Part 1
Examinador
Do you like singing? Why?
Candidato
When I was a child, I was confident and extroverted, so I usually sang loudly in order to get attention from others. However, as I've grown up, my enthusiasm to the seeing is decreasing, so I don't enjoy seeing in front of others anymore.
Examinador
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Candidato
No, I haven't. I've just attended the music class in my primary school. In addition, compared with singing, umm, I suppose that drawing is more addicted to me, so I participate in drawing class.
Examinador
Who do you want to sing for?
Candidato
When I was a child I was outgoing an extrovert so I can sound to anyone that's close to me, even some strangers. But currently I always feel awkward when singing to others so I prefer sing to myself.
Examinador
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Candidato
Definitely. As for me, when I am down for no particular reason, if my friend can sing to me to train me up, I will feel touching and comforted and they provide therapeutic emotional support to me.
Do you like singing? Why?
Pontuação: 62.0Sugestão: 句子需要更直接回应问题并更自然流畅。注意时态一致和用词准确(例如“singing”,不是“seeing”或“singing in front of others”)。保持回答简洁(最多5句),并用一两句解释原因,使用连接词使逻辑更清楚。可改进发音和词汇(如“outgoing”、“perform”)。
Exemplo: Yes, I used to enjoy singing when I was a child because I was outgoing and liked performing to get attention. But as I grew older, I became more reserved, so I rarely sing in front of others now.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Pontuação: 66.0Sugestão: 回答要更清晰和自然。避免用词不当(如“addicted to me”),用更合适的表达(如“more interested in drawing”)。减少犹豫词(umm),并用连接词衔接两个要点。控制句子长度,确保结构完整。
Exemplo: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons, only basic music classes at primary school. I am more interested in drawing, so I chose to attend art classes instead.
Who do you want to sing for?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 回答需要更直接并修正语法错误(例如“outgoing and extroverted”,“I could sing for anyone close to me”)。用现在与过去对比时注意时态一致。避免笨拙表达,使用连词(however, so)使句子更连贯。
Exemplo: As a child I was outgoing and would sing for friends and even strangers. However, now I feel awkward singing in front of others, so I usually sing only when I'm alone.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Pontuação: 68.0Sugestão: 回答总体积极,但表达需要更简洁自然。修正不地道的短语(如“train me up”改为“cheer me up”或“lift my spirits”)。避免重复(touching and comforted),用一两句举例说明如何带来快乐或安慰,使用连接词使逻辑清晰。
Exemplo: Yes, definitely. When I'm feeling down, a friend singing to me or sharing a song can really cheer me up and provide emotional support, making me feel comforted and less alone.
× However, as I've grown up, my enthusiasm to the seeing is decreasing, so I don't enjoy seeing in front of others anymore.
✓ However, as I've grown up, my enthusiasm for singing has decreased, so I don't enjoy singing in front of others anymore.
错误类型:现在时/现在完成时与现在完成进行时使用不当。说明:原句中“my enthusiasm to the seeing is decreasing”搭配不正确,应该用介词“for”表示对某事的热情,名词用“singing”而非“seeing”。此外,既然说“as I've grown up”(我长大了),应使用现在完成时导致的结果——“has decreased”比“is decreasing”更合适且更自然。改为“has decreased”更清楚地表达从过去到现在的变化。建议:把“to the seeing”改为“for singing”,把“is decreasing”改为“has decreased”,并将“seeing”改为“singing”。
× No, I haven't. I've just attended the music class in my primary school.
✓ No, I haven't. I only attended music class in primary school.
错误类型:时态与词汇搭配问题。说明:学生使用“I've just attended”暗示最近刚参加过,但根据语境应表示过去在小学参加过音乐课,使用一般过去时“attended”更合适,且不需要完成时的“have”与前句“haven't”混淆。此外短语“the music class”不自然,改为“music class”或“a music class”。建议:用一般过去时并简化冠词。
× In addition, compared with singing, umm, I suppose that drawing is more addicted to me, so I participate in drawing class.
