Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be more natural by avoiding repetition and filler words. Try to combine ideas smoothly and use linking words to connect your thoughts effectively.

Exemplo: I wouldn't say I'm very patient because I tend to get frustrated when things don't go as planned; however, I am improving by practising mindfulness and meditation regularly.

Sugestão: Avoid using filler words like 'uh' and be more specific with your examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and concise.

Exemplo: I feel impatient mainly when important tasks don't go as planned; for instance, once while preparing a lesson plan, the Internet was down, which made me quite frustrated.

Sugestão: Good structure and content, but try to avoid filler words and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, be careful with grammar, e.g., 'repeating the same thing over and over makes me irritated' (remove 'and').

Exemplo: I feel bored and irritated when I have to do something repetitive for a long time; therefore, I take short breaks to recharge and maintain my focus.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and repetitive. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, try to simplify complex sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, my job as a school teacher requires patience because I work with sensitive and curious children; if I get irritated easily, it could negatively affect their development.

Sugestão: Good answer with clear comparison and reasons. To improve, avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

Exemplo: I am definitely more patient now than as a child because life experiences have taught me to manage my emotions better; for example, practising meditation and mindfulness helps me stay calm and focused.

× However, I am working on this by mindfulness and meditation.

✓ However, I am working on this through mindfulness and meditation.

The preposition 'by' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to indicate the means or method is 'through'. So, 'working on this through mindfulness and meditation' is appropriate.

× I easily get frustrated when things do not go as I planned.

✓ I easily get frustrated when things do not go as I plan.

The phrase 'as I planned' incorrectly uses the past tense 'planned' when the present tense 'plan' is needed to match the ongoing or habitual action. Also, the preposition 'as' is correct here, but the verb tense should be present.

× I usually feel impatient when things do not go as planned, especially when I'm doing something important.

✓ I usually feel impatient when things do not go as planned, especially when I'm doing something important.

This sentence is correct and does not require correction.

× I really, uh, felt frustrated.

✓ I really felt frustrated.

The filler 'uh' is unnecessary in written form and can be omitted for clarity.

× When I have to do something for a long time, uh, I feel bored because repeating the same thing over and over and makes me irritated.

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, I feel bored because repeating the same thing over and over makes me irritated.

The phrase 'repeating the same thing over and over and makes me irritated' has an extra 'and' which disrupts sentence structure. Removing the extra 'and' corrects the sentence.

× Yes, my job requires that I should be patient and because I'm working as a teacher in a school and I have to handle children who are very sensitive and curious and if I get easily irritated, that will negatively impact their personality.

✓ Yes, my job requires that I be patient because I'm working as a teacher in a school and I have to handle children who are very sensitive and curious, and if I get easily irritated, that will negatively impact their personality.

The phrase 'requires that I should be patient' is incorrect; the subjunctive mood requires 'that I be patient'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs proper punctuation and conjunctions for clarity.