Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, with good detail about lessons and context. To improve, make the response more natural by using one concise topic sentence, reducing filler, and adding a brief specific example or feeling (e.g., why you enjoy it). Also avoid contractions that interrupt flow and keep to under five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I love singing because it helps me express my emotions; I’ve taken vocal lessons to improve my technique, and I often sing while I play the piano, which makes practicing more enjoyable.

Sugestão: Good content and personal feeling, but wording is slightly awkward (e.g., 'so many', 'work in my harmony'). Make the topic sentence direct, use precise vocabulary (technique, harmony), and give one short specific detail about what you learned. Keep it to one or two supporting sentences and avoid filler.

Exemplo: Yes, I’ve taken several vocal classes to improve my technique and harmony; for example, I worked on breath control and pitch accuracy, which really boosted my confidence.

Sugestão: You answered the question but hesitated and gave mixed-time framing. Start with a direct answer (who), then add a brief explanation. Remove hesitations and be specific about the audience (e.g., family, concert hall). Use linking words to connect ideas (first, now, however).

Exemplo: At first I wanted to sing for my friends and family to build confidence, but now I imagine performing for a large audience at a concert hall because I enjoy sharing music with many people.

Sugestão: Good use of reasoning and specific reference to science, but avoid fillers and overlong phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain the effect using simpler phrasing and one concrete example or result. Keep vocabulary accurate (endorphins, dopamine) and pluralization consistent.

Exemplo: Yes, I think singing makes people happier because studies show that activities like singing increase dopamine and endorphin levels, which improve mood; for example, community choir members often report feeling less stressed and more connected.

× Yes, I love singing and I've taken some vocal lessons and I often sing when I play the piano.

✓ Yes, I love singing; I've taken some vocal lessons, and I often sing when I play the piano.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs punctuation for clarity. Use a semicolon or commas with conjunctions to separate independent clauses. No tense change is required; present perfect 'I've taken' is appropriate for past actions with present relevance. Improve by adding punctuation to avoid run-on sentence structure.

× Yes, I have taken so many vocal classes to improve my techniques and work in my harmony and that is something I truly enjoyed.

✓ Yes, I have taken many vocal classes to improve my technique and work on my harmony, and that is something I truly enjoy.

Use 'many' instead of 'so many' for a formal response and 'technique' (uncountable) rather than 'techniques' unless referring to specific methods. 'Work on' is the correct prepositional verb. Change 'truly enjoyed' (past) to 'truly enjoy' (present) to match the present perfect context and the continuing feeling. Also comma needed before 'and' joining independent clauses.

× Well, the first time I went to singing classes, all I wanted to do was to boost my confidence. But umm, I always envisage myself singing, uh, to a large audience since then.

✓ Well, the first time I went to singing classes, all I wanted to do was boost my confidence. Since then, I have always envisaged myself singing to a large audience.

Remove the extra 'to' after 'was' (infinitive 'to boost' can be shortened to 'boost' after 'was'). 'Since then' requires present perfect tense 'have envisaged' to show an action continuing from the past to now. Also relocate 'since then' to the beginning for natural flow. Filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' should be omitted in a corrected transcript.

× Yes, I believe there are so many scientific proofs for how uh engaging in, uh activities such as singing or playing a musical instrument can boost the production of dopamine and endorphin in the brain.

✓ Yes, I believe there is a lot of scientific evidence that engaging in activities such as singing or playing a musical instrument can boost the production of dopamine and endorphins in the brain.

Use 'there is' with uncountable noun phrase 'a lot of scientific evidence' rather than 'there are so many scientific proofs' (proofs is countable and awkward here). 'Evidence' is the preferred uncountable noun. Use 'that' after 'evidence' rather than 'for how'. Remove filler words. 'Endorphins' should be plural. 'Boost the production of' is correct; maintain present tense to state a general truth.