan kata serta filler seperti 'uh'. Cobalah untuk menyusun kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan gunakan linking words untuk menjelaskan perbedaan gaya tulisan.

Exemplo: I don't think the content changes much, but I do adjust my writing style depending on the context. For example, I use a more casual tone in emails compared to the formal style I use in journals.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas, namun ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa dan penggunaan filler yang mengurangi kelancaran. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas.

Exemplo: I prefer typing because it's easy to correct mistakes on a computer or phone. In contrast, handwriting requires rewriting the entire page if I make an error.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda mengandung kesalahan tata bahasa dan pengulangan yang membuatnya kurang natural. Cobalah untuk menggunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung ke poin utama.

Exemplo: I have never kept a diary because I find it unnecessary and not useful in my life.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan terdapat banyak filler. Cobalah untuk menyusun kalimat yang lebih jelas dan gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide dengan baik.

Exemplo: To record my life, I enjoy taking photos of special moments and sharing my experiences with others. I believe photos play an important role in preserving meaningful memories.

× Actually, I love writing an essay because it just bringing all of our thinking into one simple paper.

✓ Actually, I love writing an essay because it just brings all of our thinking into one simple paper.

The verb 'bring' should be in the third person singular present tense 'brings' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Using 'bringing' here is incorrect because the sentence requires a finite verb form, not a gerund or participle.

× It's just lovely how we can convey all of our thoughts into one into a three simple paragraph.

✓ It's just lovely how we can convey all of our thoughts into one simple three-paragraph essay.

The phrase 'a three simple paragraph' is incorrect because 'paragraph' is singular but preceded by 'three' which indicates plural. Also, the order of adjectives is incorrect. The correction uses 'three-paragraph essay' to express the intended meaning properly.

× Not really, because I just, uh, love to change my style of writing, in particular, uh, condition.

✓ Not really, because I just, uh, love to change my style of writing, in particular, the condition.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'condition' to specify which condition is being referred to. Although this is an article error, it is closely related to modal verb usage context here.

× Especially when I'm writing an e-mail, I try to use more casual language than the uh, than writing a journal.

✓ Especially when I'm writing an e-mail, I try to use more casual language than when writing a journal.

The phrase 'than the uh, than writing a journal' is awkward and missing the preposition 'when' to compare the two actions properly. Adding 'when' clarifies the comparison between writing an email and writing a journal.

× Of course, typing, because when I'm wrongly write something in a computer or the phone, I just easily can erase, uh, the unnecessary words.

✓ Of course, typing, because when I wrongly write something on a computer or phone, I can easily erase the unnecessary words.

The pronoun 'I'm' is incorrectly used with 'wrongly write'; it should be 'I wrongly write'. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' for devices like computer or phone. The adverb 'easily' should be placed before 'can' for correct adverb placement.

× I'm never wrote any Diaries before because I think it's very unuseful, uh, things and very unnecessary in my life.

✓ I've never written any diaries before because I think they're very useless things and very unnecessary in my life.

The phrase 'I'm never wrote' is incorrect; the present perfect 'I've never written' is appropriate here. Also, 'unuseful' is not a standard English word; 'useless' is correct. 'Diaries' should be lowercase unless part of a title.

× So I never had, I never had writing on Diaries.

✓ So I have never kept a diary.

The phrase 'I never had writing on Diaries' is ungrammatical. The correct expression is 'I have never kept a diary.' Also, 'diaries' should be singular here as it refers to the activity of diary-keeping.

× Actually to record my life, I'm just love, uh, taken a photo for particular moments and telling others about how I feel, how I experience something and, and I think the photo is played a very important role to memorizing, uh, something, uh, useful.

✓ Actually, to record my life, I just love taking photos of particular moments and telling others about how I feel, how I experience things, and I think photos play a very important role in memorizing useful things.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'I'm just love' should be 'I just love'; 'taken a photo' should be 'taking photos'; 'telling' should be parallel with 'taking'; 'the photo is played' should be 'photos play'; 'to memorizing' should be 'in memorizing'. Also, plural forms are more appropriate here.