Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer clearer and more concise by avoiding filler words and unclear phrases. Also, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. For example, clarify the timing and reason for eating snacks without hesitation or repetition.

Exemplo: I usually eat snacks during my one-hour break at work. I prefer chocolate because it gives me quick energy to stay focused during the rest of my shift.

Sugestão: Improve your answer by organizing your ideas more clearly and using linking words to contrast different types of snacks. Also, be more specific about which snacks are healthy and why, and avoid hesitation and repetition.

Exemplo: I think it depends on the type of snack. For example, chocolate can be healthy because it contains nutrients like vitamin E. However, snacks like potato chips are unhealthy due to their high fat and salt content.

Sugestão: Make your answer more fluent and structured by reducing hesitation and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific details about the occasions and reasons for eating snacks with friends, using linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: When I was young, I often ate snacks with my friends. For instance, whenever we hung out, someone would bring snacks so we could share them and enjoy our time together.

Sugestão: Try to speak more clearly and avoid filler words. Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to explain your preference for healthy snacks and give specific examples.

Exemplo: Nowadays, I focus on my health, so I prefer healthy snacks that are rich in nutrients and protein. For example, after working out, I like to eat protein bars because they help build muscle.

× I usually eat snacks during my break time, uh, which is the one hour of The Walking, uh, orbiters job.

✓ I usually eat snacks during my break time, uh, which is the one hour of the walking orbiters job.

The definite article 'the' should not be capitalized in the middle of a sentence unless it is part of a proper noun. Here, 'the walking orbiters job' is a common noun phrase, so 'the' should be lowercase.

× And I usually eat chocolate as a snack because, uh, which because it offers a lot of energy to focus on the less time of work.

✓ And I usually eat chocolate as a snack because it offers a lot of energy to focus during the short time of work.

The phrase 'because, uh, which because' is redundant and incorrect. Only one conjunction 'because' is needed to explain the reason. Also, 'less time of work' is awkward; 'short time of work' is clearer.

× I think it depends on know how what kind of snack it is because the chocolate or some snacks are good.

✓ I think it depends on knowing what kind of snack it is because chocolate or some snacks are good.

The phrase 'depends on know how what kind of snack it is' is incorrect. The correct form is 'depends on knowing what kind of snack it is' where 'knowing' is a gerund acting as the object of the preposition 'on'.

× But some snacks such as potted potatoes or some chips, it's not good for health.

✓ But some snacks such as potato chips or some chips are not good for health.

The phrase 'potted potatoes' is incorrect; the correct term is 'potato chips'. Also, 'it's not good' should be 'they are not good' to agree with the plural subject 'snacks'.

× When I was a young, I often ate, ate uh, snacks, uh, with my friends.

✓ When I was young, I often ate snacks with my friends.

The phrase 'a young' is incorrect; 'young' is an adjective and does not need an article here. Also, the repeated 'ate' is unnecessary.

× Umm, uh, when I go hang out with my friend, I owe you often bring some snacks to the place because I we can share the snacks to enjoy the time and conversation.

✓ Umm, uh, when I go hang out with my friends, I often bring some snacks to the place because we can share the snacks to enjoy the time and conversation.

The phrase 'I owe you often bring' is incorrect; it should be 'I often bring'. Also, 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match the context. The phrase 'I we can share' is incorrect; it should be 'we can share'.

× These days I pay attention to my health well-being, so I like to eat snacks related to the some, umm, healthy snacks contains a lot of nutrients or some proteins.

✓ These days I pay attention to my health and well-being, so I like to eat snacks related to some healthy snacks that contain a lot of nutrients or some proteins.

The phrase 'the some' is incorrect; it should be just 'some'. Also, 'contains' should be 'contain' to agree with the plural subject 'snacks'.

× So I when I work out, I prefer to eat a proteins bar, which is, which contains a lot of proteins to, uh, make my muscles, which I think is.

✓ So when I work out, I prefer to eat a protein bar, which contains a lot of protein to, uh, build my muscles, which I think is good.

The phrase 'a proteins bar' is incorrect; it should be 'a protein bar' because 'protein' is uncountable here. Also, 'proteins' should be singular 'protein' to match the context. 'Make my muscles' is awkward; 'build my muscles' is more appropriate. The sentence was incomplete, so 'which I think is good' completes the thought.