Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 답변은 직접적이고 솔직하지만 몇 가지 개선점이 있습니다. 첫째, 답변이 길어지면서 반복(‘not good at memorizing things’ 등)이 있어 자연스러움이 떨어집니다. 둘째, 연결구(therefore, for example 등)를 사용해 이유와 방법을 명확히 하면 더 논리적입니다. 셋째, 구체적인 빈도나 방법(예: 하루에 몇 번 복습, 플래시카드 사용 방식)을 추가하면 내용이 풍부해집니다. 마지막으로 문장 수를 3~4문장으로 간결하게 유지하세요.

Exemplo: No, I'm not very good at memorising things, especially English vocabulary. For example, I often forget a new word within ten minutes, so I review new words several times a day. Therefore, I use flashcards and spaced repetition apps to help them stick.

Sugestão: 답변은 경험을 잘 서술했지만 말이 더듬거리고 문장이 미완성된 느낌이 있어 유창성이 떨어집니다. 구체적인 상황(어떤 일이 있었는지, 어떻게 보상했는지)을 덧붙이고 불필요한 'uh', 'umm'을 줄이세요. 또한 문장을 완결형으로 만들어야 합니다(예: ‘as soon as I realized it, I...’ 다음 설명 필요).

Exemplo: Yes, I once forgot my dad's birthday last year because we lived in different cities and I was very busy at work. When I realised it, I immediately called him to apologise and sent a gift to make up for it.

Sugestão: 내용이 흥미롭지만 발음·어휘 오류와 불필요한 말버릇('Umm')이 있습니다. 숫자 표현을 정확히 하고(diary has 365 questions), 핵심문장으로 시작해 루틴의 이유나 효과를 추가하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 예를 들어 왜 매일 작성하는지, 어떤 질문들이 있는지 구체적으로 말해보세요.

Exemplo: I recently bought a five-year diary that contains 365 questions to answer each year. Writing in it every night has become part of my routine because it helps me reflect on the day and track long-term changes.

Sugestão: 답변은 명확하고 간결하지만 더 자연스럽게 연결어와 구체성을 추가할 수 있습니다. 예를 들어 어떤 앱이나 기능(캘린더, 알람)을 사용하는지, 알림을 설정하는 빈도 등을 덧붙이면 신뢰감이 높아집니다. 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

Exemplo: Since I'm not great at remembering things, I write important tasks in my phone calendar and set reminders. For example, I put hospital appointments and tax deadlines in the calendar and set alerts a week and a day before.

× Even if I see a new word, I often forget it within like 10 minutes.

✓ Even if I see a new word, I often forget it within about ten minutes.

The phrase 'within like 10 minutes' is informal and 'like' is used colloquially; 'within about ten minutes' is grammatically correct and more appropriate in a test context. Use 'about' for approximation and write numbers in words for small numbers in formal writing.

× So I try to review new words as much as I can, and sometimes I make flash cards.

✓ So I try to review new words as much as I can, and sometimes I make flashcards.

'Flash cards' is commonly written as the compound noun 'flashcards.' Combining the words clarifies that it is a single item.

× Yes, I have. I forgot my dad's birthday last year.

✓ Yes, I have. I forgot my dad's birthday last year.

This sentence is grammatically correct; present perfect 'I have' followed by past simple 'I forgot' is acceptable because 'last year' requires past simple. No change needed.

× Umm, at that time, uh, we didn't live together, we were in different cities and I was busy at work uh, as soon as I realized the day was.

✓ Umm, at that time we didn't live together; we were in different cities and I was busy at work. I realized the date too late.

The original sentence is fragmented and ends abruptly with 'as soon as I realized the day was.' I combined clauses into clearer sentences and replaced the incomplete phrase with 'I realized the date too late' to convey the intended meaning. Avoid fillers like 'uh' in formal answers.

× Umm Recently I got a new diary that has 306 sixty five questions to answer over five years.

✓ Umm, recently I got a new diary that has 365 questions to answer over five years.

The number was written redundantly as '306 sixty five.' The correct number is likely '365'; write it as a single numeral or word. Also 'Recently' should be lowercase when mid-sentence and a comma after 'Umm' improves readability.

× Umm riding in it at the end of the day has become part of my daily routine so I try not to forget to do it.

✓ Umm, writing in it at the end of the day has become part of my daily routine, so I try not to forget to do it.

'Riding in it' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'writing.' Use the gerund 'writing' to refer to the activity. Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses.

× Personally, I'm not good at memorizing things so I usually note down important things on my phone such as hospital appointments or paying taxes, stuff like that.

✓ Personally, I'm not good at memorizing things, so I usually note important things on my phone, such as hospital appointments or tax payment reminders.

Add a comma before 'so.' 'Note down' is acceptable but 'note' is more concise. 'Paying taxes' is awkward here; 'tax payment reminders' or 'tax payments' clarifies meaning. Remove informal 'stuff like that.'