Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete, with some hesitation and repetition. Try to give a direct response first, then support it with clear examples. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences to sound more natural and effective.

Exemplo: Yes, I consider myself a patient person, especially when dealing with important tasks that I can control. For instance, I stay calm and focused when working on projects that require careful planning.

Sugestão: Your answer has good content but is affected by many hesitations and unclear phrasing. Try to organise your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, reduce filler words to improve fluency.

Exemplo: I feel impatient when situations are beyond my control. Since I am an organised person, I prefer to have things planned, so unexpected changes often make me feel uneasy.

Sugestão: Your answer is difficult to understand due to many hesitations and unclear sentence structure. Try to speak more clearly and directly, using linking words to explain your ideas logically. Also, avoid unnecessary filler words.

Exemplo: I believe that achieving long-term goals requires resilience and persistence. Therefore, I stay focused on my objectives and follow a clear plan throughout the process.

Sugestão: Your answer contains relevant content but is affected by frequent hesitations and informal phrases like 'you know'. Try to speak more confidently and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, as the CEO of a new startup, my job requires a great deal of patience. Establishing a company demands persistence and focus on long-term goals to achieve success.

Sugestão: This is your best answer with clear structure and relevant content. To improve further, try to reduce minor hesitations and use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more naturally.

Exemplo: Yes, I am definitely more patient now than when I was a child. Back then, I wanted immediate results and struggled to wait. However, with experience, I have realised the importance of patience, especially in difficult situations like my current job where staying calm is essential.

× I think stay calm.

✓ I think I stay calm.

The sentence lacks the subject 'I' before the verb 'stay'. In English, verbs need a subject to be grammatically correct. Adding 'I' clarifies who is performing the action.

× But when I when it comes to the specific occasion such as you know.

✓ But when it comes to a specific occasion, such as, you know, ...

The original sentence has a repeated phrase 'when I when' and is incomplete. Removing the repetition and completing the sentence structure improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I'm First off for I'm a organized person.

✓ First off, I'm an organised person.

The phrase 'I'm First off for I'm' is incorrect and confusing. 'First off' should be an introductory phrase, and 'a organized' should be 'an organised' because 'organised' starts with a vowel sound. Also, 'organised' is the British English spelling.

× when I feel everything in, is in my control,

✓ when I feel everything is in my control,

The preposition 'in' before the comma is unnecessary and incorrect. Removing it corrects the sentence structure.

× feel in, feel patient.

✓ feel patient.

The phrase 'feel in' is incorrect and unnecessary. The correct expression is simply 'feel patient'.

× An impact in my opinion, a long term goal always needs the, uh, resilience and persistence.

✓ In my opinion, a long-term goal always needs resilience and persistence.

The phrase 'An impact in my opinion' is incorrect and confusing. The correct phrase is 'In my opinion'. Also, 'long term' should be hyphenated as 'long-term' when used as an adjective.

× I uh, will, uh, possess to what I, uh, really pursued

✓ I will pursue what I really want

The phrase 'possess to what I really pursued' is incorrect. The verb 'possess' is not used with 'to' in this context, and 'pursued' is past tense which does not fit here. The corrected sentence uses 'pursue' to express intention.

× pay my attention to, you know, the road map in every period.

✓ pay attention to, you know, the roadmap at every stage.

The phrase 'pay my attention to' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'pay attention to'. Also, 'road map' is commonly written as one word 'roadmap', and 'in every period' is better expressed as 'at every stage' for clarity.

× Yes, uh, now I'm a CEO of new startup, you know,

✓ Yes, uh, now I'm the CEO of a new startup, you know,

The phrase 'a CEO of new startup' is missing the article 'the' before 'CEO' and 'a' before 'new startup'. 'CEO' is a specific position, so 'the CEO' is appropriate.

× establishing a new company needs persistence and resilience.

✓ Establishing a new company requires persistence and resilience.

While 'needs' is not incorrect, 'requires' is more formal and appropriate in this context. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammatical error.

× I think I should, uh, work hard and uh, you know, always focus on my, uh, long term goals to, to realize my dream.

✓ I think I should work hard and, you know, always focus on my long-term goals to realise my dream.

The phrase is mostly correct but removing unnecessary fillers improves clarity. Also, 'long term' should be hyphenated as 'long-term' and 'realize' is spelled 'realise' in British English.