Chocolate— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it can be improved by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about your preferences. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'they remove silk chocolate' which is unclear.

Exemplo: Yes, I love eating chocolates and have enjoyed them since childhood. I often try international brands such as Swiss chocolates and others. Whenever my cousins visit from abroad, I ask them to bring some special chocolates for me because I enjoy trying different flavours.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly, using simple sentences. Avoid confusing phrases like 'aged soft bloods'. Also, explain your frequency of eating chocolate in a straightforward way.

Exemplo: I eat chocolate very rarely, especially after my root canal treatment. Now, I only eat chocolates once in a while to avoid any dental problems.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by avoiding hesitation and filler words like 'uh'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about why chocolates are tastier in your country.

Exemplo: As I mentioned earlier, I loved eating chocolates as a child and sometimes took them from my siblings. Additionally, chocolates in my country taste better because many multinational companies have set up factories here, ensuring fresh and high-quality products.

Sugestão: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Provide clear reasons why chocolate is popular globally.

Exemplo: Chocolate is popular worldwide because many people, especially the younger generation, enjoy its sweet taste. According to surveys, nearly two out of five young people prefer chocolate, which keeps its demand high.

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and clearer sentence structure. Avoid vague phrases like 'some creamy'. Also, explain why you like that flavour more specifically.

Exemplo: My favourite flavour is chocolate with vanilla because it has a smooth and creamy taste. I have noticed that not many people prefer this flavour, so it is less common in stores.

Sugestão: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'birth to the Jews and Niles or to the young squirts'. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use simple and correct sentences to convey your ideas.

Exemplo: I don't think giving chocolates as gifts all the time is a good idea. Gifts should be varied to suit different people, such as parents or older siblings, who might prefer other types of presents.

× I usually try many international chocolates like the Swiss chocolate, they remove silk chocolate and many more.

✓ I usually try many international chocolates like Swiss chocolate, Milka chocolate and many more.

The phrase 'they remove silk chocolate' is incorrect and seems to be a mishearing or typo. It should be 'Milka chocolate', which is a known brand. Also, 'the Swiss chocolate' should be 'Swiss chocolate' without 'the' as it refers to a type of chocolate, not a specific item. This correction addresses the singular/plural and article usage.

× Whenever my cousins come from abroad, I usually demand from them to bring chocolates for me.

✓ Whenever my cousins come from abroad, I usually ask them to bring chocolates for me.

The verb 'demand' is not correctly used with 'from' and 'to bring'. The correct verb here is 'ask' which fits the context of requesting something politely. Also, 'demand from them to bring' is incorrect preposition usage.

× I usually eat chocolates once in a blue moon, but at that day I completely aged soft bloods because I am fond of it.

✓ I usually eat chocolates once in a blue moon, but that day I completely bled softly because I am fond of it.

The phrase 'aged soft bloods' is incorrect and unclear. It likely intends to say 'bled softly' or 'had soft bleeding'. Also, 'at that day' should be 'that day'. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects quantifier and phrase usage.

× Moreover, uh, the chocolates are very tastier in my country.

✓ Moreover, uh, the chocolates are much tastier in my country.

The word 'tastier' is a comparative adjective and should be modified by 'much' or 'far' instead of 'very'. 'Very tastier' is incorrect because 'tastier' already implies comparison.

× There are many uh, large MNC companies who have established their chocolate company in my country.

✓ There are many large MNC companies that have established their chocolate companies in my country.

'Who' is used for people, but companies are objects, so 'that' is more appropriate. Also, 'company' should be plural 'companies' to agree with 'many'.

× Yes, because chocolates are very very popular and in the upcoming years it places more popular because the younger generation are overtaking their world and the old people are falling backwards and the younger younger generation overall love to chocolate.

✓ Yes, because chocolates are very popular and in the upcoming years they will become more popular because the younger generation is overtaking their world and the older people are falling behind, and the younger generation overall loves chocolate.

'Chocolates' is plural, so 'they' is used instead of 'it'. 'Younger generation' is singular collective noun, so 'is' and 'loves' are correct. 'Falling backwards' should be 'falling behind'. Also, 'love to chocolate' is incorrect; it should be 'loves chocolate'.

× In an estimated survey or from every five youngsters, 2 youngsters.

✓ In an estimated survey, out of every five youngsters, two youngsters...

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. 'Or from every five youngsters, 2 youngsters' is incorrect quantifier usage. It should be 'out of every five youngsters, two youngsters' to express proportion.

× My favorite and the most lovable flavor is chocolate plus vanilla because it tastes really very good.

✓ My favorite and most loved flavor is chocolate plus vanilla because it tastes really good.

'Most lovable' is not commonly used; 'most loved' or 'favorite' is better. Also, 'really very good' is redundant; 'really good' suffices.

× It's kind of some creamy and I have seen that less people like that.

✓ It's kind of creamy and I have seen that fewer people like it.

'Some creamy' is incorrect; 'kind of creamy' is sufficient. 'Less people' should be 'fewer people' because 'people' is countable. Also, 'like that' should be 'like it' referring to the flavor.

× So because of that, the supply is very high and the demand is low.

✓ So because of that, the supply is very high and the demand is low.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× I don't think so that it is a good idea to give chocolates all the time, because whenever you give a gift, you don't only give birth to the Jews and Niles or to the young squirts.

✓ I don't think it is a good idea to give chocolates all the time, because whenever you give a gift, you don't only give it to the youths and kids or to the young ones.

'Give birth to the Jews and Niles or to the young squirts' is incorrect and unclear. It likely means 'give it to the youths and kids or young ones'. 'Don't think so that' should be 'don't think it is'. The correction clarifies pronoun and vocabulary usage.

× We can give gifts to the older people who example your parents, your Big Brothers and sisters.

✓ We can give gifts to older people, for example, your parents, your big brothers and sisters.

'Who example' is incorrect; it should be 'for example'. Also, 'Big Brothers' should be 'big brothers' as it is not a title. The correction fixes pronoun and phrase usage.

× So gifting chocolates every single time, it's not a good idea.

✓ So, gifting chocolates every single time is not a good idea.

The sentence has a comma splice and unnecessary pronoun 'it'. The correction removes the comma and 'it's' to make a proper sentence structure.