Part 1
Examinador
Do you make a list when you shop?
Candidato
No, I never made it, least when I shop because I like doing online shopping and when you select the items you gonna buy there is already a list and you don't need to make an actual list which take more space and with the notebook or paper.
Examinador
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Candidato
I'm currently a student now so I don't make this for work but I make this for study. It really work because it remind me my everyday routine and I can take the boxes when I finish projects. This make me confident and feel like everything is under control.
Examinador
Why don't some people like making lists?
Candidato
I'm a people who don't really like making this so I had to have a say on it. This is because these people don't have a their schedule too flexible because their deadline usually pop out suddenly so if they make a list they can rally complete it and this made them frustrated and eventually don't make this anymore.
Examinador
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Candidato
I like making this on my phone because I can carry my everywhere and once I complete the task I can directly take off the box. However, when making with the paper it is easy to get lost and sometimes I need to come home to take it. I would recommend time block this app.
Do you make a list when you shop?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 回答中语法错误较多,表达不够自然,且句子较长且结构混乱。建议简化句子结构,使用正确时态,并且避免冗余。
Exemplo: No, I don't usually make a list when I shop because I prefer online shopping. The website already shows the items I want to buy, so I don't need to write a separate list.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误,表达不够流畅。建议注意主谓一致,时态使用正确,并且用连接词使句子更连贯。
Exemplo: I'm currently a student, so I don't make lists for work. However, I do make lists for my studies. They help me remember my daily tasks, and I can check off items when I finish them. This makes me feel confident and organized.
Why don't some people like making lists?
Pontuação: 50.0Sugestão: 回答表达不清晰,语法错误多,逻辑不够连贯。建议先明确观点,再用具体原因支持,使用连接词使表达更流畅。
Exemplo: Some people don't like making lists because their schedules are often unpredictable. Deadlines can come up suddenly, so making a list might make them feel stressed if they can't complete everything. As a result, they may avoid making lists altogether.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: 回答较为清晰,但有语法和用词错误。建议注意冠词和介词的使用,句子结构更自然,且推荐应用时表达更准确。
Exemplo: I prefer making lists on my phone because I can carry it everywhere. When I complete a task, I can easily check it off. Paper lists can be lost or forgotten at home. I recommend using the Time Block app for managing tasks.
× No, I never made it, least when I shop because I like doing online shopping and when you select the items you gonna buy there is already a list and you don't need to make an actual list which take more space and with the notebook or paper.
✓ No, I never make it, at least when I shop because I like doing online shopping and when you select the items you are going to buy there is already a list and you don't need to make an actual list which takes more space and uses a notebook or paper.
这里的时间是现在时态,表示习惯性动作,所以动词应使用一般现在时。"never made"是过去时,不符合语境。"gonna"应改为正式的"are going to"。"which take"应改为"which takes",主语是单数"list",动词需加-s。
× I'm currently a student now so I don't make this for work but I make this for study. It really work because it remind me my everyday routine and I can take the boxes when I finish projects. This make me confident and feel like everything is under control.
✓ I'm currently a student now so I don't make this for work but I make this for study. It really works because it reminds me of my everyday routine and I can tick the boxes when I finish projects. This makes me confident and feel like everything is under control.
主语是第三人称单数"it",动词应加-s,故"work"改为"works","remind"改为"reminds","make"改为"makes"。此外,"remind me my everyday routine"应加介词"of"。"take the boxes"应改为"tick the boxes",更符合习惯表达。
× I'm a people who don't really like making this so I had to have a say on it.
✓ I'm a person who doesn't really like making this so I have to have a say on it.
"people"是复数,前面用单数冠词"a"不合适,应改为单数"person"。"don't"应改为"doesn't",因为主语是单数"person"。"had to"改为"have to",保持时态一致。
× This is because these people don't have a their schedule too flexible because their deadline usually pop out suddenly so if they make a list they can rally complete it and this made them frustrated and eventually don't make this anymore.
✓ This is because these people don't have their schedule too flexible because their deadlines usually pop out suddenly so if they make a list they can't really complete it and this makes them frustrated and eventually they don't make this anymore.
"a their schedule"中冠词"a"多余,应去掉。"deadline"应为复数"deadlines",与"usually pop out"搭配。"rally"应为"really"。"can rally complete"应为"can't really complete",语义更通顺。"this made"应为"this makes",时态保持一致。
× I like making this on my phone because I can carry my everywhere and once I complete the task I can directly take off the box.
✓ I like making this on my phone because I can carry it everywhere and once I complete the task I can directly tick off the box.
"carry my everywhere"中"my"用错,应为宾格代词"it"指代"this"。"take off the box"表达不准确,应为"tick off the box"表示完成任务打勾。
× However, when making with the paper it is easy to get lost and sometimes I need to come home to take it.
✓ However, when making with paper it is easy to get lost and sometimes I need to come home to get it.
"with the paper"中"the"不必要,改为"with paper"更自然。"take it"改为"get it"更符合语境,表示取回。
× I would recommend time block this app.
✓ I would recommend the Time Block app.
"time block this app"表达不清,应改为"the Time Block app",加冠词并调整词序,表示推荐某个应用。