Weather— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장 구조와 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하는 주제문을 먼저 말한 뒤, 구체적인 이유나 예시를 하나 또는 두 개의 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 중복되는 표현(예: 'I think' 반복)을 줄이고 시제와 어순을 바로 잡아 자연스럽게 말하세요. 또한 감정 표현은 간결하게 연결어로 연결해 보세요 (because, so, however 등).

Exemplo: Where I live, the weather is mostly cloudy with occasional sunny spells. Because we are close to the mountains, it often looks like it will snow, which makes the sky grey. However, when the sun comes out briefly, it always lifts my mood.

Sugestão: 좋은 시작입니다만 문장이 길고 연결이 어색합니다. 선호를 먼저 명확히 말하고, 이유를 간결하게 두 문장 이내로 설명하세요. 부정확한 표현(예: 'doesn't result in a cold')을 정확한 표현으로 바꾸고 관사·복수형을 확인하세요. 연속된 문장은 연결어(for example, so, however)를 사용해 자연스럽게 만드세요.

Exemplo: I prefer hot weather because I can spend more time outdoors and I rarely get colds in warm conditions. In contrast, cold weather makes me feel uncomfortable even when I wear many layers.

Sugestão: 답은 적절하나 표현이 어색하고 불필요한 말이 많습니다. 핵심 이유를 간결히 제시하고, 관련된 구체적 상황(예: 세탁물 건조)을 한두 문장으로 명확히 설명하세요. 모호한 단어('unknowing') 대신 정확한 어휘를 사용하세요.

Exemplo: I prefer dry weather because I live in rented student accommodation and wet weather makes it hard to dry my laundry. If it stays dry, my clothes dry quickly and I don't need to use a dryer.

Sugestão: 구조가 괜찮고 이유도 제시했습니다. 다만 어색한 표현('see the forecast as possible as I can')과 중복을 줄이세요. 빈도와 시기를 명확히 하고 연결어를 사용해 문장 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

Exemplo: Yes, during the semester I check the forecast every morning because I need to know if it will rain and to choose appropriate clothes. Due to unpredictable weather changes in Seoul, I also check it again before going out.

Sugestão: 의도는 분명하나 표현이 어색하고 단어 선택(예: 'disorganized')이 부적절합니다. 간단한 주제문을 제시한 뒤, 구체적 예시(해당 연도의 이상기후)를 연결어(because, for example)로 명확하게 설명하세요. 날짜와 사건을 자연스럽게 말하고 'negative incident' 대신 'unusual' 혹은 'disruptive' 같은 단어를 쓰세요.

Exemplo: I think one major effect is more unpredictable and extreme weather. For example, in 2025 Seoul experienced unexpected snowfall in spring, which disrupted daily life and highlighted how climate patterns are changing.

Sugestão: 응답은 적절하지만 문법과 어휘에 약간의 오류가 있습니다. 선호를 먼저 말하고, 이유와 구체적 목적지(Italy, Greece)를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 어색한 표현('most various', 'it would happy')는 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I'd love to visit places with different climates, especially the Mediterranean. For example, I want to go to Italy or Greece to experience the sunny, mild climate there, which is quite different from Korea.

× The place where I live is whole and I think overall the weather is cloudy and sometimes sunny.

✓ The place where I live is small, and overall the weather is cloudy and sometimes sunny.

'Whole' is incorrectly used to describe a place; 'whole' means entire. Use an appropriate adjective like 'small' or 'quiet' depending on intended meaning. Also add a comma and conjunction to join clauses properly.

× I thought.

✓ I think so.

Student used past tense 'thought' in a context describing a current opinion. Use present tense 'think' to express present belief.

× I think the reason why the weather is cloudy is because I think it's gonna snow a lot and at the moment, so that's why sometimes sunny it makes me happy, but cloudy it makes me.

✓ I think the reason it is cloudy is that it will snow a lot at the moment, so when it is sometimes sunny it makes me happy, but when it is cloudy it depresses me.

Sentence is disorganized and redundant (multiple 'I think'). 'Gonna' is informal and should be 'will'. 'Because' followed by 'is because' is wordy—use 'is that'. 'It makes me' is incomplete; specify emotion (e.g., 'depresses me'). Use consistent clause structure and connectors.

