Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "I believe buying shoes every six months is mandatory" which sounds too strong and unnatural. Also, improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they play an important role in my style. I usually buy new shoes every six months since their shape can change over time, affecting comfort and appearance.

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to simplify your sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'since' properly. Also, avoid repeating the same idea unnecessarily.

Exemplo: No, I prefer buying shoes in person because I can try them on first. This helps me avoid problems like poor fit or discomfort that might happen when buying online.

Sugestão: Your answer has unclear phrases and some mistakes, such as 'Boeing expensive shoes' which seems incorrect. Focus on clear vocabulary and sentence structure. Also, directly answer the question about how much money you spend, then explain why.

Exemplo: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes, especially if they are made of high-quality leather. Good shoes protect my feet and also enhance my style.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but has some repetition and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and clarify your reasons. Also, avoid repeating words like 'because' twice in a row.

Exemplo: I prefer fashionable shoes because they positively impact my style. Since my job requires a professional appearance, classic stylish shoes are the best choice for me.

× Actually, I'm fond of buying shoes because they're one of the most important parts in my style and I believe buying shoes every six months is mandatory because of the shape of shoes may change time to time.

✓ Actually, I'm fond of buying shoes because they're one of the most important parts of my style and I believe buying shoes every six months is mandatory because the shape of shoes may change from time to time.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'parts' here; the correct preposition is 'of' to indicate belonging or association. Also, the phrase 'time to time' requires the preposition 'from' to form the correct expression 'from time to time,' meaning occasionally.

× No, I believe buying shoes should be in person because of the any problem with the arise from buying shoes online because you didn't try the shoes and for impeding any possible problem you have to buy it in person.

✓ No, I believe buying shoes should be in person because of any problems that may arise from buying shoes online since you didn't try the shoes, and to prevent any possible problems you have to buy them in person.

The phrase 'the any problem' is incorrect; 'any' should not be preceded by 'the.' Also, 'with the arise' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'that may arise.' Additionally, 'impeding' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'preventing.' The pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'shoes' (plural).

× Actually, I'm fond of the Boeing expensive shoes because the quality should be leather and the high quality one would protect your shoe, your feet and make your style more elegant.

✓ Actually, I'm fond of buying expensive shoes because the material should be leather, and high-quality ones would protect your feet and make your style more elegant.

'Boeing' is a misspelling or incorrect word; it should be 'buying.' 'Quality should be leather' is incorrect; 'material' is more appropriate. 'High quality one' should be plural 'high-quality ones' to agree with 'shoes.' Also, 'your shoe, your feet' is inconsistent; 'feet' is plural and sufficient here.

× My precedence is buying stylish shoes because fashionable shoes would have a great positive impact on your style and the classic ones are the best because because of the field of my job it would have a great impact.

✓ My preference is buying stylish shoes because fashionable shoes have a great positive impact on your style, and the classic ones are the best because, due to the field of my job, they have a great impact.

'Precedence' is incorrect; the correct word is 'preference.' The phrase 'because because of' is redundant; only one 'because' is needed. 'It would have' is incorrect as it refers to 'the classic ones' (plural), so 'they have' is correct. Also, 'due to' is a better preposition than 'because of' in this context.