Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and coherent: open with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., "speak up my mind" -> "express myself").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express myself. For example, when I sing simple songs after a stressful day, I feel calmer and more focused, and I often learn new lyrics and techniques from online videos or friends.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer then add specific details and linking words. Correct tense and phrasing ("I haven't had formal lessons" instead of "I didn't learn"). Give clear examples of how you practised with friends and what you learned.

Exemplo: I haven't had formal singing lessons, but I practised a lot with friends at school. For instance, we used to sing together during breaks, taking turns to imitate each other's styles, which helped me improve my timing and volume.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and one strong reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition. Use natural expressions such as "I like to sing for myself" and explain how it benefits you with a concrete example.

Exemplo: I prefer to sing for myself because it helps me relieve stress and enjoy the moment. For example, when I'm alone I sing to unwind after work, which makes me feel more positive and less worried.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then support with a specific example and linking words. Improve grammar ("many people listen to them") and clarify the social context. Mention concrete effects of singing on people’s mood or relationships.

Exemplo: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it creates shared experiences. For example, in my hometown popular family songs often bring relatives together to sing and talk, which strengthens bonds and lifts everyone's mood.

× Yes, I like singing because it relaxes my mind, I can speak up my mind and and relieve all my voice in my mind.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it relaxes my mind; I can express my thoughts and relieve the feelings in my mind.

Errors: repeated word 'and and', unnatural phrase 'speak up my mind', and 'relieve all my voice in my mind' is incorrect. This is a verb form and collocation issue (present participle/verb usage). Suggest using 'express my thoughts' and 'relieve the feelings in my mind' for clarity and correct verb usage.

× And I also learn many ways to sing a simple song and learn many other lyrics which is good for a peaceful of mind.

✓ I also learn many ways to sing simple songs and learn other lyrics, which is good for peace of mind.

Errors: 'a simple song' should be plural 'simple songs' to match 'many ways', and 'a peaceful of mind' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'peace of mind'. This is an adjective/noun collocation issue. Use plural to match 'many' and the fixed phrase 'peace of mind'.

× No, I didn't learn how to sing, but we as a friends in school time, we all ever for fun.

✓ No, I didn't learn how to sing, but when we were friends at school, we all sang for fun.

Errors: incorrect word order and tense forms: 'we as a friends in school time' should be 'when we were friends at school'. 'We all ever for fun' is ungrammatical; use simple past 'sang' to describe repeated past activity. This is a past tense and sentence structure issue; use 'were' for past state and 'sang' for past action.

× We sing many songs in our free time and we learn from each other how that person sing that song with the slow word or the slow version is or I have to, uh, speak loudly or in the fast.

✓ We sang many songs in our free time and learned from each other how each person sang a song, whether a slow version or a fast one, and whether to sing loudly or quickly.

Errors: tense inconsistency (present vs past) and incorrect verb forms: 'how that person sing' should be 'how each person sang'. Phrases 'the slow word' and 'or the slow version is' are unclear; use 'slow version' or 'fast one'. 'In the fast' should be 'quickly' or 'fast'. Use past tense consistently and correct participle forms.

× I want to I want to sing for myself because I want to relieve myself from many worries and want to learn about singing how to sing even if used for a fun or used for that moment.

✓ I want to sing for myself because I want to relieve myself of many worries and learn how to sing, even if it is just for fun or for the moment.

Errors: repetition 'I want to I want to', incorrect preposition 'relieve myself from' should be 'relieve myself of', and awkward clause 'learn about singing how to sing even if used for a fun'. This is a sentence structure and preposition issue; simplify and use correct prepositions and clause forms.

× But there anyway reason is but I want to learn for myself.

✓ But anyway, my reason is that I want to learn for myself.

Errors: redundant conjunctions 'but' repeated and awkward word order 'there anyway reason is but'. This is a sentence structure problem; reorder to 'Anyway, my reason is that...' and remove redundant words.

× Yes, obviously singing brings many happiness to people because in my hometown there are many singers and many people listen them.

✓ Yes, obviously singing brings much happiness to people because in my hometown there are many singers and many people listen to them.

Errors: 'many happiness' is uncountable and should be 'much happiness' or 'a lot of happiness' (quantifier/adjective issue) and missing preposition 'listen them' should be 'listen to them' (pronoun/preposition error). Here correction focuses on pronoun and preposition use; add 'to' and correct quantifier.

× The, the many songs are family oriented songs.

✓ Many of the songs are family-oriented.

Errors: repetition 'The, the' and awkward phrasing 'family oriented songs'. Use 'Many of the songs are family-oriented.' Hyphenate compound adjective and simplify the structure.

× The family sit together and listen to their songs, which is very, uh, helpful for them to.

✓ Families sit together and listen to these songs, which is very helpful for them.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'The family sit' should be 'Families sit' or 'The family sits', and 'helpful for them to' is incomplete. This is a sentence structure and subject-verb agreement issue; correct the subject number and complete the clause.