× I rather prefer hot weather because in hot weather I can go outside a lot and but that doesn't result in a cold or some illness.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I can go outside a lot in hot weather, and that doesn't usually cause me to get a cold or other illnesses.

'I rather prefer' is incorrect; say 'I prefer' or 'I'd rather'. 'But' after 'and' is redundant. Use 'usually' and correct verb phrase 'cause me to get a cold'.

× But in cold weather, although I put a lot of clothes in every sweaters outers on my body, that doesn't really result in overcoming the cold.

✓ But in cold weather, although I wear many layers of sweaters and coats, that doesn't really help me overcome the cold.

Incorrect preposition 'in' with 'put clothes in'. Use 'wear'. 'Every sweaters outers' is ungrammatical; use 'many layers of sweaters and coats'. 'Result in overcoming' is wrong collocation; use 'help me overcome'.

× I think I prefer the dry weather because now I'm living in a room rent for the university and I if I have to do the laundry personally it's too unknowing if I have to dry it on the wet weather because it doesn't really dry well.

✓ I think I prefer dry weather because I'm currently renting a room for university, and if I have to do laundry myself it's difficult to dry clothes in wet weather because they don't dry well.

'Room rent for the university' is awkward; use 'renting a room for university'. 'Do the laundry personally' is better as 'do laundry myself'. 'Too unknowing' is incorrect; use 'difficult'. Prepositions fixed: 'dry it on the wet weather' -> 'dry clothes in wet weather'.

× When I am in the semester, I usually check the forecast every day because sometimes I can't really predict whether the rain is coming and also I have to choose the outfit that is perfect for the weather.

✓ During the semester, I usually check the forecast every day because I can't always predict when the rain will come and I need to choose an outfit suitable for the weather.

'When I am in the semester' is unnatural; use 'During the semester'. Use 'can't always predict when the rain will come' instead of 'whether the rain is coming'. 'Perfect for the weather' -> 'suitable for the weather'.

× But because of the climate change, Seoul has so many variations, so I just try to see the forecast as possible as I can.

✓ Because of climate change, Seoul has many variations in weather, so I try to check the forecast as often as I can.

Avoid starting with 'But' when not contrasting. 'The climate change' -> 'climate change'. 'See the forecast as possible as I can' is incorrect; use 'check the forecast as often as I can'.

× I think the biggest part is that there is the weather is so disorganized.

✓ I think the main issue is that the weather has become very unpredictable.

'There is the weather is' is ungrammatical redundancy. Use 'the weather has become very unpredictable' to convey the idea. 'Biggest part' is awkward; use 'main issue'.

× In 2025 in Seoul, there was a snow coming that was kind of like a very negative incident because almost every day was almost close to the spring, but that day was very unusual.

✓ In 2025 in Seoul, there was a snowfall that was quite unusual and negative because almost every day had felt like spring, but that day was very different.

'There was a snow coming' is incorrect; use 'there was a snowfall' or 'snow'. 'Almost every day was almost close to the spring' is redundant; use 'had felt like spring'. Maintain past tense consistently and choose correct noun forms.

× Yes, I want to. Although Korea has one of the most various climate in the world, I want to know what how the climate is in Mediterranean areas.

✓ Yes, I do. Although Korea has one of the most varied climates in the world, I want to know what the climate is like in Mediterranean areas.

'I want to' is okay but 'Yes, I do' fits conversation. 'Most various climate' is wrong; use 'most varied climates'. 'What how the climate is' has extra word 'how'; use 'what the climate is like'.

× So I want to visit Italy or Greece to see how climate is very different from Korea.

✓ So I want to visit Italy or Greece to see how the climate is very different from Korea.

Missing article 'the' before 'climate'. The sentence otherwise needs the article to be grammatical.

× It would be much better because it's very sunny. I think it would happy.

✓ It would be great because it's very sunny. I think it would make me happy.

'It would happy' is ungrammatical; need a verb 'make' to link to 'happy'. Use 'great' instead of 'much better' for natural phrasing; keep conditional 'would'.