Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, say "I like buying shoes about once a month because having a variety makes me feel confident and relaxed."

Exemplo: I enjoy buying shoes about once a month because having different styles makes me feel confident and relaxed.

Sugestão: Your answer covers the main points but could be clearer and more coherent by using linking words and avoiding repetition. Try to organize your ideas logically and use specific examples.

Exemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online. Although it's convenient and often cheaper, sometimes the size doesn't fit well or the material isn't as described, which can be disappointing.

Sugestão: Your answer is vague and unclear. Try to give a more specific and complete response with a topic sentence and supporting details.

Exemplo: I usually don't spend a lot on shoes; I try to keep my budget reasonable so I can manage other expenses comfortably.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repetition and improve sentence flow.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because I value comfort more than style when it comes to footwear.

× Yes, I like to buy shoes once a month because a variety of shoes for women makes them so self confident and more relaxed.

✓ Yes, I like to buy shoes once a month because a variety of shoes for women make them so self-confident and more relaxed.

The subject 'a variety of shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes'. Also, 'self confident' should be hyphenated as 'self-confident' because it is a compound adjective.

× Yes, I like to buy shoes once a month because a variety of shoes for women makes them so self confident and more relaxed.

✓ Yes, I like to buy shoes once a month because a variety of shoes for women make them so self-confident and more relaxed.

The phrase 'self confident' is an adjective and should be hyphenated as 'self-confident' to correctly modify the noun 'them'.

× Yes, it's a good idea to buy shoes online, but sometimes it doesn't work because maybe it is not your size and the material that they say is not exactly what it is.

✓ Yes, it's a good idea to buy shoes online, but sometimes it doesn't work because maybe they are not your size and the material they describe is not exactly what it is.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'shoes' which is plural, so 'they' should be used. Also, 'the material that they say' is awkward; 'the material they describe' is clearer.

× Not a lot of money, but as much as I can handle on another expenses.

✓ Not a lot of money, but as much as I can handle on other expenses.

The phrase 'another expenses' is incorrect because 'another' is used with singular countable nouns. The correct phrase is 'other expenses' for plural nouns.

× I'm not a person who follows fashion in every situation, but for my shoes, comfortable shoes are better than fashionable shoes because I'm I'm paying money for being comfortable, not being fashionable.

✓ I'm not a person who follows fashion in every situation, but for my shoes, comfortable shoes are better than fashionable shoes because I'm paying money to be comfortable, not to be fashionable.

The phrase 'I'm I'm' is a repetition error and should be corrected to 'I'm'. Also, 'paying money for being comfortable' is awkward; 'paying money to be comfortable' is more natural.