✓ In addition, compared with singing, I find myself more addicted to drawing, so I attend drawing classes.
错误类型:介词/词组搭配不当。说明:“more addicted to me”结构错误,应该是“I am more addicted to drawing”或“I find myself more addicted to drawing”。动词“participate in drawing class”在此语境不自然,应使用“attend drawing classes”。建议:把“is more addicted to me”改为“I find myself more addicted to drawing”并把“participate in drawing class”改为“attend drawing classes”。
× When I was a child I was outgoing an extrovert so I can sound to anyone that's close to me, even some strangers.
✓ When I was a child I was outgoing and extroverted, so I could sing to anyone who was close to me, even some strangers.
错误类型:形容词/副词使用错误与情态动词时态不一致。说明:原句“outgoing an extrovert”中“an”应为“and”,并且“extrovert”作名词,改为形容词“extroverted”更恰当。情态动词“can”与过去时间状语“When I was a child”不一致,应使用过去时态“could”。“sound to anyone”用法错误,应该是“sing to anyone”或“sing for anyone”。建议:把“an”改为“and”,把“extrovert”改为“extroverted”,把“can”改为“could”,把“sound to”改为“sing to”,并把“that's”改为“who was”。
× But currently I always feel awkward when singing to others so I prefer sing to myself.
✓ But currently I always feel awkward when singing to others, so I prefer to sing to myself.
错误类型:动词不定式/现在时用法。说明:短语“prefer sing to myself”缺少不定式标记“to”,正确应为“prefer to sing”。此外句子中时态“currently I always feel”可以保留,逗号后需要不定式。建议:在“prefer”后加“to”,并在“others”和“so”之间加逗号。
× When I was a child, I was confident and extroverted, so I usually sang loudly in order to get attention from others.
✓ When I was a child, I was confident and extroverted, so I usually sang loudly in order to get attention from others.
错误类型:介词使用正确(此句无需修改)。说明:原句语法正确,介词“from others”搭配得当,时态也与时间状语一致。无需改动。
× Who do you want to sing for?
✓ Who do you want to sing for?
错误类型:情态动词使用正确(句子为考官问句,无错误)。说明:问题句为原考官提问,不是学生错误,无需改动。
× When I was a child I was outgoing an extrovert so I can sound to anyone that's close to me, even some strangers.
✓ When I was a child I was outgoing and extroverted, so I could sing to anyone who was close to me, even some strangers.
错误类型:句子结构错误(与之前同句重复指出)。说明:原句中有并列连接词错误、名词/形容词使用不当、时态不一致和动词搭配问题。建议按前述修正,保持句子结构清晰。
× No, I haven't. I've just attended the music class in my primary school. In addition, compared with singing, umm, I suppose that drawing is more addicted to me, so I participate in drawing class.
✓ No, I haven't. I only attended music class in primary school. In addition, compared with singing, I find myself more addicted to drawing, so I attend drawing classes.
错误类型:时态与搭配混合错误(合并句子修正的总结)。说明:将现在完成时与一般过去时混用导致时间表达不清;介词和被动搭配错误影响表达。建议参照上面分句的修改。
× Definitely. As for me, when I am down for no particular reason, if my friend can sing to me to train me up, I will feel touching and comforted and they provide therapeutic emotional support to me.
✓ Definitely. For me, when I am down for no particular reason, if my friends sing to me to cheer me up, I feel touched and comforted; they provide therapeutic emotional support to me.
错误类型:现在分词/动词形式使用不当。说明:原句“if my friend can sing to me to train me up”不自然,“train me up”用法不适合此处,改为“cheer me up”更常见。主从句时态应保持一致,条件句用一般现在时“sing”比“can sing”更自然。“I will feel touching”中“touching”用法错误,应为“I feel touched”。此外“friend”应为复数“friends”或保持单数并与代词一致。建议:把“can sing to me to train me up”改为“sing to me to cheer me up”,把“I will feel touching”改为“I feel touched”。