Singing— Part 1 Relatório
Conversa
Part 1
Examinador
Do you like singing? Why?
Candidato
That's a very interesting question. I really like to sing. It helps me relax my mind because when you sing it releases chemical stuff, substances, which is endorphins, which this hormone makes you happy and alert.
Examinador
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Candidato
At first I didn't know how to sing properly so I used my full head voice and it makes my umm, throat sore. But then when I was in high school, I then, uh, joined a singing uh club so they taught me how to sing properly.
Examinador
Who do you want to sing for?
Candidato
For me, I think that I would like to sing for my mom because she supports me in every way like singing for instance. She paid almost 50K for my learning course and also for the equipments in my home like the microphone and the speakers.
Examinador
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Candidato
Absolutely. Seeing is another way of converting your emotions by hearing the voices of people singing. It could transfer emotions. Like I've mentioned before, it can make you feel sad or happy, and it also improves people's mood too.
Avaliação
Total
Part 1
Do you like singing? Why?
Pontuação: 75.0Sugestão: คำตอบควรใช้ภาษาที่เป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้นและหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำหรือคำที่ไม่เป็นทางการ เช่น "chemical stuff" ควรใช้คำที่ชัดเจนและถูกต้อง เช่น "chemicals" นอกจากนี้ควรจัดระเบียบประโยคให้กระชับและลื่นไหลมากขึ้น
Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and boosts my mood. When I sing, my body releases endorphins, which are hormones that make me feel happy and alert.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: ควรลดการใช้คำเติมเสียงเช่น "umm", "uh" และใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้เนื้อหาดูต่อเนื่องและสมเหตุสมผล
Exemplo: Initially, I didn't know how to sing properly and used my full head voice, which made my throat sore. However, when I was in high school, I joined a singing club where I learned the correct techniques.
Who do you want to sing for?
Pontuação: 80.0Sugestão: ควรใช้คำที่ถูกต้อง เช่น "equipment" แทน "equipments" และจัดประโยคให้กระชับขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลของเนื้อหา
Exemplo: I would like to sing for my mom because she supports me in many ways. For example, she paid nearly 50,000 baht for my singing lessons and bought equipment like a microphone and speakers for my home.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: ควรแก้คำผิด เช่น "Seeing" ควรเป็น "Singing" และใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ชัดเจนขึ้น รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำและเพิ่มคำเชื่อมเพื่อความสมเหตุสมผล
Exemplo: Absolutely. Singing is a way to express emotions through the voice. It can convey feelings like sadness or happiness and can improve people's moods.
Gramática
× I really like to sing.
✓ I really like singing.
The verb 'like' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Using 'like to sing' is not incorrect but 'like singing' is more natural in this context.
× when you sing it releases chemical stuff, substances, which is endorphins, which this hormone makes you happy and alert.
✓ when you sing it releases chemical substances, which are endorphins, hormones that make you happy and alert.
The subject 'substances' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'which this hormone' is incorrect; it should be 'hormones that' to correctly refer to the plural noun and to form a proper relative clause.
× I used my full head voice and it makes my umm, throat sore.
✓ I used my full head voice and it made my umm, throat sore.
The sentence is in past tense ('used'), so the verb 'makes' should also be in past tense 'made' to maintain tense consistency.
× She paid almost 50K for my learning course and also for the equipments in my home like the microphone and the speakers.
✓ She paid almost 50K for my learning course and also for the equipment in my home like the microphone and the speakers.
'Equipment' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'equipments'. The correct form is 'equipment'.
× Seeing is another way of converting your emotions by hearing the voices of people singing.
✓ Singing is another way of expressing your emotions through hearing the voices of people singing.
The original sentence uses 'Seeing' which is incorrect in context; it should be 'Singing'. Also, 'converting your emotions by hearing' is awkward; 'expressing your emotions through hearing' is clearer and more appropriate.
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