Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "figure it out with any stresses." Use correct collocations (e.g., "relieve stress") and simpler grammar.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy singing because it gives me a lot of energy and helps me relieve stress. For example, after a long day I sing along to my favorite songs and I feel much calmer and more upbeat.

Sugestão: Answer directly and use correct tense and phrasing. Avoid long awkward phrases like "go to learn." Use linking words to contrast past and future plans. Be specific about why you want lessons.

Exemplo: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons, but I plan to take some soon because I want to improve my vocal technique and confidence. For instance, I hope lessons will help me control my breathing and sing more accurately.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and a clear reason. Use correct grammar ("who usually hang out"), and avoid repeating ideas. Provide a specific situation and link it to purpose (e.g., practice, entertain friends).

Exemplo: I'd like to sing for my friends at karaoke nights because it's a relaxed way to practice and have fun together. Singing for them would also motivate me to improve my voice and try new songs.

Sugestão: Make the idea clearer and use natural expressions. Start with a direct statement, then give a brief reason and an example. Replace awkward phrasing like "introduce them from the inner self" with "express their feelings."

Exemplo: Yes, I think singing can make people happy because it lets them express their feelings and connect with others. For example, singing at a celebration often lifts everyone's mood and creates a sense of togetherness.

× I like singing because it provides me a big energy.

✓ I like singing because it gives me a lot of energy.

'a big energy' is ungrammatical: energy is an uncountable noun, so use 'a lot of' or 'much' instead of 'a big'. Also 'provides me' is correct but 'gives me' is more natural here.

× Also it helps me to figure it out with any stresses and makes my voice stronger.

✓ It also helps me deal with stress and makes my voice stronger.

'figure it out with any stresses' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use the verb phrase 'deal with' + noun 'stress' (uncountable). 'Any stresses' is unnecessary. Reorder to place 'also' before verb for natural flow.

× Unfortunately, I didn't have this kind of experience in my lifetime.

✓ Unfortunately, I haven't had this kind of experience in my life.

The present perfect ('haven't had') fits because the experience up to now is being discussed. 'In my lifetime' is awkward in this context; 'in my life' is the natural phrase.

× However, in the near future I would like to go to learn how to sing because I find it really important skill in life for increasing my voice skills.

✓ However, in the near future I would like to learn how to sing because I find it a really important skill for improving my vocal ability.

Remove unnecessary 'go to' before 'learn'. Add article 'a' before 'really important skill'. 'Increasing my voice skills' is awkward; use 'improving my vocal ability' or 'voice skills'. Ensure noun phrases have correct articles.

× I would really want to sing in a karaoke with my friends who usually hanging out there.

✓ I would really like to sing at a karaoke with my friends who usually hang out there.

Use 'like' rather than 'want to' for polite desire and 'sing at a karaoke' is the proper preposition. 'Who usually hanging out' needs present simple 'who usually hang out' (subject-verb agreement and verb form).

× It would be nice to have this singing lesson experience for my voice be more to be stronger.

✓ It would be nice to have this singing-lesson experience to make my voice stronger.

Original sentence has incorrect and redundant clauses ('be more to be stronger'). Use an infinitive purpose clause 'to make my voice stronger'. Hyphenate 'singing-lesson' or use 'singing lesson' for clarity.

× I firmly believe that singing can bring happiness to people in case of showing their emotions and introduce them from the inner self.

✓ I firmly believe that singing can bring happiness to people by allowing them to show their emotions and express their inner selves.

'in case of showing' is incorrect; use 'by allowing' or 'by helping' to indicate means. 'Introduce them from the inner self' is ungrammatical; use 'express their inner selves'.