Chocolate— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Mention both reasons (dental issues and relief for menstrual cramps) with linking words and concise phrasing. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: I generally avoid chocolate because it causes dental problems for me. However, I do eat a small amount about once a month because dark chocolate helps relieve my menstrual cramps.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear frequency and explain reasons using linking words. Fix unclear phrase "for my grams" and reduce repetition. Use varied vocabulary like "occasionally" and "helps alleviate."

Exemplo: I eat chocolate only about once a month. I usually choose dark chocolate because it improves my mood and can help alleviate menstrual cramps.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence about childhood habits. Remove repeated words and fix grammar (e.g., "my dad was concerned about our teeth"). Use a linking phrase to explain the reason concisely.

Exemplo: No, I didn't eat much chocolate as a child. My father was very concerned about our dental health, so he rarely bought sweets for us.

Sugestão: Give a direct opinion then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Improve sentence structure and clarity: mention advertising, taste, convenience, and social trends as causes.

Exemplo: I think chocolate is popular because it is heavily advertised and marketed to children. In addition, its sweet taste and convenient packaging make it an attractive and fashionable treat worldwide.

Sugestão: Answer directly about preference and explain reasons briefly. Correct brand phrasing ("I prefer") and unclear phrase "good for the ground." Mention dark chocolate benefits succinctly.

Exemplo: I don't have a single favourite flavour, but I usually choose Dairy Milk or Kit Kat for everyday treats. For menstrual cramps I prefer dark chocolate because it is less sweet and helps reduce pain.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion, then give balanced reasons. Avoid fillers and repetition, use linking words like "however" to show exceptions, and give a concise recommendation.

Exemplo: I think giving lots of chocolate to children is not a good idea because it can cause dental problems. However, one or two pieces as a small gift are fine.

× I don't like eating chocolate because it makes washed teeth problems but once a month I need to eat because I have a menstrual crabs pain so that's why it's good for that pain so I just eat once a month.

✓ I don't like eating chocolate because it causes tooth problems, but once a month I need to eat it because I have menstrual cramp pain, so it's helpful for that pain and I just eat it once a month.

Original sentence used 'washed teeth problems' and 'menstrual crabs pain' which are incorrect noun phrases; 'eat' and 'eating' usage is acceptable but the verb 'makes' with 'washed teeth problems' is wrong. 'Cause' is a more appropriate verb for producing problems and 'tooth problems' is the correct noun. Also include the object 'it' after 'eat' for clarity. Use 'menstrual cramp pain' or simply 'menstrual cramps' to convey the meaning. Keep present simple tense for habitual situation and explain reasons clearly.

× I just eat chocolate once a month and for my grams and I always prefer a dark chocolate because it improves my mood and it's good. It's good for menstrual cramps.

✓ I just eat chocolate once a month, and for my cramps I always prefer dark chocolate because it improves my mood and is good for menstrual cramps.

Use present simple 'eat' and 'prefer' for habitual actions, which is correct, but 'for my grams' is a typo for 'cramps'. 'A dark chocolate' should be 'dark chocolate' (uncountable when speaking of type). Remove redundant 'it's good' and keep concise. Maintain subject-verb agreement and noun forms appropriate for the context.

× I remember in my childhood I was not eating too much chocolates and candies because my dad dad was very sad about our dental.

✓ I remember that in my childhood I did not eat too many chocolates and candies because my dad was very worried about our dental health.

When talking about habitual past actions, use past simple 'did not eat' rather than 'was not eating'. 'Too many' is correct with countable nouns 'chocolates and candies'. 'Dad dad' is a repetition typo and should be 'dad'. 'Was very sad about our dental' is unnatural; use 'worried about our dental health'.

× So he he never preferred to bring chocolates for us and never he gave up permission.

✓ So he never chose to bring chocolates for us and never gave us permission.

Remove repeated 'he'. 'Preferred to bring' is awkward here; 'chose to bring' or 'brought' fits better. 'Never he gave up permission' has incorrect word order and verb; correct phrasing is 'never gave us permission' (direct object 'us' after verb 'gave'). Maintain past simple tense for past habitual actions.

× According to me, nowadays there are more advertisements about different kind of chocolates which just watching why the children and they are very attractive with chocolates and also it's maybe it's a fashion to eat chocolate.

✓ In my opinion, nowadays there are more advertisements for different kinds of chocolate that attract children, and eating chocolate may also be a fashion trend.

Use 'In my opinion' instead of 'According to me'. 'Advertisements for different kinds of chocolate' is correct collocation; 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when preceded by 'different'. The relative clause was ungrammatical; 'that attract children' is concise. 'They are very attractive with chocolates' is incorrect — use 'attract children'. 'It's maybe it's a fashion' is redundant; use 'may also be a fashion trend'.

× Nothing is my favorite chocolate but I always prefer to Dairy Milk or Kit Kat brand for chocolates.

✓ I don't have a single favorite chocolate, but I usually prefer Dairy Milk or Kit Kat brands.

'Nothing is my favorite chocolate' is unnatural; use 'I don't have a single favorite chocolate' or 'I don't have a favorite'. 'Prefer to Dairy Milk' is incorrect preposition; use 'prefer Dairy Milk' or 'prefer the Dairy Milk or Kit Kat brands'. Make 'brand' plural when referring to multiple brands.

× But for my menstrual cramps I always prefer the dark chocolate because it's less sweet and good for the ground.

✓ But for my menstrual cramps I always prefer dark chocolate because it's less sweet and helps relieve the pain.

'The dark chocolate' can be 'dark chocolate' (general preference). 'Good for the ground' is meaningless here — likely intended 'good for the body' or 'helps with the pain'. Provide clear, relevant phrasing: 'helps relieve the pain'.

× I think it's not good to give a gift a chocolate to kids because it's, it's, uh, probably increase their dental, dental problems.

✓ I don't think it's good to give chocolate as a gift to kids because it will probably increase their dental problems.

Use 'give chocolate as a gift' rather than 'give a gift a chocolate'. Remove filler words and repetition. Use 'will probably increase' or 'probably increases' for future/predictive meaning. 'Dental, dental problems' is repetitive; 'dental problems' suffices.

× So we need to be avoid that.

✓ So we need to avoid that.

'Be avoid' is incorrect. The correct form is simply 'need to avoid that' or 'should avoid that'. No reflexive pronoun is required here.

× But like just one or two chocolates are enough as gift, not too much.

✓ But one or two chocolates are enough as a gift, not too many.

'Too much' is used with uncountable nouns; for countable items like chocolates use 'too many'. Add article 'a gift' or use plural 'as gifts'. Keep quantifier agreement with noun countability.