Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is quite long and somewhat unclear, with grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Keep your answer concise and natural, avoiding repetition.

Exemplo: I recently discovered that my city has a library when a friend told me about it. She mentioned meeting someone interesting there, which made me curious. So, I decided to visit the library myself and explore what it offers.

Sugestão: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrases. Try to state your main purpose clearly, then add specific details with linking words. Also, avoid confusing or irrelevant information to make your answer more effective and natural.

Exemplo: I usually go to the library to focus on studying because it's quiet and comfortable. Although some friends think I go there to read novels, I prefer studying since it's free and provides amenities like water and snacks.

Sugestão: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Make sure to answer directly, use correct grammar, and provide clear supporting details with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and focus on coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to go to my school's library when I was a kid. However, the provincial library, which had a large collection of books and magazines, was too far from my home. Therefore, my parents couldn't take me there often, even though I asked them to.

Sugestão: Your answer provides some observations but is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly, use linking words, and avoid awkward phrases. Provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

Exemplo: Based on what I've seen, most library visitors are adults or students like me. Young children in China usually prefer staying at home to read magazines or comic books because libraries require quiet behavior, which they might find boring.

× It was just one month ago when I knew that the city I lived in had has a library.

✓ It was just one month ago when I knew that the city I lived in had a library.

The phrase 'had has' incorrectly combines past and present tense verbs. Since the sentence refers to a past event, 'had' alone is correct. Remove 'has' to maintain past tense consistency.

× It was a from the story of my one of my friends.

✓ It was from the story of one of my friends.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced words ('a from the story of my one of my friends'). The corrected sentence removes unnecessary articles and duplicates to form a clear and grammatically correct sentence.

× She tell that she told that she met a really handsome boy at the library.

✓ She told me that she met a really handsome boy at the library.

The verb 'tell' should be in past tense 'told' to match the past context. Also, 'she told that' is incomplete; adding 'me' clarifies the object of 'told'. The phrase 'she told that she met' is correct after this adjustment.

× I was so curious about the library and I just instantly asked her where and yeah, I have surprise and I went to library like.

✓ I was so curious about the library that I instantly asked her where it was, and yeah, I was surprised and went to the library.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'that' connects the clauses properly. 'I have surprise' should be 'I was surprised' to match past tense. 'Went to library like' is incomplete; adding 'the' and removing 'like' clarifies the meaning.

× Of course, I go to library in order to immerse myself myself in studying.

✓ Of course, I go to the library in order to immerse myself in studying.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'myself' is repeated unnecessarily; removing the duplicate improves clarity.

× A lot of my friends think that I would go to library in order to like read all of their adventurous novel, but unfortunately they require at least $1.00 for each time.

✓ A lot of my friends think that I would go to the library to read all of their adventurous novels, but unfortunately, they require at least $1.00 each time.

'Go to library' needs 'the' before 'library'. 'Like' is unnecessary and informal here. 'Novel' should be plural 'novels' to match 'all of their'. 'For each time' is better expressed as 'each time'.

× But I love the fact that studying there give me free white pie, free water.

✓ But I love the fact that studying there gives me free white tea and free water.

The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'studying'. 'White pie' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'white tea' is a common free beverage in libraries or cafes. Adding 'and' clarifies the list.

× Yes, but they were just my school's libraries.

✓ Yes, but they were just my school's libraries.

This sentence is correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× Well, the province library, which are really enormous in food, books and magazines.

✓ Well, the provincial library, which is really enormous in books and magazines.

'Province library' should be 'provincial library' as an adjective form. 'Which are' should be 'which is' to agree with singular 'library'. 'Food' is unlikely relevant here and probably an error.

× They were very far away from my house, so my parents can't couldn't take me to this place, although I had like a fetched them to take me there.

✓ They were very far away from my house, so my parents couldn't take me to this place, although I tried to persuade them to take me there.

'Can't couldn't' is redundant; only 'couldn't' is correct for past negative. 'Had like a fetched them' is incorrect; 'tried to persuade them' conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× From my observations, most of the visitors to the library are like 20 to 30 adult or the youngsters like students like me.

✓ From my observations, most of the visitors to the library are about 20 to 30 adults or youngsters like students like me.

'Adult' should be plural 'adults' to match the number. 'Are like' is informal; 'are about' is more appropriate. 'The youngsters' should be 'youngsters' without 'the' for general reference.

× For the kids, I believe that they would prefer to stay at home and read their own magazine and comics books rather than stay going to the libraries and foxing themselves to not saying anything or making noises.

✓ For the kids, I believe that they would prefer to stay at home and read their own magazines and comic books rather than go to the libraries and force themselves not to say anything or make noise.

'Magazine' should be plural 'magazines' to match 'their own'. 'Comics books' should be 'comic books'. 'Stay going to' is incorrect; 'go to' is correct. 'Foxing' is a typo for 'forcing'. 'To not saying' should be 'not to say'. 'Making noises' is better as 'make noise'.