Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your speech more fluent and natural. Also, use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

Exemplo: I usually eat snacks in the evening because that's when I engage in my hobbies. For example, having a small snack while reading books or painting makes the experience more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Focus on clearer sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with grammar and word choice to improve clarity.

Exemplo: In my opinion, eating snacks in limited amounts can be healthy; however, consuming large quantities may negatively affect our health. Therefore, I prefer to eat only a small amount while doing my hobbies.

Sugestão: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid filler words and correct grammar mistakes. Use linking words like 'for example' and 'but' appropriately to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially chocolates. For example, my grandmother used to buy me chocolates and cake after school, which negatively affected my health. However, once I became aware of this, I stopped eating them.

Sugestão: Make your answer more concise and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use clear and complete sentences with appropriate vocabulary. Also, finish your thoughts fully to avoid confusion.

Exemplo: I prefer eating chocolates because I like them more than vanilla snacks. My grandmother used to buy me chocolates after school, but I gradually stopped eating them because they had a negative effect on my health.

× I usually consume snacks, uh, during evening because umm umm, that's the time I umm, I will be doing my hobbies.

✓ I usually consume snacks, uh, during the evening because umm umm, that's the time I umm, I am doing my hobbies.

The use of 'will be doing' suggests future tense, but the context is about a habitual action in the present, so present continuous 'am doing' is more appropriate.

× I usually consume snacks, uh, during evening because umm umm, that's the time I umm, I will be doing my hobbies.

✓ I usually consume snacks, uh, during the evening because umm umm, that's the time I umm, I will be doing my hobbies.

The phrase 'during evening' is incorrect; 'evening' as a time of day requires the definite article 'the' to be grammatically correct.

× Having umm umm, edible uh, next to you while uh, reading books or umm uh, painting is a very good combination.

✓ Having umm umm, edible uh, next to me while uh, reading books or umm uh, painting is a very good combination.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to their own experience, so 'me' should be used.

× In my opinion, a consuming snacks, umm umm very in a limited amount uh, is her can be healthy uh, but umm, consuming them in umm uh, a large amount can also be a negative uh umm, effect on our uh, health.

✓ In my opinion, consuming snacks, umm umm very in a limited amount uh, can be healthy uh, but umm, consuming them in umm uh, a large amount can also have a negative uh umm, effect on our uh, health.

The phrase 'a consuming snacks' is incorrect; 'consuming snacks' without 'a' is correct. Also, 'is her can be healthy' is incorrect; 'can be healthy' is the correct modal verb usage. Additionally, 'can also be a negative effect' should be 'can also have a negative effect' for correct collocation.

× So I prefer to eat only umm uh, limited amount during my while I do my hobbies.

✓ So I prefer to eat only umm uh, a limited amount while I do my hobbies.

The phrase 'limited amount' needs the article 'a' before it. Also, 'during my while I do my hobbies' is incorrect; 'while I do my hobbies' is sufficient and correct.

× Yes, I did often eat snacks when I was hung, especially chocolates, for example, umm, when I was umm, umm, when I came uh, back from my school, my grandmother always used to, uh, buy me uh, chocolates and cake, which uh, was a umm, negative, which had a negative effect on my health back then.

✓ Yes, I did often eat snacks when I was young, especially chocolates. For example, umm, when I was umm, umm, when I came uh, back from my school, my grandmother always used to, uh, buy me uh, chocolates and cake, which uh, had a umm, negative effect on my health back then.

The word 'hung' is a typo and should be 'young'. Also, 'which uh, was a umm, negative, which had a negative effect' is redundant and awkward; it is better to say 'which had a negative effect'.

× But uh, once I got to know the these things, I uh, stopped doing it.

✓ But uh, once I got to know these things, I uh, stopped doing it.

The phrase 'the these things' is incorrect; 'these things' is correct without 'the'. The past tense 'got to know' and 'stopped' are correctly used here.

× I'd always prefer, uh, eating chocolates because, uh, umm, I am uh, more of a chocolate, umm, uh, girl than a vanilla girl.

✓ I'd always prefer, uh, eating chocolates because, uh, umm, I am uh, more of a chocolate, umm, uh, girl than a vanilla girl.

No grammatical error detected in this sentence related to pronouns or other listed grammar problems.

× So I always used to have, especially my grandmother used to buy me chocolates when I, when I come to home, uh, from my, umm, uh, school.

✓ So I always used to have, especially my grandmother used to buy me chocolates when I, when I came home, uh, from my, umm, uh, school.

The verb 'come' should be in past tense 'came' to match the past habitual action indicated by 'used to'.

× But I, you uh, gradually stopped eating it as it played a very, uh, negative effect on.

✓ But I, you uh, gradually stopped eating it as it had a very, uh, negative effect on me.

The phrase 'played a very negative effect on' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'had a very negative effect on'. Also, the sentence is incomplete without specifying the object of the effect, so 'on me' is added.