Memory— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Tone down absolute claims, make a clear topic sentence, add a linking word and one specific brief reason or example. Keep it natural and concise (max 3–4 sentences).

Exemplo: I think I have a fairly good memory. For example, I can still remember the positions I played in a baseball match from about 15 years ago, which helps me tell stories clearly. However, I notice my short-term memory isn’t as sharp as it used to be, especially for recent dates.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence, then use a linking word to introduce the exception and give concise specific details and feelings. Avoid awkward phrasing and redundant clauses.

Exemplo: Not usually, but there was one close call last month. Because my wife’s birthday is so close to our anniversary, I nearly forgot it, which made me very anxious since I didn’t want to upset her.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence about your personal daily priorities, then list 2–3 specific items with a linking phrase. Use correct collocations (e.g., “take notes,” “diaries” or “notebooks”) and avoid general statements about ‘we’.

Exemplo: In my daily life I need to remember appointments, work deadlines and family events. For example, I always note down deadlines and birthdays so I don’t miss them. To help, I take notes in a small notebook and set reminders on my phone.

Sugestão: Begin with a concise topic sentence naming the methods you use, then briefly explain how each works with clear language and correct product names (e.g., “Microsoft OneNote”). Avoid repetition and keep sentences short.

Exemplo: I use two main methods to remember things. First, I use Microsoft OneNote to quickly jot down tasks and set checklists. Second, I keep a paper diary for my monthly schedule because writing things by hand helps me remember them better.

× I definitely think my memory is superior to others.

✓ I definitely think my memory is better than others'.

Comparative expression: use 'better than' for comparison rather than 'superior to' in conversational context; add possessive apostrophe to 'others' to show 'other people's memory'. Use 'better than others'' or 'better than other people's'.

× for example, I can easily recall what I played in a baseball game even 15 or 20 years ago, but I think my ability is now decreasing as I grow older.

✓ For example, I can still easily recall what I did in a baseball game 15 or 20 years ago, but I think my memory is decreasing as I get older.

Use simple past 'did' for actions in a past event; 'what I played' is incorrect because 'play' a game, but 'play' followed by object is odd here. Use 'memory' instead of 'ability' for clarity; 'grow older' is acceptable but 'get older' is more idiomatic. 'Now' is unnecessary with 'decreasing'.

× No, I can't think of any specific days and things that I've ever forgotten.

✓ No, I can't think of any specific days or things that I've forgotten.

Use 'or' instead of 'and' when listing alternatives; 'I've ever forgotten' is awkward with 'can't think of' — 'I've forgotten' is sufficient. 'Ever' is unnecessary here and can make the sentence awkward.

× However, about one month ago I almost forgot my wife's birthday because it is very close to our wedding anniversary, so I felt very scared because my wife would scold me.

✓ However, about a month ago I almost forgot my wife's birthday because it is very close to our wedding anniversary, so I was very worried that my wife would scold me.

Use 'a month ago' rather than 'about one month ago' for natural speech (both acceptable); 'felt very scared' is unnatural for being worried about scolding—use 'was very worried'. 'Would scold me' is correct for expected reaction in past context; keep conditional sense.

× There is a lot of important information that we must not miss.

✓ There is a lot of important information that we mustn't miss.

Contraction 'mustn't' is optional; main point: sentence is grammatical but 'a lot of' with 'information' (uncountable) is acceptable. Provide suggestion to keep sentence concise: 'There is a lot of important information we mustn't miss.'

× For example, we should not forget specific days like deadlines and birthdays and anniversaries.

✓ For example, we should not forget specific days like deadlines, birthdays, and anniversaries.

Use commas to separate items in a list. No grammar type change — punctuation clarifies the list.

× To avoid the missing these things, we should take a note regularly using Diaries and notebooks.

✓ To avoid missing these things, we should regularly take notes using diaries and notebooks.

Remove 'the' before 'missing'; 'take a note' should be plural 'take notes' for habitual action; 'Diaries' shouldn't be capitalized. 'Regularly' placement improved for natural word order.

× I usually use two tools to avoid missing important information.

✓ I usually use two tools to avoid missing important information.

Sentence is fine; no pronoun error. Included here to show it's correct and needs no change.

× The one is the one notes made by Microsoft, which is very convenient for writing it down important information that I cannot miss.

✓ The first is OneNote by Microsoft, which is very convenient for writing down important information that I cannot miss.

Use 'The first' to list items, not 'The one is the one notes'; correct product name is 'OneNote'; remove 'it' in 'writing it down' — say 'writing down'. 'Important information' is uncountable so no article needed.

× The second is paper diary made in Japan, which is very useful for remembering important schedule and information.

✓ The second is a paper diary made in Japan, which is very useful for remembering important schedules and information.

Add indefinite article 'a' before 'paper diary'; use plural 'schedules' or 'schedule items' for natural phrasing; 'information' is fine. Alternatively, 'your schedule' could be used for specificity.