Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many grammatical errors and hesitations. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and provide specific supporting details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Exemplo: I don't particularly enjoy singing because I am an introverted person. However, I remember singing once in my school when I was in 11th grade, and I received a low mark for it, which discouraged me.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains many fillers. Respond directly with a clear topic sentence and provide reasons or explanations using linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: No, I have never learned how to sing properly because I don't consider it my area of expertise, and I haven't felt the need to pursue it seriously.

Sugestão: Your answer is repetitive and lacks fluency. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain your reasons clearly with linking words and avoid unnecessary hesitation.

Exemplo: I don't really want to sing for anyone because I don't sing well and I have never imagined myself performing in front of others.

Sugestão: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Provide a complete, coherent response with specific reasons and examples, using linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to many people. For example, listening to songs performed by famous singers can help people relax and improve their mood because music often evokes positive emotions.

× I'm an introvert person.

✓ I'm an introverted person.

The adjective 'introvert' is a noun; the correct adjective form to describe a person is 'introverted'. Using 'introverted' properly modifies the noun 'person'. Use adjectives to describe nouns.

× So saying is uh, a big broth love to me.

✓ So singing is, uh, a big brother love to me.

The original sentence contains unclear words 'broth love' which seems to be a mishearing or typo. Assuming the intended phrase is 'big brother love', the definite article 'a' is correct here. However, the phrase is awkward and unclear. Possibly the student meant 'big part of my love' or 'big passion'. Clarification is needed, but correcting to 'singing' instead of 'saying' is necessary.

× I have been singing when I were in 11 Terry school and I have received a bar mark.

✓ I was singing when I was in 11th grade at Terry School and I received a bar mark.

The past continuous 'have been singing' is incorrectly used with 'when I were'. The correct past tense is 'was singing' and 'was' for singular first person. Also, '11 Terry school' is likely '11th grade at Terry School'. 'Have received' should be simple past 'received' to match the past time frame. Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are important.

× I did not, uh, want to learn to sing better and beautifully because it's not my expertise to dive in, uh, deep into it.

✓ I did not want to learn to sing better and beautifully because it's not my expertise to dive deep into it.

The modal verb 'did not want' is correctly used. The phrase 'dive in, uh, deep into it' is awkward; 'dive deep into it' is the correct expression. Also, 'better and beautifully' should be 'better and more beautifully' or 'better and beautifully' is acceptable but 'more beautifully' is more precise. The sentence is mostly correct but can be improved for clarity.

× I do not, have never seen a moment I will standing in front of someone and sing for them.

✓ I have never seen a moment when I will be standing in front of someone and singing for them.

The phrase 'I do not, have never seen' is redundant; 'I have never seen' suffices. 'I will standing' is incorrect; it should be 'I will be standing'. Also, 'sing for them' should be 'singing for them' to match the continuous action. Correct use of auxiliary verbs and verb forms is necessary.

× I'm not singing very well and yeah, and like, not my expertise.

✓ I don't sing very well and, yeah, it's not my expertise.

'I'm not singing very well' is present continuous but the context suggests a general statement, so simple present 'I don't sing very well' is better. 'And like, not my expertise' is informal and incomplete; 'it's not my expertise' is clearer. Use appropriate verb tense and complete sentences.

× some, for some people and most of people are listening to some song or recordings, uh, that singing by a singer, well, that are well known

✓ For some people and most people, listening to some songs or recordings sung by a well-known singer

'Most of people' should be 'most people'. 'Some song' should be 'some songs' to match plural. 'That singing by a singer' is incorrect; it should be 'sung by a singer'. 'That are well known' refers to 'singer' which is singular, so 'who is well known' or 'a well-known singer' is correct. Correct plural forms and relative clauses are important.

× because it's just not a treatment for relaxation, but it give them a sense of.

✓ because it's not just a treatment for relaxation, but it gives them a sense of happiness.

'It give' should be 'it gives' to agree with singular subject. The phrase 'a treatment for relaxation' is acceptable but 'just not a treatment' should be 'not just a treatment'. The sentence ends abruptly; adding 'happiness' or 'well-being' completes the thought. Subject-verb agreement and sentence completeness are necessary.