Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "purpose of fulfillment and satisfaction" which is a bit awkward. Also, 'comfortable and relaxing' should be 'comfortable and relaxing shoes' or better 'comfortable and supportive'. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, especially because I wear them daily for my job as a healthcare provider. Therefore, I always focus on finding comfortable and supportive shoes that help me stay on my feet all day.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be improved by avoiding repetition of 'online' and by using linking words to make the sentence flow better. Also, 'everyday' should be 'every day' as two words when meaning each day.

Exemplo: Yes, I always buy shoes online because it allows me to shop comfortably from home. Moreover, I have the freedom to search for comfortable and suitable work shoes that I can wear every day.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition ('that I that I'). Also, the response does not directly answer the question about how much money you spend. Try to give a more specific answer with estimated amounts or ranges, and explain your reasoning clearly with linking words.

Exemplo: The amount I spend on shoes varies depending on their quality. For example, I usually spend around $100 to $150 on comfortable shoes because I believe investing in good footwear is important for protecting my feet.

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve it by avoiding repetition ('long long term') and by adding a linking phrase to expand your explanation. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your opinion.

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes since I believe that quality footwear is essential for protecting my feet and providing lasting comfort throughout the day.

× I love buying shoes because it gives me a purpose of fulfillment and satisfaction whenever I wear them.

✓ I love buying shoes because it gives me a sense of fulfillment and satisfaction whenever I wear them.

The phrase 'a purpose of fulfillment' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'a sense of fulfillment' to convey the feeling of satisfaction. 'Purpose' refers to an aim or goal, not a feeling.

× So I focus on buying comfortable and relaxing.

✓ So I focus on buying comfortable and relaxing shoes.

The sentence is incomplete because 'comfortable and relaxing' are adjectives that need a noun to modify. Adding 'shoes' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I always buy my shoes online because I can do it in the comfort of my home and it gives me freedom to search online for comfortable and suitable work shoes that I can use everyday.

✓ Yes, I always buy my shoes online because I can do it in the comfort of my home and it gives me the freedom to search online for comfortable and suitable work shoes that I can use every day.

The phrase 'gives me freedom' should be 'gives me the freedom' because 'freedom' is a countable noun here and requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace'; the correct adverb is 'every day' to indicate frequency.

× It depends on the quality of the shoes that I that I buy.

✓ It depends on the quality of the shoes that I buy.

The phrase 'that I that I buy' contains a repeated phrase likely due to a typo. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× If I really like the style and how comfortable it is then I usually buy it because it is all for my feet protection.

✓ If I really like the style and how comfortable it is, then I usually buy them because it is all for my feet protection.

The pronoun 'it' is used incorrectly to refer to 'shoes', which is plural. The correct pronoun is 'them' to agree in number with 'shoes'.

× ensuring long long term comfort.

✓ ensuring long-term comfort.

The phrase 'long long term' is a repetition error. The correct form is 'long-term' as a compound adjective describing 'comfort'.