Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 回答は内容が伝わるが、発音ミス（singing と seeing の混同）、文法の誤り、冗長さが目立ちます。トピック文を明確にし、理由を1〜2点に絞って簡潔に述べ、適切な語彙と文法（be動詞、現在分詞、目的語）を使う練習をしてください。例えば“I enjoy singing because it relieves my stress”のように始め、具体的な状況（例：シャワー中、シャワーで歌う）を短く補足すると良いです。

Exemplo: I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and reduce stress. For example, I often sing in the bathroom while taking a shower because the acoustics make me feel like I’m on stage.

Sugestão: 回答は要点を伝えているが、文法と語順の誤り（learned vs learnt acceptable, 'in Group chat' の表現、過去形の扱い、冗長なフレーズ）が目立ちます。トピック文で直接答え、その後で短い補足説明（何を学んだか、どのくらい続けたか）を一つか二つ示してください。接続詞（because, although）を正しく使い文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

Exemplo: I haven’t had formal singing lessons, but I joined an online group where a teacher gave us tips on technique. Although I’m not aiming to be a professional, the sessions helped me improve my breathing and pitch control.

Sugestão: 答えは明確で個人的な内容を含むが、表現に多少混乱（used to sing in the church ... now I'm become an atheist は時制と表現が不自然）があります。まず直接に“no specific person”と答え、理由を論理的に説明してください。宗教の変化を述べる際は簡潔にし、感情や目的（relaxation）を強調しましょう。

Exemplo: I don’t have a specific person in mind. I used to sing in church for worship, but now I sing mainly for myself to relax and relieve stress.

Sugestão: 内容は論理的で理由も述べられているが、again 'singing' と 'seeing' の誤用や一部語の繰り返し、接続表現の自然さを改善できます。主張→理由→例の順で短くまとめ、linking words（for example, therefore, also）を適切に使うとより流暢に聞こえます。

Exemplo: Yes, I believe singing can make people happier because it allows them to express emotions and relieve stress. For example, group singing often creates a strong sense of connection and togetherness.

× Yes I love seeing it's because seeing singing is makes me believe my stress especially I'm in the bathroom where the my boys hair calls feels like I'm on the stage and it makes me it helps me to reduce my stress.

✓ Yes, I love singing because singing helps me relieve my stress, especially when I am in the bathroom where shampooing my hair feels like being on a stage, and it helps me relax.

The sentence contains incorrect use of the -ing form and several word choice errors. Replace 'seeing' with 'singing' (correct verb) and use 'helps me relieve my stress' instead of 'makes me believe my stress'. Use 'when I am' for present continuous context and correct noun phrases: 'shampooing my hair' or 'washing my hair' instead of 'the my boys hair calls'. Remove redundant phrases and streamline the sentence. Suggestions: practice using verb+ing after verbs of liking/enjoying and use 'help' + object + base verb (help me relax / help me relieve stress).

× Actually I've never learned how to sing but I used to be in Group chat where a teacher taught us to how to sing really properly.

✓ Actually I've never learned how to sing, but I used to be in a group chat where a teacher taught us how to sing properly.

Errors include tense and extra particles: 'taught us to how to sing' is incorrect; correct is 'taught us how to sing' or 'taught us to sing'. 'Used to be in Group chat' needs article and lowercase: 'a group chat'. Suggestions: use 'taught us how to' or 'taught us to' and include articles for countable nouns. Maintain present perfect 'I've never learned' with past 'taught'.

× It this experience was to help me to like improve my singing skill even though I'm not aiming to be a professional which was it was really good experience.

✓ This experience helped me improve my singing skills even though I am not aiming to be a professional; it was a really good experience.

The original has redundant words and poor sentence structure: 'It this experience was to help me to like improve' is ungrammatical. Use simple past 'helped me improve' or present perfect if continuing. Use plural 'singing skills'. Remove filler 'like' and duplicate phrases 'which was it was'. Suggestions: simplify clauses and use punctuation to join related ideas correctly.

× Actually I don't have a specific person who I want to sing for.

✓ Actually, I don't have a specific person I want to sing for.

The relative clause 'who I want to sing for' is acceptable but more natural omits 'who'. No pronoun error severe, but removing 'who' improves flow. Suggestion: use concise relative clauses when the object is a person: 'person I want to sing for'. Also add comma after 'Actually'.

× Uh, since I used to sing in the church to worship God then now I'm become an atheist.

✓ I used to sing in church to worship God, but now I have become an atheist.

Tense and aspect errors: 'since I used to sing... then now I'm become' mixes forms. Use 'used to' for past habit and 'have become' or 'am now' for current state. Use 'in church' not 'in the church' for activity. Replace 'then' with 'but'. Suggestions: separate past habit and current status with contrastive conjunctions and correct verb forms.

× So now I just think just for myself to relax and reduce my stress.

✓ So now I just sing for myself to relax and reduce my stress.

Sentence lacks the main verb 'sing' and repeats 'just'. Use present simple 'sing' for habitual action. Remove redundant words. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a clear verb and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× Yes, I think seeing makes people happy.

✓ Yes, I think singing makes people happy.

Wrong verb 'seeing' instead of 'singing'. Use the -ing form correctly as a gerund functioning as the subject. Suggestion: check that the gerund matches the intended activity.

× It helps people express emotions and relieve stress, and singing together can bring people closer and then create a strong sense of connection or cooperation.

✓ It helps people express emotions and relieve stress, and singing together can bring people closer and create a strong sense of connection and cooperation.

Minor parallelism and connector issues: remove 'then' and use 'and' to join coordinated results. 'Connection or cooperation' is awkward; 'and' better conveys both. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure and choose conjunctions that fit the logical relationship.