Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'when there are too many works though I will try to eat some snacks', say 'especially when I have a lot of work'. Also, correct verb forms and use more natural expressions.

Exemplo: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed, especially when I have a lot of work. Eating snacks helps me relax and feel happier because it releases dopamine.

Sugestão: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases like 'not heavy for me'. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly. For example, say 'I think eating snacks is unhealthy because they often contain sugar, fat, and saturated fats.'

Exemplo: I think eating snacks is unhealthy because most of them contain sugar, fat, and sometimes saturated fats, which are bad for my health.

Sugestão: Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. For example, say 'I didn't often eat snacks as a child because they were expensive and my parents thought they were unhealthy.'

Exemplo: I didn't often eat snacks as a child because they were expensive, and my parents believed they were unhealthy.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but could be improved by linking sentences smoothly and varying vocabulary. For example, use 'such as' instead of 'for example' and connect ideas with linking words.

Exemplo: I prefer sugary snacks because I enjoy sweet foods, such as chocolate ice cream, candies, and cookies. These are my favourite snacks to eat when I feel stressed.

× I mostly eat snacks when I feel stressed and when there are too many works though I will try to eat some snacks to make myself feel relaxed and happier 'cause when I am eating snacks it release dopamine.

✓ I mostly eat snacks when I feel stressed and when there is too much work though I will try to eat some snacks to make myself feel relaxed and happier 'cause when I am eating snacks it releases dopamine.

The word 'works' is incorrect here because 'work' is an uncountable noun when referring to tasks or job duties, so it should be singular and uncountable as 'work'. Also, 'it release dopamine' is incorrect because the subject 'it' is third person singular and requires the verb to be 'releases' to agree in number.

× I mostly eat snacks when I feel stressed and when there are too many works though I will try to eat some snacks to make myself feel relaxed and happier 'cause when I am eating snacks it release dopamine.

✓ I mostly eat snacks when I feel stressed and when there is too much work though I will try to eat some snacks to make myself feel relaxed and happier 'cause when I am eating snacks it releases dopamine.

The verb 'release' must be in the third person singular form 'releases' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a common subject-verb agreement rule in English.

× I think it is not healthy for me to eat snacks because most of the snacks I choose contains sugars and fat, oil or sometimes even saturated fats.

✓ I think it is not healthy for me to eat snacks because most of the snacks I choose contain sugar and fat, oil or sometimes even saturated fats.

The verb 'contains' should be 'contain' because the subject 'most of the snacks' is plural. Also, 'sugars' should be 'sugar' as it is generally uncountable in this context.

× That's why I think it is not heavy for me to eat this.

✓ That's why I think it is not healthy for me to eat this.

The word 'heavy' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is 'healthy'. 'Heavy' refers to weight or density, not healthiness. This is a misuse of vocabulary rather than a grammar issue but affects clarity.

× I didn't often eat snacks when I were a kid because most of the snacks were very expensive and my parents wouldn't buy those snacks for me because they think the snacks were not healthy and it's not.

✓ I didn't often eat snacks when I was a kid because most of the snacks were very expensive and my parents wouldn't buy those snacks for me because they thought the snacks were not healthy and they weren't.

The verb 'were' should be 'was' to agree with the singular subject 'I' in the past tense. Also, 'think' should be 'thought' to maintain past tense consistency. 'It's not' should be 'they weren't' to refer correctly to the plural 'snacks' and maintain past tense.