Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatical, concise, and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence stating frequency, then add one or two specific reasons with correct verb forms. Avoid fillers like “uh” and unclear phrases (“your library”).

Exemplo: I often go to the public library near my home. I usually borrow books and sometimes use a tablet there for research, and I also study quietly when I have homework because it helps me concentrate.

Sugestão: Use correct verb forms and a clear sentence structure: topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail, linked logically. Remove vague or incomplete clauses and explain why the library helps you.

Exemplo: I usually read books and study in the library. Because it’s quiet and has few distractions, I can concentrate better and finish tasks more quickly.

Sugestão: Use past simple for past habits and keep sentences concise. Provide one or two specific details (location, activities) with correct grammar and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often went to a small public library in the park near my home, where I borrowed storybooks and spent afternoons reading.

Sugestão: Avoid generalizing from movies and use clearer language. Give a direct opinion sentence, then one reason or example based on real-life observation or common practice. Use correct grammar and fewer fillers.

Exemplo: I think many Chinese children do visit libraries, especially for studying or extra lessons. For example, it’s common to see students using the library to prepare for exams or attend tutoring sessions.

× I usually go to your library for reading books and borrow some stuff like uh, tablet or books for my research.

✓ I usually go to the library to read books and borrow things like a tablet or books for my research.

The student used 'your library' which improperly addresses the examiner; use 'the library' instead. Also the gerund phrase 'for reading books' is better expressed as 'to read books'. 'Some stuff' is vague; 'things' or specific nouns are preferable. Use an article before 'tablet' ('a tablet'). Improve clarity by parallel structure: 'borrow things like a tablet or books.'

× And it also be a place that I come to do my homework in high school because it's helped me.

✓ It was also a place I went to do my homework in high school because it helped me.

The original 'it also be' is incorrect tense and structure. Use past tense 'was' to match 'in high school'. 'That I come to do my homework' should be 'I went to do my homework' for past context. 'Because it's helped me' mixes present perfect with past context; use 'because it helped me.' This fixes tense consistency and the 'there be' misuse.

× I usually reading books and also bring my homework to doing there because I think I can concentrate and focus more on my work while I sit in the library that doesn't have.

✓ I usually read books and also bring my homework to do there because I think I can concentrate and focus more on my work when I sit in the library.

'I usually reading' is incorrect; use base verb 'read' after 'usually' (present simple habit). 'Bring my homework to doing there' is ungrammatical; use 'bring my homework to do there' or better 'bring my homework to work on there.' The clause 'while I sit in the library that doesn't have' is incomplete and incorrect; remove 'that doesn't have' and use 'when I sit in the library.' This corrects verb form and sentence structure.

× I remember when I was a kid, I was I have been going to the library near my home.

✓ I remember when I was a kid, I used to go to the library near my home.

Mixing 'was' and 'I have been going' creates tense inconsistency. For habitual past actions, use 'used to go' or simple past 'I went.' 'I have been going' (present perfect continuous) is inappropriate with 'when I was a kid.' Use 'used to go' to indicate a repeated past habit.

× It was in the park and it's a Public Library that everyone can go to borrow books and spend.

✓ It was in the park and it was a public library where everyone could go to borrow books and spend time.

'It's a Public Library' mixes present tense with past context; use 'it was a public library.' 'Public Library' should not be capitalized. The relative clause 'that everyone can go to borrow books and spend' is incomplete — spend what? Add 'time' and use past ability 'could.' This corrects tense and completes the idea.

× I think most of Chinese get go to library because I have seen a lot of movie showing that uh they mostly spend time on umm in library for like tutoring or doing theirs.

✓ I think most Chinese go to the library because I have seen many movies showing that they mostly spend time in libraries for tutoring or studying.

'Most of Chinese' is incorrect; use 'most Chinese' or 'most Chinese people.' 'Get go to library' is ungrammatical; use 'go to the library.' 'A lot of movie' should be 'many movies.' 'Spend time on umm in library' — use 'spend time in libraries.' 'For like tutoring or doing theirs' is incorrect pronoun and noun choice; use 'for tutoring or studying.' This addresses subject-verb agreement, articles, plurality, and pronoun usage.