Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Faut que tu fasses attention à la clarté pis à la structure de ta réponse. Essaie de commencer avec une phrase claire qui répond directement à la question, pis après, ajoute des détails spécifiques avec des mots de liaison pour que ça coule mieux. Aussi, évite les répétitions pis les erreurs grammaticales.

Exemplo: I usually eat snacks during my first break in the evening at home. I enjoy Indian snacks like gurukiri glaze and other spicy varieties, which I always buy at Superstore.

Sugestão: Faut que tu évites les contradictions dans ta phrase pis que tu utilises des mots de liaison appropriés. Aussi, fais attention à la grammaire et à la précision des idées. Essaie de donner une opinion claire suivie d'explications spécifiques.

Exemplo: Although I eat snacks every day, I don't recommend eating them daily because it can negatively affect both mental and physical health. Doctors suggest eating more fruits instead of snacks for better health.

Sugestão: Faut que tu sois plus clair pis précis dans ta réponse. Évite les répétitions et les erreurs, et assure-toi que tes phrases sont complètes. Utilise des mots de liaison pour organiser tes idées et donne des détails spécifiques.

Exemplo: Yes, I ate a lot of snacks when I was young. My father often bought me Indian snacks like sweets and sugar treats. However, my mother worried about my health and advised me not to eat too many snacks.

Sugestão: Faut que tu clarifies les noms des snacks et évites les erreurs de vocabulaire. Aussi, organise ta réponse avec une phrase principale suivie de détails spécifiques, en utilisant des mots de liaison pour la fluidité.

Exemplo: I like many snacks such as curry leaves, balubujiya, and spicy snacks. However, my favorites are Allupuchia and Kurkure, which I usually buy at Superstore. I enjoy eating them during my work breaks.

× I eat snack and in my first break in the evening at home, I love Indian snacks such as gurukiri glaze and another kind of spicy snacks.

✓ I eat snacks in my first break in the evening at home. I love Indian snacks such as gurukiri glaze and other kinds of spicy snacks.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to match the context of eating multiple items. Also, 'another kind of spicy snacks' is incorrect because 'another' refers to singular, so it should be 'other kinds of spicy snacks' to indicate plural.

× Although I eat snacks every day, however I don't recommend to eat snack eat snacks everyday.

✓ Although I eat snacks every day, I don't recommend eating snacks every day.

The phrase 'eat snack eat snacks' is incorrect and redundant. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. Also, 'recommend to eat' is incorrect; the correct form is 'recommend eating'. The word 'however' is redundant after 'although' and should be removed.

× Doctor suggest to have more fruits rather than snacks for the for your body.

✓ Doctors suggest having more fruits rather than snacks for your body.

The verb 'suggest' is followed by a gerund ('having'), not an infinitive ('to have'). Also, 'Doctor' should be plural 'Doctors' to generalize the advice. The phrase 'for the for your body' has an extra 'for' which should be removed.

× Yes I did eat, I did eat snacks too much when I was skate.

✓ Yes, I did eat. I ate too many snacks when I was skating.

The phrase 'I did eat' is acceptable but repetitive; better to say 'I ate'. 'Too much' should be 'too many' because 'snacks' is countable. 'When I was skate' is incorrect; the correct form is 'when I was skating' (present participle for past continuous action).

× My mother always excused me to not to have a too many snacks because ** *** was worried about my health.

✓ My mother always advised me not to have too many snacks because she was worried about my health.

The verb 'excused' is incorrect here; 'advised' or 'told' is appropriate. The phrase 'to not to have' is incorrect; it should be 'not to have'. 'A too many' is incorrect; 'too many' alone is correct. The pronoun '** ***' is unclear and should be 'she' referring to the mother.

× There are many snacks such as leaves or Curry, balubujiya, and spicy schnapps.

✓ There are many snacks such as leaves, curry, balubujiya, and spicy snacks.

The word 'Curry' should be lowercase 'curry' as it is a common noun here. 'Schnapps' is a type of alcoholic drink, likely a misspelling of 'snacks'. It should be 'spicy snacks' to be consistent and plural.

× However, Allupuchia and Kurkure are my favorite snacks.

✓ However, Allupuchiya and Kurkure are my favorite snacks.

The word 'Allupuchia' seems misspelled; the correct spelling is 'Allupuchiya'. Proper nouns should be spelled correctly.

× I enjoy those snacks at my during my work breaks.

✓ I enjoy those snacks during my work breaks.

The phrase 'at my during' is incorrect; only 'during' is needed to indicate the time when the snacks are enjoyed.