Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundant filler words like 'you know' and 'uh'. Try to be more concise and clear, directly answering the question with a topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for better fluency.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially classic leather ones. I believe they enhance my style by making it look elegant and refined.

Sugestão: Your answer is vague and does not directly address the question. Try to give a clear yes or no, then explain your preference with specific reasons. Avoid filler words and keep your answer concise and relevant.

Exemplo: I haven't bought shoes online yet, but I prefer shopping in stores because I like to try them on to ensure they fit well and look stylish.

Sugestão: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many filler words. Try to state a clear amount or range and explain why you spend that much, using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I usually spend a considerable amount on shoes, especially on dark leather ones, because I prefer classic styles that make my appearance elegant.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to clearly state your preference and explain why, using linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because stylish shoes improve my look, while comfort ensures I can wear them all day without pain.

× Yes, I'm fine of it and I like buying shoes, you know, classic shoes, uh, I believe uh, you know, it made my make my style very stylish and you know delicate, uh, you know, leather shoes are the best.

✓ Yes, I'm fond of it and I like buying shoes, you know, classic shoes. I believe it makes my style very stylish and delicate. Leather shoes are the best.

The phrase 'I'm fine of it' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I'm fond of it' to express liking something. Also, 'it made my make my style' is grammatically incorrect; the correct form is 'it makes my style' to indicate present effect. Additionally, the sentence was fragmented and needed restructuring for clarity.

× Not really, but I do like to buy shoes and it doesn't matter whether you buy shoes online or, you know, in the store presently, but you know being stylish is the best option.

✓ Not really, but I do like to buy shoes and it doesn't matter whether you buy shoes online or in the store currently. Being stylish is the best option.

The word 'presently' is often confused; here, 'currently' or 'now' is more appropriate to indicate the present time. Also, the sentence was slightly awkward and was corrected for smoother flow without changing meaning.

× In buying shoes, I feel lavish and I'm fond of buying expensive leather shoes, Uh, dark one. And uh, you know, 'cause I use, uh, classic, uh, style. It would make me make my style, uh, elegant.

✓ When buying shoes, I feel lavish and I'm fond of buying expensive leather shoes, especially dark ones. I use a classic style. It makes my style elegant.

The phrase 'dark one' is incorrect when referring to shoes in general; it should be plural 'dark ones' to match 'shoes'. Also, 'It would make me make my style elegant' is awkward and incorrect; 'It makes my style elegant' is the correct present tense form.

× Well, I prefer both of them and buying shoes. Buying shoes with more stylish with would have positive impact in my style.

✓ Well, I prefer both of them when buying shoes. Buying more stylish shoes would have a positive impact on my style.

The original sentence has awkward conjunction and phrasing. 'Both of them and buying shoes' is unclear; it should be 'both of them when buying shoes'. Also, 'with more stylish with' is incorrect; it should be 'more stylish shoes'. The phrase 'positive impact in my style' should be 'positive impact on my style' due to correct preposition usage.