Machine— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: この回答は文法的に不自然で、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、「very new model」ではなく「a very new model」や「the latest model」と言うべきです。また、「using AI again such more effectively」は意味が不明瞭なので、具体的にどのようにAIを使っているのか説明すると良いでしょう。さらに、文を5文以内にまとめ、冗長さを避けることが大切です。

Exemplo: My favourite machine at home is my smartphone because it is the latest model. I like it because I can take beautiful photos with it. Also, it uses AI technology to enhance the pictures automatically, which makes it very effective and easy to use.

Sugestão: 質問に対して答えず、質問で返してしまっています。IELTSでは質問に直接答えることが重要です。もし分からない単語があれば、分からないことを簡潔に伝えた後、自分の考えを述べる練習をしましょう。

Exemplo: I'm not sure what a sweeping machine is, but I think washing machines are very important because they save time and effort when cleaning clothes.

Sugestão: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法や表現が不自然です。例えば、「it feel like it makes me very tired to read that」は「it feels tiring to read it」のように修正できます。また、繰り返しや冗長な表現を避け、簡潔に答えることが望ましいです。

Exemplo: I usually don't read the instructions because they have too many words and it feels tiring. However, if the product breaks, I read the manual to understand how to fix it.

Sugestão: 回答の意図は伝わりますが、文法ミスや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「how do you the product」は「how to use the product」に修正し、「But like I can you」は意味不明なので削除しましょう。より自然な英語で簡潔に答える練習が必要です。

Exemplo: I think it depends on the situation. If I don't know how to use a product, I should read the instructions. But if it's easy to understand, I don't think reading them is necessary.

× I like my smartphone because it's very new model and I can take very beautiful photo and using AI again such more effectively.

✓ I like my smartphone because it's a very new model and I can take very beautiful photos and use AI more effectively.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'very new model' (article error). 'Photo' should be plural 'photos' to match the context (singular and plural issue). 'Using AI again such more effectively' is incorrect; it should be 'use AI more effectively' to maintain parallel verb structure and correct adverb placement.

× Could you help me know what is sweeping machine?

✓ Could you help me know what a sweeping machine is?

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'sweeping machine' (article error). Also, the word order in the question embedded in the sentence is incorrect; it should be 'what a sweeping machine is' instead of 'what is sweeping machine'.

× Actually I do not read it because it has a lot of words. So it feel like it makes me very tired to read that.

✓ Actually, I do not read it because it has a lot of words. So it feels like it makes me very tired to read it.

The verb 'feel' should be 'feels' to agree with the singular subject 'it' (third person singular issue). Also, 'read that' is better as 'read it' for clarity and naturalness.

× So when it is in when the product, when the product is broken, I read it.

✓ So when the product is broken, I read it.

The phrase 'So when it is in when the product' is redundant and confusing. Simplifying to 'So when the product is broken' improves clarity and sentence structure.

× I think it depends on the situation. When I do not know how do you the product, I should read it.

✓ I think it depends on the situation. When I do not know how to use the product, I should read it.

The phrase 'how do you the product' is incorrect. It should be 'how to use the product' to correctly express the intended meaning and maintain proper infinitive verb form.

× But like I can you, when I can understand easily how to use it, I do not think I should read it.

✓ But if I can understand easily how to use it, I do not think I should read it.

The phrase 'But like I can you' is unclear and incorrect. Replacing it with 'But if I can' clarifies the conditional meaning and corrects sentence structure.