Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence stating how often you go, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce filler words and hesitations, use linking words (for example, after, with) to connect ideas, and limit your answer to under five sentences.

Exemplo: I often go to my university library. After long days of classes, I usually study there with friends to revise our lessons. I also use the quiet study areas when I need to concentrate on assignments.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific examples of activities. Avoid repetition (don’t say "I usually" multiple times) and add a linking word to show reason or purpose. Keep it within three sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: I mainly use the library to study and prepare for class. For example, I review lecture notes and complete homework there, and I often rehearse presentations in a quiet study room so I can focus.

Sugestão: Give one clear past-tense sentence saying whether you went, then add one specific memory as a supporting detail. Remove hesitations, correct grammar (e.g., 'when I was about six'), and use linking words like 'when' or 'with' to make the story coherent.

Exemplo: I only went to the library once when I was a child. When I was about six years old, my sister took me there and we picked out storybooks to read together.

Sugestão: Answer with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons or examples. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect words (e.g., 'high and sick' and 'tax'). Use linking words (for example, however, instead) and correct collocations (e.g., 'keen on').

Exemplo: In my experience, Chinese children do not often visit libraries. Instead, many prefer outdoor games such as football or cycling, and they often read comics or manga rather than visiting public libraries.

× I always when I go to the library, which is just in my uh, uh, university and, umm, after a long day at school or even after the, uh, lessons, I will, uh, go to the library, uh, at my school with my friends and we just revised the lessons.

✓ I usually go to the library at my university after a long day at school or after lessons, and my friends and I review the lessons there.

The original mixes adverbs of frequency and tense incorrectly (uses 'always' with future 'will' and past 'revised'). Use simple present for habitual actions: 'usually go' and 'review' instead of 'will...revised'. Also correct word order to 'my friends and I' for subject pronoun placement. Suggestion: Use consistent present simple when describing habitual routines.

× Well, as I said before, I usually do my homework or review my our notes on our lesson that I study in the class.

✓ As I said before, I usually do my homework or review my notes from the lessons I study in class.

The original incorrectly repeats possessive pronouns ('my our') and uses an awkward relative clause. Remove the extra pronoun and use 'from the lessons' or 'from class' to show source. Use 'I study in class' -> 'I study in class' or omit 'I' for conciseness. Suggestion: Avoid repeating possessives and simplify phrases like 'notes from the lessons'.

× I usually use my library in our school to prepare for my presentation in the class.

✓ I usually use the school library to prepare for my class presentations.

Use 'the school library' rather than 'my library in our school' for natural English. 'Prepare for my presentation in the class' is awkward; use plural 'presentations' or 'my class presentation' and omit 'in' before 'class' when 'class' is a noun modifier. Suggestion: Use 'the school library' and 'prepare for my class presentation' for clarity.

× Uh, actually, uh, when I was a kid, I just went, uh, went to the library just one time.

✓ When I was a kid, I went to the library only once.

The original repeats 'went' and uses 'just' twice; use simple past 'went' once and place 'only once' after the verb phrase for natural emphasis. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and place adverbs like 'only' close to the verb they modify.

× Uh, I remember that is, uh, when I study, uh, uh, three, I just like 6 years old and I went to the library with my sister.

✓ I remember that I was about six years old when I went to the library with my sister.

The original mixes tenses and numbers awkwardly ('when I study, three, I just like 6 years old'). Use past tense 'was' for age in the past and 'about six years old' for approximate age. Use a single clear clause order: 'I was about six years old when I went...'. Suggestion: Use 'was' for past states (age) and keep clause order simple.

× We, uh, just find the stories and uh, umm.

✓ We just found some storybooks.

The original uses present 'find' when describing a past event; use simple past 'found'. 'The stories' is vague; 'storybooks' or 'stories' works with an article or qualifier. Complete the sentence to avoid trailing off. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the context (past event -> past tense) and provide a complete object.

× Well in my country children are quite active so they prefer outdoor activities together like high and sick or tax or play football together.

✓ In my country, children are quite active, so they prefer outdoor activities together like hide-and-seek or tag, or playing football together.

Original contains nonsense words 'high and sick' and 'tax' likely intended as 'hide-and-seek' and 'tag'. Also ensure verb forms after 'or' are parallel: 'hide-and-seek or tag, or playing football' or better '...like hide-and-seek, tag, or playing football.' Keep present simple for habitual facts. Suggestion: Use correct game names and parallel structure for lists of activities.

× They just only keen on reading comic books or manga.

✓ They are only keen on reading comic books or manga.

Missing verb 'are' (be verb) to link subject and adjective 'keen'; also 'just only' is redundant—use one ('only'). Use present simple 'are' for general statements. Suggestion: Use 'are only keen on' and avoid redundant adverbs.

× So it's really easy the children.

✓ So it's really easy for the children to do those activities.

The original word order is incorrect and missing preposition and infinitive. Use 'easy for the children to...' or rephrase 'So those activities are very easy for children.' Suggestion: Use 'easy for [people] to [verb]' structure to express ease of an action.