Patience— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail with a short example. Avoid repeating ideas (e.g., “patient” and “don't give up” are similar) and reduce filler words.

Exemplo: Yes — I’m generally patient. For instance, when I have an important exam I create a study schedule, stick to it, and review weak areas each week until I feel confident.

Sugestão: Give a single clear cause of impatience, explain briefly why it affects you, and mention one coping strategy. Use linking words to connect cause and solution.

Exemplo: I become impatient when I have to wait for things I can’t control, such as delayed responses, because it makes me anxious. To cope, I focus on what I can control — for example, I use waiting time to review my notes or make a new to-do list.

Sugestão: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence then two concise contrasting examples. Avoid repetition and use linking words (e.g., "however", "on the other hand") to make contrast clear.

Exemplo: It depends: if I enjoy the task, I feel motivated and try to improve over time. However, if I dislike it, I either delegate or try to make it more enjoyable by breaking it into short, rewarding stages.

Sugestão: Be more fluent and concise: state the main idea, then give one specific example of a task that requires patience. Reduce hesitations like “uh.”

Exemplo: Yes. In research you often run experiments that fail, so you need patience to troubleshoot and repeat tests carefully — for example, I spend hours refining methods and analyzing small data changes.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then give a concise reason and one specific example of how you became more patient. Avoid grammar errors (e.g., "control my feelings", "regulate my emotions") and fillers.

Exemplo: Yes, I’m more patient now because I’ve learned it helps me achieve long-term goals. For example, during university I started setting realistic milestones for projects, which taught me to manage frustration and stay focused.

× For example, if I have an exam, I patiently study and plan to reach my goal.

✓ For example, if I have an exam, I study patiently and plan to reach my goal.

Adverb placement: 'patiently' should directly modify 'study' and is more natural after the verb or before it as 'study patiently'. Also consistent present simple is required for general habits. Suggestion: place adverbs close to the verbs they modify.

× I don't like waiting for things that are beyond my control because it makes me very anxious to cope with that.

✓ I don't like waiting for things that are beyond my control because they make me very anxious and hard to cope with.

Pronoun reference and clause structure: 'it' incorrectly refers to 'things' (plural), so use 'they'. The phrase 'anxious to cope with that' is ungrammatical; better to say 'anxious and find it hard to cope' or 'they make me very anxious and make it hard for me to cope.' Ensure subject pronoun agrees with 'things'.

× I plan and stick to the plan and focus.

✓ I plan, stick to the plan, and stay focused.

Parallelism and word choice: verbs should be parallel in form. 'Focus' as a verb is acceptable but 'stay focused' is more natural. Use commas to separate items in a list.

× It depends on the things that I have to do for a long time.

✓ It depends on the tasks I have to do for a long time.

Wordiness and noun choice: 'things' is vague; 'tasks' is clearer. Also omit unnecessary relative clause 'that' to make the sentence more natural.

× If if I enjoy doing it, I try to become better and better and enjoy doing it.

✓ If I enjoy doing something, I try to get better and enjoy it more.

Remove duplicate 'If'. Avoid repeating 'doing it' and 'enjoy' redundantly. Use 'get better' and 'enjoy it more' for natural expression.

× If it is something that I don't like doing that I try to stop it or make it enjoyable for myself.

✓ If it is something I don't like doing, I try to stop it or make it enjoyable for myself.

Extra 'that' makes the clause ungrammatical. Remove the second 'that' and add a comma to separate the conditional clause. Maintain parallel structure.

× Yes, my job is research and research needs a lot of patience to not get, uh, disappointed and give up when you fail and uh, continue trying hard and paying attention to details.

✓ Yes, my job is research, and research needs a lot of patience so you do not get disappointed and give up when you fail; you must continue trying hard and pay attention to details.

Article and sentence clarity: 'research' as an uncountable noun is okay, but sentence was run-on and had awkward 'to not get'. Use 'so you do not get' or 'so as not to get'. Maintain parallel verb forms ('continue trying' and 'pay attention'). Remove filler 'uh'.

× Yes, definitely I became more patient.

✓ Yes, definitely I have become more patient.

Present perfect is preferred to show change from past to present ('have become'). 'Became' simple past suggests a single past event; with 'now compared to childhood' present perfect is clearer.

× I learned that the patience is important for my success.

✓ I learned that patience is important for my success.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before uncountable noun 'patience' in this general sense. Omit 'the' to make the sentence natural.

× So I uh, developed the skill of being patient and control my feeling, regulates my emotions and focus on the goal.

✓ So I developed the skill of being patient, learned to control my feelings, regulate my emotions, and focus on my goals.

Parallel verb forms needed: after 'developed' list verbs with the same form or change structure. 'Control my feeling' should be 'control my feelings'. Use infinitive 'learned to control' or consistent past forms. Use plural 'goals' or 'goal' consistently.