Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and use clearer grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one clear supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid unclear phrases like "shutting memories" and reduce hesitation. Use correct tense and simpler structures.

Exemplo: Not really. I have a poor memory for numbers, so if someone reads me eight digits I usually only remember about four or five. For example, when I try to remember a phone number I often have to write it down immediately.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence in the past tense and follow with two concise supporting details connected by linking words (e.g., "for example", "because"). Avoid trailing off (e.g., "However.") and add a short reflection or result to complete the answer.

Exemplo: Yes, I have. For example, about two or three years ago I forgot my mother's birthday and did not get her a cake or a gift, which made her disappointed. After that I felt very sorry, so now I set reminders on my phone to avoid the same mistake.

Sugestão: Start with a clear general statement about daily responsibilities, then list specific items with linking words. Use correct nouns and verb forms (e.g., "a national training assignment" -> "a national training assignment") and keep sentences short and coherent. Clarify relationships between items using connectors like "and" or "for example."

Exemplo: I need to remember several important things every day. For example, I must keep track of my national training assignments and deadlines, and I also need to remember key theories about structural engineering, material behavior, and relevant regulations and ethical practices.

Sugestão: Provide a direct topic sentence describing your method, then give one clear, specific example with linking words (e.g., "for example", "then"). Use natural phrasing ("I write it down where I can see it") and avoid awkward verbs like "jot it out." Also limit to two or three short sentences.

Exemplo: I usually use written reminders and frequent review to remember important things. For example, I write key clauses from the regulations on sticky notes and review them daily, then cover them to test myself and check which parts I still need to learn.

× Not really, I have a really bad shutting memories like you give me 8 numbers that say ask me to memorize it.

✓ Not really, I have really bad short-term memory; if you give me 8 numbers and ask me to memorize them, I will probably remember only 4 or 5.

The original sentence uses incorrect adjective 'shutting' and the plural noun form 'memories' with an adjective that describes a type of memory. This is an adjective choice and sentence-structure issue. Use the correct adjective 'short-term' to describe memory and the uncountable noun 'memory' rather than 'memories' in this context. Also adjust verb forms and pronouns: 'give me 8 numbers and ask me to memorize them' keeps agreement and clarity. Suggestion: Learn common collocations (short-term memory, long-term memory) and ensure pronoun number agreement with plural objects (them for numbers).

× Yes I do. This is one time I think about two or three years back when I forgot my mom's birthday.

✓ Yes, I did. This happened about two or three years ago when I forgot my mom's birthday.

The original mixes present tense 'do' with a past reference and uses awkward phrasing 'I think about two or three years back'. Use simple past 'did' for past events and 'happened' to introduce the past incident. Replace 'two or three years back' with the standard 'about two or three years ago.' Suggestion: For finished events, use the simple past and time expressions with 'ago.'

× I forgot to give her any birthday cake or any gifts.

✓ I forgot to give her a birthday cake or any gifts.

This sentence mainly has an article usage issue: 'any birthday cake' is less natural than 'a birthday cake' when referring to a single cake. Using the present participle is not required; correction simplifies article use. Suggestion: Use 'a' with a singular, countable noun when referring to one item; use 'any' in negative contexts or questions when referring to unspecified quantity.

× So of course she's a bit disappointed and I feel sorry. However.

✓ So, of course she was a bit disappointed and I felt sorry about it.

The sentence switches tenses and ends with a dangling 'However.' Maintain past tense for the past incident: 'she was' and 'I felt.' Remove the fragment 'However' or complete it with a contrast clause. The original is a sentence structure and tense consistency problem. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent within the same narrative and avoid sentence fragments; if using 'however,' follow with a clause (e.g., 'However, I apologized').

× A national training assignment is.

✓ I need to remember a national training assignment.

The original is a fragment lacking a proper verb and subject relation: 'A national training assignment is.' This is a sentence without a verb/incomplete structure. The correction supplies the verb 'need to remember' to answer the question about what they need to remember in daily life. Suggestion: Ensure responses to 'What do you need to remember...' start with a subject and verb describing the need (I need to remember...).

× Lastly, I work with methods like some theories about structural engineering, how the material perform, and things like regulations and code and ethical practice.

✓ I also work with methods such as theories about structural engineering, how materials perform, and things like regulations, codes, and ethical practice.

Issues include quantifier and article usage: 'some theories' is acceptable but 'like some theories' is informal; 'the material perform' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and singular noun use. 'Code' should be pluralized to 'codes' when listing. This mixes quantifier/adjective choice and subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: Use 'such as' for examples, use plural 'materials' with correct verb 'perform,' and pluralize countable nouns when listing multiple items (codes).

× I usually try to recall it regularly.

✓ I usually try to recall things regularly.

The original uses 'it' ambiguously; while tense is acceptable, pronoun reference is unclear. Changing to 'things' clarifies the object of recalling. This is primarily a pronoun reference and clarity issue with present-tense verb fine. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns clearly refer to the intended noun; use plural 'things' when speaking generally.

× For example, if I try to remember a class in the code or in the regulation, I'm trying to jot it out somewhere that I can easily see it and then try to cover that up and see if I can recall the clause itself.

✓ For example, if I try to remember a clause in the code or regulation, I jot it down somewhere I can easily see and then cover it up to see if I can recall the clause itself.

Problems include incorrect noun 'class' (should be 'clause'), awkward verb forms 'jot it out' (use 'jot it down'), and inconsistent progressive aspect ('I'm trying to' vs 'I try to'). The phrase 'in the regulation' is better as 'in the code or regulation' without 'the.' The correction uses simple present to describe habitual action and proper verb+ -ing usage where appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'jot down' for writing notes, use consistent tense for habitual actions (simple present), and ensure correct vocabulary (clause vs class).