Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to make your response more concise and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better naturalness.

Exemplo: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because staying calm helps me manage difficult situations effectively. For example, when faced with delays, I try to remain composed to find a solution rather than getting frustrated.

Sugestão: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. Try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas logically. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific examples to clarify your feelings of impatience.

Exemplo: Although I am usually patient, I feel impatient when people are late or rude to me. For instance, if someone delays a meeting without notice, I find it hard to stay calm because it wastes my time.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid fragmented sentences and ensure your ideas are fully expressed. Use linking words to connect your thoughts coherently.

Exemplo: I feel motivated when I work on a task for a long time because it allows me to gain deeper knowledge and improve my skills. For example, studying a subject thoroughly helps me understand it better and perform well.

Sugestão: Your answer has good content but is affected by hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific examples.

Exemplo: Yes, my job as a security guard requires a lot of patience because I interact with many different people daily. If I don't remain patient and polite, people might get upset or rude, which can make my work more difficult.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat confusing and incomplete. Try to clearly compare your patience now and in the past with specific reasons. Use linking words to organize your ideas and avoid hesitations.

Exemplo: I believe I am more patient now than when I was a child. Although I was polite and patient before, the stresses of studies and expenses have taught me to manage my emotions better and stay calm in difficult situations.

× I easily handle the situation with calmness because according to me, if we show a calmness so we can easily tackle the situation and if the situation is going on worse.

✓ I easily handle situations with calmness because, according to me, if we show calmness, we can easily tackle the situation even if it is getting worse.

The phrase 'if we show a calmness so we can' is incorrect because 'calmness' is an uncountable noun and does not need an article 'a'. Also, 'if the situation is going on worse' is awkward; it should be 'if it is getting worse' to correctly express progressive worsening. The sentence structure was improved for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× As earlier I said, I, I considered myself as a patient person, but yes, sometimes, uh, when I, when I'm in, when I'm impatient, it totally varies on situation, uh, when somebody is delayed or when somebody just umm, bash me.

✓ As I said earlier, I consider myself a patient person, but yes, sometimes, when I'm impatient, it totally depends on the situation, such as when somebody is delayed or when somebody just bashes me.

The original sentence had incorrect tense ('considered' should be present tense 'consider' to match the context), awkward phrasing ('varies on situation' should be 'depends on the situation'), and incorrect verb form ('bash' should be 'bashes' to agree with singular 'somebody'). Also, 'considered myself as' is incorrect; it should be 'consider myself' without 'as'.

× For silver energetic, when I have to do something for a long time because it boosts my energy as well as it has made to get to know about the knowledge about that certain thing moreover I can easily. Moreover, I can I'm perfect if I do the.

✓ I feel energetic when I have to do something for a long time because it boosts my energy and helps me gain knowledge about that particular thing. Moreover, I can do it perfectly if I keep doing it.

The original sentence was fragmented and unclear. 'For silver energetic' is incorrect and unclear; it was replaced with 'I feel energetic'. The sentence was restructured to clearly express the ideas: energy boost, gaining knowledge, and improving performance with practice.

× Yes, uh, currently I'm working as a security guard. So we met, uh, different type of people on a daily basis. Uh, so every time we have to, uh, show a patient to in front of others because if we didn't show the patients and uh, we didn't talk with politeness, so they easily blame us and also rude to us and some.

✓ Yes, currently I'm working as a security guard. We meet different types of people on a daily basis. So every time, we have to show patience in front of others because if we don't show patience and don't speak politely, they easily blame us and can be rude to us.

The original sentence had incorrect adjective use ('patient' should be 'patience'), incorrect plural form ('different type' should be 'different types'), and tense inconsistency ('didn't show' should be 'don't show' to match present tense). Also, 'talk with politeness' was corrected to 'speak politely' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I still remember when I was a child, uh, I have too much patience level, uh, and moreover, I'm very well politeness.

✓ Yes, I still remember when I was a child, I had a high level of patience, and moreover, I was very polite.

'Patience level' is countable and should be 'a high level of patience'. 'I'm very well politeness' is incorrect; 'politeness' is a noun, so it should be 'I was very polite' using the adjective form. Also, tense was changed to past to match 'when I was a child'.

× Uh, I, I talk with everybody with politeness, but nowadays, uh, you can have a too much stress about my study, about my expenses. So that time, so now.

✓ I used to talk to everybody politely, but nowadays, I have a lot of stress about my studies and expenses, so at those times, I am less patient.

The original sentence was fragmented and unclear. 'You can have a too much stress' is incorrect; it should be 'I have a lot of stress'. 'My study' should be plural 'my studies'. The sentence was restructured to clearly express the contrast between past and present behaviour and the cause of impatience.