Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and lacks coherence. Try to form complete sentences and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, explain why you love reading and how it helps your writing in a clear way.

Exemplo: Yes, I often visit the library because I love reading books. I enjoy the variety of books available, which helps me improve my vocabulary. Additionally, I write poems and stories, so reading inspires me to create my own work.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases like 'recreate some one day' and explain your ideas more clearly.

Exemplo: Usually, I read stories and poems in the library because they inspire me to write my own in the future. Moreover, I collect new vocabulary words, which I find interesting and useful for my poetry.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repetition and use more precise expressions.

Exemplo: Actually, I did not have the chance to visit a library when I was a child because I lived in a village without good library facilities. However, as an adult, I have developed a strong love for libraries.

Sugestão: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to organize your answer better. Also, be more specific about why kids like going to the library.

Exemplo: Yes, Chinese kids often visit the library because they enjoy reading storybooks, jokes, and other entertaining materials. Libraries also help them gain knowledge and develop a love for reading.

× Library Yes, I frequently visit the library because I love reading books.

✓ Yes, I frequently visit the library because I love reading books.

The word 'Library' at the beginning is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence structure. Removing it makes the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× Variety of books attracts me because I as well write a poem, story and the various kind of siree and all.

✓ A variety of books attracts me because I also write poems, stories, and various kinds of poetry and so on.

The original sentence has incorrect article usage and awkward phrasing. 'A variety of books' is the correct phrase. 'I as well write' should be 'I also write'. 'Poem' and 'story' should be plural to match the context. 'Siree' seems to be a typo for 'poetry' or similar. The phrase 'and all' is informal and replaced with 'and so on' for clarity.

× So I love reading books because I get to know about various words.

✓ So I love reading books because I get to learn new words.

The phrase 'get to know about various words' is awkward. 'Get to learn new words' is clearer and more natural.

× I usually go to the library and I read stories and poems so that I can recreate some one day.

✓ I usually go to the library and read stories and poems so that I can create some one day.

The phrase 'recreate some' is incorrect in this context; 'create some' is appropriate when referring to writing poems or stories. Also, 'I read' can be simplified to 'read' after 'and' for smoother flow.

× I like collecting different vocabularies because I find them attractive and it will help me in my poem.

✓ I like collecting different vocabulary words because I find them attractive and they will help me in my poems.

'Vocabulary' is an uncountable noun, so 'different vocabularies' is incorrect; 'different vocabulary words' is correct. Also, 'it will help me in my poem' should be 'they will help me in my poems' to agree with plural 'words' and plural 'poems'.

× Actually I I did not get the chance to go to the library when I was a kid because I belong from the village and in my village there were no any good facilities for libraries.

✓ Actually, I did not get the chance to go to the library when I was a kid because I belonged to a village and in my village there were no good facilities for libraries.

'I belong from the village' is incorrect; past tense 'belonged to a village' is correct. 'No any' is incorrect; 'no' alone suffices. Added comma after 'Actually' for clarity.

× So when I became adult I started loving library even more.

✓ So when I became an adult, I started loving the library even more.

'Became adult' needs the article 'an'. 'Loving library' requires the definite article 'the' before 'library'. Added comma after the introductory clause.

× Of course, Chinese kids as well frequently go to the library because not only the Chinese kids, kids everywhere love going to the library because they can read story books, jokes and other kind of funny books in there and they can get knowledge.

✓ Of course, Chinese kids also frequently go to the library because not only Chinese kids, but kids everywhere love going to the library since they can read storybooks, jokes, and other kinds of funny books there and gain knowledge.

'As well' is better replaced with 'also' for smoother flow. 'Not only the Chinese kids, kids everywhere' is awkward; corrected to 'not only Chinese kids, but kids everywhere'. 'Story books' should be 'storybooks' as one word. 'Other kind of funny books' should be 'other kinds of funny books' to agree in number. 'In there' is redundant; 'there' suffices. 'Get knowledge' is better expressed as 'gain knowledge'.