Machine— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct vocabulary mistakes, reduce hesitations and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid unrelated words (e.g., “desserts” → “dirt”). Use linking words like “because” and “so” appropriately, and limit to at most 4–5 sentences.

Exemplo: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine because I play sports often and my clothes get very muddy. It saves me time by cleaning large loads quickly, and modern machines also have gentle cycles that protect delicate shirts. Therefore, it is the most useful appliance for me.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a clear contrast and a specific reason. Reduce filler words (“uh”, “umm”) and improve grammar (plural agreement and article use). Use a linking word like “however” or “because” to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, both washing machines and vacuum sweepers are important because they keep the house hygienic and save time. However, I use the washing machine more often because I wear sports clothes every day and need to wash large loads frequently.

Sugestão: Provide a single clear sentence plus a brief specific example. Remove repetition and hesitations, correct grammar (e.g., “every single detail” and “instructions” plural), and use a linking phrase like “for example” to introduce the instance.

Exemplo: Yes, I always read the instructions when I buy a new machine. For example, when I bought a new vacuum cleaner last month, I read every detail in the manual to learn the settings and safety precautions.

Sugestão: Give a clearer reason and a concise example; avoid repetition and awkward phrasing (e.g., “some something we cannot tamper with with”). Use linking words like “because” and “however”. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and correct article and pronoun use.

Exemplo: Yes, it is important to read the instructions because they explain safety rules and proper use that prevent damage. However, many people skip them due to time pressure, which can lead to mistakes or accidents.

× Yes, I believe both washing machine and sweeping machines are very important and in maintaining the overall cleanness of the house and they serve different purposes.

✓ Yes, I believe both washing machines and sweeping machines are very important for maintaining the overall cleanliness of the house, and they serve different purposes.

The original uses a mix of singular and plural: 'both washing machine and sweeping machines' is inconsistent. Use plural for both items after 'both'. Also 'in maintaining' is incorrect preposition use; 'for maintaining' or simply 'maintaining' is correct. 'Cleanness' is less natural than 'cleanliness'. Combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural forms for paired items after 'both' and choose appropriate preposition ('for' or omit) and a more natural noun ('cleanliness').

× My favorite machine at my home would be a washing machine.

✓ My favorite machine at my home is the washing machine.

Using 'would be' suggests hypothetical; a simple present 'is' fits the question asking for a preference. Also 'at my home' is acceptable but 'in my home' is more natural; using 'the washing machine' specifies the type. Suggestion: Use present tense for facts or preferences and prefer 'in my home' or omit location if unnecessary.

× I often have a lot of dirty clothes because, uh, after playing sports I will get muddy and the dirt on my shirts.

✓ I often have a lot of dirty clothes because after playing sports I get muddy and the dirt gets on my shirts.

Original mixes future 'will' with habitual context; use present simple 'get' for habitual actions. Also 'the dirt on my shirts' is a fragment; add verb 'gets' to form a complete clause. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and ensure each clause has a verb.

× So a washing machine would be very convenient to me to wash off all the desserts.

✓ So a washing machine is very convenient for me to wash off all the dirt.

'Desserts' is incorrect word choice for dirt and changes meaning; likely intended 'dirt' or 'stains'. Also 'would be' is unnecessary; use present 'is' for general truth. Use 'convenient for me to' or 'convenient when I want to'. Suggestion: Replace incorrect word with appropriate noun ('dirt' or 'stains') and use present simple for general statements.

× I will read instructions every time when I, uh, use a newly purchased machine.

✓ I read the instructions every time I use a newly purchased machine.

Use simple present 'read' for habitual action rather than 'will read'. Add definite article 'the' before 'instructions'. Also 'every time when I' is redundant; use 'every time I'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and include articles where needed.

× Every time and when I remember when I purchased a new vacuum cleaner and I read every single details from the instruction given by the package.

✓ I remember when I purchased a new vacuum cleaner; I read every single detail in the instructions provided with the package.

Many issues: 'Every time and when I remember when' is redundant and ungrammatical; simplify to two linked clauses. Use singular 'detail' with 'every single', and plural 'instructions'. Use 'in' or 'with' the package and 'provided' rather than 'given by the package'. Suggestion: Simplify sentence structure, match singular/plural, and use appropriate prepositions.

× I do think it is very important to read every single detail of the instructions.

✓ I think it is very important to read every single detail of the instructions.

'I do think' is grammatically correct but unnecessary emphasis; simple present 'I think' is more natural. The rest is fine though 'of the instructions' could be 'in the instructions'. Suggestion: Use concise present tense for general opinions.

× It gives a very important information such as some something we cannot tamper with with the machine itself.

✓ They provide important information, such as things we should not tamper with on the machine itself.

'It gives a very important information' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable and requires no 'a'; use plural subject 'they' referring to 'instructions'. 'some something' is redundant; use 'things' or 'parts'. Avoid duplicated preposition 'with with' and use 'on the machine itself'. Suggestion: Match subject number to 'instructions', avoid articles with uncountable nouns, and eliminate redundancy.

× But I believe most of the people, they do not have the luxury of the time to read.

✓ But I believe most people do not have the luxury of time to read them.

'Most of the people, they' is redundant; use 'most people'. 'the luxury of the time' is unidiomatic; say 'the luxury of time'. Include 'them' to refer back to 'instructions'. Suggestion: Remove redundant pronoun and use idiomatic expressions.