Snacks— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use clearer phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “very depressed” and “bad mood” mean the same). Try to use varied vocabulary (e.g., "stressed," "after long meetings").

Exemplo: I usually snack when I feel stressed. For example, if I have a day full of meetings, I often grab a small snack like fruit or nuts after a meeting to relax and regain energy.

Sugestão: Use grammatically correct phrases and a clear structure: state your opinion, give reasons and examples, and use linking words. Correct article and comparative forms ("snacks with less sugar", "healthier than sugary snacks").

Exemplo: Yes, I think it can be healthy if I choose low-sugar options. For example, I usually eat fruit, cereal, or corn-based snacks because they contain less sugar and more fiber, which is healthier than candy.

Sugestão: Use past tense consistently and combine short fragments into full sentences. Give one clear reason or a specific memory and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "usually", "often", or "because" correctly.

Exemplo: Yes, I ate snacks very often when I was young. For example, I usually had a sweet treat from my mother after school, so I often ate a lot of candy because it felt like a special reward.

Sugestão: Contrast past and present clearly with correct tense and concise phrasing. Begin with a topic sentence, then use a linking word to contrast (e.g., "now" or "but") and give specific examples. Use correct comparative forms ("less sugary").

Exemplo: As a child I preferred chocolate and sour candy, but now I prefer healthier snacks. For instance, I often choose corn-based snacks, cereals, or other less sugary options.

× I usually eat snacks when I'm very depressed or have bad mood.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I'm very depressed or in a bad mood.

The original sentence mixes correct present tense but uses the incorrect phrase 'have bad mood'. Use 'in a bad mood' which is the correct collocation. Also keep present simple 'I usually eat' because it describes habitual action.

× For example, I usually eat snacks when I'm very busy or have a lot of meetings in one day and after meeting I will eat.

✓ For example, I usually eat snacks when I'm very busy or have a lot of meetings in one day, and after meetings I eat.

The sentence should keep consistent present simple tense for habitual actions ('I usually eat'). Replace 'after meeting I will eat' with 'after meetings I eat' for correct tense and plural form. Also add plural 'meetings' and a comma before 'and'.

× I prefer to eat snacks that less sugar, for example fruits or cereal or some corn snacks, and I think that kind of snack is very healthy instead of sugar.

✓ I prefer to eat snacks with less sugar, for example fruit, cereal, or some corn snacks, and I think those kinds of snacks are healthier than sugary ones.

Use the preposition 'with' for 'with less sugar'. 'Fruits' is better as uncountable 'fruit' in this context. 'That kind of snack' is inconsistent with the plural list; use 'those kinds of snacks' and comparative 'healthier than sugary ones'. Also corrected adjective/adverb and article usage for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I eat snacks very often. When I was young. I usually eat snacks when I go home after school and my mom will give me a sugar candy for a treat, but I often eat a lot.

✓ Yes, I ate snacks very often when I was young. I usually ate snacks when I went home after school, and my mom gave me a candy as a treat, but I often ate a lot.

Talking about past habits requires past tense: change 'eat' to 'ate', 'go' to 'went', and 'will give' to 'gave'. Combine fragments into full sentences and change 'a sugar candy' to 'a candy' or 'a piece of candy'. Maintain past tense for consistency.

× When I was a child I prefer to eat chocolate or sour candy, but for now I like to eat some snacks healthy, for example corn snacks or cereal or some less sugar.

✓ When I was a child I preferred to eat chocolate or sour candy, but now I like to eat healthier snacks, for example corn snacks or cereal with less sugar.

Use past tense 'preferred' for childhood preferences. Replace 'for now' with 'now'. 'Some snacks healthy' is ungrammatical; use 'healthier snacks'. Also 'cereal or some less sugar' should be 'cereal with less sugar' for correct preposition and clarity.