Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more precise and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I usually eat snacks during my daily study breaks. For example, after studying for half an hour, I take a short break and buy snacks from a shop near my study center.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to make your answer more coherent. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I think eating snacks is not healthy because they are often oily and can harm our health. However, sometimes I eat them in emergencies when I am very hungry.

Sugestão: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Avoid informal or inappropriate words like 'fatty'. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks during my childhood. As a result, I gained weight and faced some liver problems due to consuming oily snacks frequently.

Sugestão: Your answer is repetitive and lacks variety in sentence structure. Try to avoid repeating words like 'usually' and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about your preferences.

Exemplo: In my free time, I like to eat snacks such as pakode, sandwiches, and patties. These are my regular choices because they are tasty and easy to find.

× Usually I eat snacks in my daily routine because I am currently studying my aisles.

✓ Usually I eat snacks as part of my daily routine because I am currently studying my aisles.

The phrase 'in my daily routine' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'as part of my daily routine' to express habitual action. This is a preposition usage issue (ID 11), but since the main verb tense is present simple and the issue is with preposition, the correction focuses on preposition usage.

× Usually I eat snacks in my daily routine because I am currently studying my aisles.

✓ Usually I eat snacks as part of my daily routine because I am currently studying my aisles.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'my daily routine'. The correct preposition is 'as part of' to indicate habitual action within a routine.

× Then I have a break for half an hour, then I eat snacks from a shop near my center.

✓ Then I have a break for half an hour, then I eat snacks at a shop near my center.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect when referring to the place where you eat snacks. The correct preposition is 'at' to indicate location.

× No, it is not healthy for us because snacks are very oily and very bad for our health.

✓ No, it is not healthy for me because snacks are very oily and very bad for my health.

The pronouns 'us' and 'our' are incorrect because the speaker is talking about themselves, so singular pronouns 'me' and 'my' should be used.

× I usually want to avoid to eat snacks but sometime in emergency I want to eat them.

✓ I usually want to avoid eating snacks but sometimes in an emergency I want to eat them.

The verb 'avoid' should be followed by the gerund form 'eating' not the infinitive 'to eat'. Also, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' and 'in emergency' should be 'in an emergency'.

× Just in my childhood I eat snacks very much, that's why I'm so fatty and I have some problems in liver because of that.

✓ When I was a child, I ate snacks a lot, that's why I'm so fat and I have some liver problems because of that.

The past tense 'ate' should be used instead of 'eat' to refer to past habits. 'Just in my childhood' is awkward; 'When I was a child' is better. 'Fatty' is an adjective describing food, not a person; 'fat' is correct. 'Problems in liver' should be 'liver problems'.

× Just in my childhood I eat snacks very much, that's why I'm so fatty and I have some problems in liver because of that.

✓ When I was a child, I ate snacks a lot, that's why I'm so fat and I have some liver problems because of that.

'Fatty' is an adjective used for food, not people. The correct adjective to describe a person is 'fat'.

× Just in my childhood I eat snacks very much, that's why I'm so fatty and I have some problems in liver because of that.

✓ When I was a child, I ate snacks a lot, that's why I'm so fat and I have some liver problems because of that.

The phrase 'in liver' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'liver problems' without a preposition.

× Usually I eat snacks in my free time and I usually eat pakode and sandwich and patties in my regular basis of day.

✓ Usually I eat snacks in my free time and I usually eat pakode, sandwiches, and patties regularly during the day.

'Sandwich' should be plural 'sandwiches' to match the plural items. 'In my regular basis of day' is incorrect; 'regularly during the day' is correct. Also, commas are needed to separate items in a list.