Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid filler words like 'umm' and repeated phrases such as 'also'. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I like to have different pairs for various occasions. For example, I prefer sneakers from Adidas for casual events, but I also collect formal shoes for special occasions.

Sugestão: Focus on structuring your answer clearly by using linking words like 'because' and 'so' appropriately. Avoid awkward phrasing and be more specific about your experience to make your answer more natural and effective.

Exemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. For instance, on Canada Day, Adidas had a sale, so I ordered a pair in my preferred colour. The shoes arrived in good condition, and I appreciated that I could return them if needed.

Sugestão: Avoid unclear phrases like 'for which location I'm buying that'. Instead, give a clear topic sentence and explain your budget with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: The amount I spend on shoes depends on their type and purpose. However, I usually set a budget of up to $80 because I want to balance quality and affordability.

Sugestão: Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your preference logically and coherently.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because comfort is essential. Fortunately, many fashionable shoes are also comfortable, but I would not choose shoes that look good but feel uncomfortable.

× I want to have collection of good pair of shoes so that I can wear on several occasions.

✓ I want to have a collection of good pairs of shoes so that I can wear them on several occasions.

The phrase 'collection of good pair of shoes' is incorrect because 'collection' should be followed by a plural noun 'pairs' to indicate multiple pairs of shoes. Also, 'a collection' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Additionally, 'wear on several occasions' needs the pronoun 'them' to refer to the shoes.

× Usually I buy one pair until.

✓ Usually I buy one pair at a time.

The phrase 'buy one pair until' is incomplete and incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'one pair at a time', indicating the quantity of purchase. 'Until' is a preposition indicating time and does not fit here.

× there was the going on my favorite brand Adidas.

✓ there was a sale going on for my favorite brand Adidas.

The phrase 'there was the going on my favorite brand Adidas' is ungrammatical. The correct expression is 'there was a sale going on for my favorite brand Adidas.' The preposition 'for' is used to indicate the brand associated with the sale.

× So I ordered shoes online from it and they were good when I received them and also there was an option to return them so I choose my color.

✓ So I ordered shoes online from it and they were good when I received them, and also there was an option to return them, so I chose my color.

The verb 'choose' should be in the past tense 'chose' to match the past context. Also, commas are added for clarity. The pronouns 'they' and 'them' are used correctly here.

× So it depends on the type of shoes and for which location. I'm buying that.

✓ So it depends on the type of shoes and the location where I'm buying them.

The phrase 'for which location. I'm buying that.' is awkward and incorrect. The correct preposition is 'where' to indicate location, and 'them' refers to the shoes. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× so I'm not going to spend more than them more than that on my shoes.

✓ so I'm not going to spend more than that on my shoes.

The phrase 'more than them more than that' is redundant and incorrect. 'More than that' suffices to express the intended meaning. 'Them' is unnecessary and causes confusion.

× But we can't do anything with the things or the stuff which look fashionable is not comfortable.

✓ But we can't do anything with things or stuff that look fashionable but are not comfortable.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunction use and sentence structure. 'Which' should be 'that' for restrictive clauses, and the sentence is restructured to connect the ideas properly using 'but'.

× So I but if there is a choice that it will be only comfortable no not.

✓ So, if there is a choice, it will be only comfortable, not fashionable.

The sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect conjunctions and word order. It is corrected to a coherent sentence expressing preference, with proper conjunctions and negation.