Part 1
Examinador
Are you good at memorising things?
Candidato
Actually I have really poor memory. Like I want to prepare my iOS exam so that I need to spend four or five hours to remember the vocabulary, but I can only remember 100 of it and I will forget half of it on the next day.
Examinador
Have you ever forgotten something important?
Candidato
Actually if I forgot something important, maybe I won't remember right now, but I actually forgot something in my day-to-day life like when I live with my parents, our door need to open with a key and I have always forgotten to bring.
Examinador
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
Candidato
Maybe like what I just mentioned I need to remember bring the keys in my daily life and if I forget to bring that I will be locked out and just wait for a long time until my parents back to home. So that's really a headache for me every time I need to double check I bring the key or not.
Examinador
How do you remember important things?
Candidato
I take some mental notes before but I find that's not a effective way. I also forget a lot. So right now I write on my calendar like if they they will have a big day someone someone are important to me like their birthday I will write the circle on calendar.
Are you good at memorising things?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: 回答时应更自然流畅,避免重复和语法错误。可以简洁直接表达观点,并用具体细节支持。
Exemplo: I'm not very good at memorising things. For example, when I prepare for my iOS exam, I spend several hours learning vocabulary, but I often forget half of the words the next day.
Have you ever forgotten something important?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 回答应更清晰,避免语法错误,且内容应更具体。可以直接回答问题并举例说明。
Exemplo: I can't recall forgetting something very important recently, but I often forget to bring the key when I leave home, which causes inconvenience.
What do you need to remember in your daily life?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: 回答应更简洁,避免重复,使用连接词使表达更连贯。可以用更丰富的词汇描述情境。
Exemplo: In my daily life, I need to remember to bring my keys. If I forget them, I get locked out and have to wait for my parents to come home, which is very frustrating.
How do you remember important things?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: 回答应更流畅,避免语法错误,使用连接词使内容连贯,并具体说明方法。
Exemplo: I used to rely on mental notes, but that wasn't effective. Now, I write important dates, like birthdays, on my calendar and circle them to remind myself.
× Actually I have really poor memory.
✓ Actually I have a really poor memory.
这里的 memory 是可数名词,表示记忆力时需要加冠词 a。
× Like I want to prepare my iOS exam so that I need to spend four or five hours to remember the vocabulary, but I can only remember 100 of it and I will forget half of it on the next day.
✓ Like I want to prepare for my iOS exam so I need to spend four or five hours remembering the vocabulary, but I can only remember 100 of them and I will forget half of them the next day.
prepare 后面需要加介词 for;spend 后面接动名词 remembering;vocabulary 是不可数名词,不能用 100 of it,改为 100 of them;on the next day 改为 the next day。
× but I can only remember 100 of it and I will forget half of it on the next day.
✓ but I can only remember 100 of them and I will forget half of them the next day.
it 指代复数词汇时应使用复数代词 them;on the next day 改为 the next day。
× Actually if I forgot something important, maybe I won't remember right now, but I actually forgot something in my day-to-day life like when I live with my parents, our door need to open with a key and I have always forgotten to bring.
✓ Actually if I forget something important, maybe I won't remember it right now, but I actually forgot something in my day-to-day life. Like when I lived with my parents, our door needed to be opened with a key and I always forgot to bring it.
条件句中用一般现在时 forget;won't remember 后面加 it;live 和 need 用过去时 lived 和 needed;door 需要被动语态 opened;forgotten to bring 改为 forgot to bring it。
× our door need to open with a key and I have always forgotten to bring.
✓ our door needed to be opened with a key and I always forgot to bring it.
door 需要被动语态 opened;forgotten to bring 改为 forgot to bring it。
× our door need to open with a key and I have always forgotten to bring.
✓ our door needed to be opened with a key and I always forgot to bring it.
door 是单数,谓语动词用 needed;forgotten to bring 改为 forgot to bring it。
× Maybe like what I just mentioned I need to remember bring the keys in my daily life and if I forget to bring that I will be locked out and just wait for a long time until my parents back to home.
✓ Maybe like what I just mentioned, I need to remember to bring the keys in my daily life and if I forget to bring them, I will be locked out and just wait for a long time until my parents come back home.
remember 后面接不定式 to bring;that 指代 keys 应用复数代词 them;parents back to home 改为 parents come back home。
× if I forget to bring that I will be locked out and just wait for a long time until my parents back to home.
✓ if I forget to bring them, I will be locked out and just wait for a long time until my parents come back home.
that 指代复数 keys 应用复数代词 them;parents back to home 改为 parents come back home。
× So that's really a headache for me every time I need to double check I bring the key or not.
✓ So that's really a headache for me every time I need to double check whether I have brought the key or not.
double check 后面接宾语从句,需用 whether 引导;bring the key 改为 have brought the key 表示完成时态。
× I take some mental notes before but I find that's not a effective way.
✓ I took some mental notes before but I find that's not an effective way.
a effective way 中 effective 以元音音素开头,冠词应为 an;时态与上下文一致,took 更合适。
× I also forget a lot.
✓ I also forget a lot of things.
forget a lot 不完整,需补充名词 things。
× So right now I write on my calendar like if they they will have a big day someone someone are important to me like their birthday I will write the circle on calendar.
✓ So right now I write on my calendar. For example, if someone important to me will have a big day like their birthday, I will circle it on the calendar.
句子结构混乱,重复词 they they 和 someone someone 需删除;are 改为 is;write the circle 改为 circle it;加上适当连接词和标点使句子通顺。