Weather— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is informative but could be more natural and concise. Avoid unnecessary capitalization (e.g., 'Four Seasons') and awkward phrasing like 'I lived' instead of 'I live'. Also, avoid ending with 'funny' which seems out of place. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I live in a city that experiences four distinct seasons due to its continental monsoon climate. For example, springs and autumns are mild and comfortable, summers tend to be hot and humid, and winters are cold and snowy. I really enjoy experiencing such a variety of weather throughout the year because it keeps life interesting.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but contains some errors and awkward expressions, such as 'I puff for' instead of 'I prefer', and incomplete sentences. Try to use clear topic sentences and linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid ending abruptly; complete your thoughts fully.

Exemplo: I prefer slightly colder weather to hot and humid conditions because I find muggy weather uncomfortable. For instance, hot weather increases the risk of sunburn and heat exhaustion, which discourages me from going outside. In contrast, cold weather is easier to manage since I can simply wear extra layers to stay warm. Additionally, having lived in Canada, I am quite accustomed to colder climates.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but has some unclear and incomplete parts, such as 'apply most rides' and ending with 'So.' Try to be more specific and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid vague expressions.

Exemplo: I prefer dry weather because it is generally more comfortable than wet conditions. For example, dampness can cause food and paper to become soggy or even mouldy if left exposed for several days. Moreover, in dry weather, I only need to water my plants a couple of times a week, which helps keep them healthy.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'This house needs to decide' and 'And this is what helping me'. Try to use complete sentences and linking words to improve fluency and coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast once a day in the morning before leaving the house. This helps me decide what to wear and whether to bring sunscreen or an umbrella. By doing this, I can avoid sunburn or getting caught in the rain. I also like to bring an extra umbrella for my friends, which they appreciate.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the topic but has several errors and unclear phrases, such as 'the Panthers become unpredictable' which seems incorrect. Try to use accurate vocabulary and complete sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your points logically and be more specific.

Exemplo: I have noticed two major effects of climate change recently. First, the weather has become more extreme, with dangerously high temperatures in summer and very low temperatures in winter. Second, the seasons have become unpredictable; for example, summer arrives about two months earlier and winter about one month earlier, leaving people little time to prepare.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but contains some errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'build the city' instead of 'visit cities'. Also, avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

Exemplo: Definitely, I would love to visit cities with different climates because it's fascinating to see how weather affects daily life and culture. I currently live in a mountainous area with a monsoon climate. For example, I would like to visit coastal cities that have a maritime climate, where the weather is milder and there is more sunshine.

× I lived in the city that experiences distinct Four Seasons because it has a continental monsoon climate.

✓ I live in the city that experiences distinct Four Seasons because it has a continental monsoon climate.

The student used the past tense 'lived' when describing a current situation. Since the student is talking about where they currently live, the present tense 'live' should be used to indicate an ongoing state.

× I lived in the city that experiences distinct Four Seasons because it has a continental monsoon climate.

✓ I live in the city that experiences distinct four seasons because it has a continental monsoon climate.

The word 'Four Seasons' should not be capitalized as it is a common noun phrase here, not a proper noun. Also, 'four seasons' is the correct form to describe the seasons generally.

× I find it fascinating to experience such a variety of weather throughout the year, which makes living here quite enjoyable and funny.

✓ I find it fascinating to experience such a variety of weather throughout the year, which makes living here quite enjoyable and fun.

The word 'funny' means 'amusing' or 'causing laughter,' which is not appropriate here. The correct adjective is 'fun,' meaning 'enjoyable' or 'pleasant.'

× I puff for slightly colder weather to hot and humid conditions because I've found it uncomfortable to be outside when it's very muggy and sticky.

✓ I prefer slightly colder weather to hot and humid conditions because I've found it uncomfortable to be outside when it's very muggy and sticky.

The word 'puff' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'prefer' to express liking one thing more than another.

× I puff for slightly colder weather to hot and humid conditions because I've found it uncomfortable to be outside when it's very muggy and sticky.

✓ I prefer slightly colder weather to hot and humid conditions because I've found it uncomfortable to be outside when it's very muggy and sticky.

The preposition 'for' after 'prefer' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. The correct structure is 'prefer A to B' without 'for.'

× In hot weather there's a lot of high risk of sunburn and heat exhaustion which makes me less willing to go outdoors.

