Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, avoid redundancy and use more precise vocabulary. For example, instead of 'I can't always provide to buy new shoes,' say 'I can't afford to buy new shoes frequently.'

Exemplo: I really enjoy buying shoes and like to switch between different pairs. However, since I live in Syria, I can't afford to buy new shoes every month. Therefore, I usually purchase new shoes every three to four months.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating the same idea and improve coherence by using linking words. Also, use more natural expressions like 'I'm afraid they won't fit' instead of 'I have a fear.'

Exemplo: I haven't bought shoes online yet because I'm afraid they won't fit properly. Therefore, I haven't tried it and probably won't try it anytime soon.

Sugestão: Improve sentence flow by using linking words and avoid repetition. Also, clarify the time frame and use more precise vocabulary, for example, 'I don't mind spending a significant amount because I use the shoes frequently and they last for several months.'

Exemplo: I usually spend between 100,000 and 200,000 Syrian pounds on shoes. I don't mind spending that much because I use them often, and they typically last for about four to five months.

Sugestão: Good answer but you can improve by adding linking words and more specific details to enrich your response. For example, explain why both qualities are important to you.

Exemplo: I usually look for shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because I want to look good while also being able to wear them for long periods without discomfort.

× So maybe every three months, four months, I buy a new shoes.

✓ So maybe every three months, four months, I buy new shoes.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so the article 'a' should not be used before it. Using 'a' implies singular, which conflicts with the plural noun 'shoes'. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural mismatch.

× Actually I haven't bought any shoes from online yet, but I don't think it's a good idea because I have a fear that it won't fit.

✓ Actually I haven't bought any shoes online yet, but I don't think it's a good idea because I have a fear that they won't fit.

The preposition 'from' is unnecessary before 'online' in this context. Also, 'it' should be 'they' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'. Removing 'from' and changing 'it' to 'they' corrects the preposition and pronoun usage.

× I don't really have a problem on spending a lot of money on shoes because I know that I will use them very often and I know they will be with me for like about four to five months.

✓ I don't really have a problem spending a lot of money on shoes because I know that I will use them very often and I know they will be with me for about four to five months.

The phrase 'have a problem on spending' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'have a problem spending' without 'on'. Also, 'like' is unnecessary before 'about' and should be removed for clarity.