Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding repetition and filler words. Use clear linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar mistakes, such as 'I participate in classes at university' instead of 'I participated in a classrooms'.

Exemplo: I usually eat snacks during my breaks at university because attending classes makes me tired. I prefer sweet snacks since they quickly give me energy.

Sugestão: Avoid excessive filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas and provide specific reasons why snacks can be unhealthy and when they might be acceptable.

Exemplo: Actually, most snacks, such as fast foods, contain unhealthy ingredients like cheese and oil. However, when you need a quick energy boost, eating snacks can be helpful.

Sugestão: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words like 'because' and 'so'. Also, avoid redundancy and improve grammar, for example, 'I used to eat so many snacks that I couldn't eat my main meals.'

Exemplo: Yes, when I was a child, I used to eat so many snacks that I often skipped my main meals. So, as I grew up, I tried to avoid this bad habit and live a healthier lifestyle.

Sugestão: Reduce filler words and improve linking phrases. Use 'on the other hand' correctly and provide more specific examples of snacks you like. Also, explain why you like them clearly and concisely.

Exemplo: I like to eat fast foods such as fries, and on the other hand, I enjoy sweet snacks like chocolate because they give me quick energy.

× Currently, because I participated in a classrooms at university, it makes me so exhausted and gives me energy.

✓ Currently, because I participated in classrooms at university, it makes me so exhausted and gives me energy.

The definite article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'classrooms'. In English, plural nouns do not take the indefinite article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× Currently, because I participated in a classrooms at university, it makes me so exhausted and gives me energy.

✓ Currently, because I participate in classes at university, it makes me so exhausted and gives me energy.

The preposition 'in' is acceptable, but 'participated' is past tense while the context suggests a current habit, so present tense 'participate' is better. Also, 'classrooms' is less natural than 'classes' when referring to attending lessons.

× I prefer and enjoy to eat sweet things.

✓ I prefer and enjoy eating sweet things.

After verbs like 'prefer' and 'enjoy', the gerund (-ing form) is used rather than the infinitive 'to eat'. Using 'eating' is grammatically correct here.

× Uh, actually, no, because the most of, uh, snacks are, uh, like fast foods and they have a lot of cheese oil on it and, and something that is unhealthy for our body.

✓ Uh, actually, no, because most snacks are like fast foods and they have a lot of cheese and oil in them, which is unhealthy for our body.

The phrase 'the most of' is incorrect; it should be 'most' without 'the'. Also, 'on it' is incorrect when referring to food contents; 'in them' is appropriate. 'Cheese oil' is unclear; separating 'cheese and oil' clarifies meaning.

× Uh, but uh, for the short time that you have and you need to boost your energy, snacks are good choices.

✓ Uh, but uh, for the short time that you have and need to boost your energy, snacks are good choices.

The repeated subject 'you' is unnecessary in the second clause; omitting it improves sentence flow and correctness.

× Yes, I can remember clearly that when I was a child I ate a snack so much in a way that I couldn't eat my main meals at all.

✓ Yes, I can remember clearly that when I was a child I ate snacks so much that I couldn't eat my main meals at all.

'A snack so much' is incorrect because 'snack' is countable and should be plural 'snacks' when referring to quantity. Also, 'in a way that' is unnecessarily wordy; 'so much that' is more natural.

× And after that I grew up. I tried to avoid these bad habits and get back to my healthier lifestyle.

✓ And after that I grew up. I tried to avoid those bad habits and get back to my healthier lifestyle.

'These' refers to something close to the speaker; since the habits are in the past, 'those' is more appropriate.

× Uh, I like to eat, uh, fast foods, uh, and uh, in the other hand, I like to eat sweet things too, uh, because, uh, they can help me to, uh, have a lot of energy in a, a short while.

✓ Uh, I like to eat, uh, fast foods, uh, and, on the other hand, I like to eat sweet things too, uh, because, uh, they can help me to, uh, have a lot of energy in a short while.

The phrase 'in the other hand' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'on the other hand'. Also, 'a, a short while' has an unnecessary comma.