Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Bạn trả lời chủ đề trực tiếp nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không chính xác và thông tin lặp lại. Cải thiện bằng cách: 1) Sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ (ví dụ: "after a long or difficult day" thay vì "after a hurricane day"); 2) Nói rõ tên ca khúc/ban nhạc với chữ hoa và phân loại đúng (ví dụ K-pop group Blackpink); 3) Giữ câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 3-4 câu) và tránh lặp từ như "song" nhiều lần; 4) Dùng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (because, so, for example).

Exemplo: I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a long, stressful day. I often sing K-pop songs, for example "How You Like That" by Blackpink, which has powerful vocals and catchy melodies. Singing lifts my mood and helps me forget about daily worries.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời có ý rõ ràng nhưng dùng thì và cấu trúc sai ("have been ever learned", "yet" không đúng chỗ). Cải thiện bằng cách: 1) Dùng thì phù hợp (present perfect: "I haven't learned to sing yet" hoặc present simple for habits); 2) Giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và kế hoạch trong tương lai; 3) Dùng liên từ để nối ý (but, so, because).

Exemplo: I haven't learned formal singing yet because I don't have much free time at the moment. However, I plan to join a singing class next year to improve my technique and control my voice.

Sugestão: Ý chính tốt nhưng có cấu trúc không tự nhiên và lặp từ ("make me be better", "it make me closer"). Cải thiện bằng cách: 1) Trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề ngắn; 2) Dùng cụm từ tự nhiên hơn ("bring people closer", "make me feel better"); 3) Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về khán giả và hoàn cảnh để phong phú nội dung.

Exemplo: I'd like to sing for everyone — friends, family and even new acquaintances — because music brings people closer together. For example, I enjoy singing at small gatherings or parties to help people relax and connect.

Sugestão: Ý tốt nhưng câu không hoàn chỉnh, có lỗi lặp và cấu trúc lúng túng ("this can it can"). Cải thiện bằng cách: 1) Viết câu đầy đủ và tránh lặp từ; 2) Nêu hai lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: expression of emotions, social bonding) và kết luận ngắn; 3) Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (express emotions, relieve stress, strengthen bonds).

Exemplo: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because it allows them to express emotions and relieve stress. Also, singing together strengthens social bonds, which creates a sense of belonging and joy.

× Well I really love singing because it makes me feel better after a hurricane day.

✓ Well, I really love singing because it makes me feel better after a hard day.

The phrase 'hurricane day' is unusual and likely incorrect in context. Use 'hard day' or 'a bad day' to express a difficult day. Also add a comma after 'Well' for natural spoken punctuation. Use present simple 'love' and 'makes' are correct, so only vocabulary and minor punctuation are corrected.

× My favorite song is UKUSUK and cable song such as How do you like that or black pink songs.

✓ My favorite songs are 'UKUSUK' and K-pop songs such as 'How You Like That' or songs by Blackpink.

The student used singular 'song' but listed multiple items, so use plural 'songs'. 'Cable song' is incorrect; likely meant 'K-pop' or 'Korean pop' songs. Capitalize proper nouns (Blackpink) and use correct song title. Enclose titles in quotes for clarity. Ensure parallel structure when listing items.

× Uh, I have been ever learned to sing yet because I don't have too much time for my favorite things.

✓ Uh, I have never learned to sing yet because I don't have much time for my hobbies.

The original mixes present perfect structure incorrectly. Use 'have never learned' (present perfect negative) rather than 'have been ever learned'. 'Yet' is redundant with 'never'; use one. 'Too much time for my favorite things' is awkward; use 'much time for my hobbies'.

× But in the future I want to participate in a singing class to make my voice better.

✓ But in the future I want to take a singing class to improve my voice.

'Participate in a singing class' is grammatically acceptable but 'take a singing class' is more natural. 'To make my voice better' should be 'to improve my voice' for idiomatic English. Tense 'want' for future intention is appropriate.

× Oh I want to sing to everyone in the world from new friends or my best friend because I think singing makes me be better and it make me closer.

✓ Oh, I want to sing for everyone in the world, from new friends to my best friend, because I think singing makes me feel better and it makes me feel closer to others.

Use 'sing for' rather than 'sing to' for audiences. 'From new friends or my best friend' should be 'from new friends to my best friend' to show range. 'Makes me be better' is incorrect; use 'makes me feel better'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it make' should be 'it makes'. Add commas and 'to others' for clarity.

× I think singing brings happiness to people because this can it can show people emotions and help them know themselves better and.

✓ I think singing brings happiness to people because it can show emotions and help them know themselves better.

The original has redundant words 'this can it can' and ends with an extra 'and'. Remove redundancy and streamline: 'it can show emotions' is sufficient. Also use 'help them know themselves better' which is okay; ensure sentence ends properly without trailing conjunction.