✓ In hot weather there's a high risk of sunburn and heat exhaustion which makes me less willing to go outdoors.

The phrase 'a lot of high risk' is incorrect. 'High risk' is an uncountable noun phrase and should not be preceded by 'a lot of.' The correct phrase is 'there's a high risk.'

× And also I lived in Canada so I'm used to.

✓ And also I lived in Canada so I'm used to it.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the object 'it' after 'used to.' Also, 'lived' is correct if referring to past residence, but the sentence needs completion for clarity.

× For instance, dampness can cause food and paper become soggy or even mouldy after several days to expose in the air.

✓ For instance, dampness can cause food and paper to become soggy or even mouldy after several days exposed to the air.

The verb 'become' needs the infinitive 'to become' after 'cause.' Also, 'to expose in the air' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'exposed to the air.'

× But in the dry weather I only need to apply most rides a couple times a week and that's enough to keep me healthy.

✓ But in dry weather I only need to apply moisturizer a couple of times a week and that's enough to keep me healthy.

The phrase 'most rides' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. It should be 'moisturizer.' Also, 'a couple times' should be 'a couple of times.'

× This house needs to decide whether what should I wear or should I bring sunscreen or umbrella throughout the day.

✓ I need to decide what I should wear or whether I should bring sunscreen or an umbrella throughout the day.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and subject confusion. 'This house needs to decide' is incorrect; the speaker should be the subject. Also, 'whether what should I wear' is ungrammatical; it should be 'what I should wear or whether I should bring...'. Additionally, 'umbrella' needs an article 'an.'

× And this is what helping me to avoid sunburn or being caught in the rain.

✓ And this is what helps me avoid sunburn or being caught in the rain.

The verb form 'helping' is incorrect here; it should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'this.' Also, 'to avoid' is better as 'avoid' after 'helps.'

× And I always bring an extra umbrella for my friends, they found it really thoughtful too.

✓ And I always bring an extra umbrella for my friends; they find it really thoughtful too.

The sentence is a run-on and needs to be separated properly. Also, 'found' should be 'find' to indicate a current opinion.

× There are two major changes that I found unacceptable.

✓ There are two major changes that I find unacceptable.

The verb 'found' is past tense, but the sentence refers to a current opinion, so 'find' in present tense is appropriate.

× First is that the weather became too extreme.

✓ First is that the weather has become too extreme.

The present perfect 'has become' is better to indicate a change that has occurred up to the present.

× The temperature rise really dangerously high in summer and dropping really low in the winter.

✓ The temperature rises really dangerously high in summer and drops really low in the winter.

The verbs 'rise' and 'dropping' need to agree with the subject and be in present tense: 'rises' and 'drops.'

× Secondly, the Panthers become unpredictable for an instant.

✓ Secondly, the patterns become unpredictable instantly.

'Panthers' is incorrect; the intended word is 'patterns.' Also, 'for an instant' is awkward; 'instantly' is better.

× Summer came like 2 months earlier and the winter would be like one month earlier and people have no time to prepare it.

✓ Summer comes about 2 months earlier and winter comes about one month earlier, and people have no time to prepare for it.

The sentence mixes past and conditional tenses incorrectly. Present tense 'comes' is better to describe recurring changes. Also, 'prepare it' should be 'prepare for it.'

× Definitely, I would love to build the city with different climates because it's fascinating to experience how weather effects daily life and culture.

✓ Definitely, I would love to visit cities with different climates because it's fascinating to experience how weather affects daily life and culture.

The verb 'build' is incorrect; the student likely meant 'visit.' Also, 'effects' should be 'affects' as a verb meaning 'influences.'

× I currently live in the middle of the country and surrounded by mountains, so I mostly experience a monsoon climate.

✓ I currently live in the middle of the country and am surrounded by mountains, so I mostly experience a monsoon climate.

The sentence is missing the verb 'am' before 'surrounded' to form the passive voice correctly.

× For example, I would really like to visit coastal cities with a maritime climate where there the weather is milder and you can experience sun.

✓ For example, I would really like to visit coastal cities with a maritime climate where the weather is milder and you can experience sunshine.

The phrase 'where there the weather' is incorrect; it should be 'where the weather.' Also, 'experience sun' is better expressed as 'experience sunshine.'