Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains filler words and hesitations. Try to give a direct response to the question first, then add clear supporting details. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite often because they are easier to choose compared to other clothing items. However, sometimes I worry about how comfortable they will be after wearing them for a long time.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question but includes repetitions and filler words. Try to organize your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

Exemplo: No, I have never bought shoes online and I probably won't because shoes vary a lot in style and fit. It's important to see how they look and feel on your feet to ensure comfort over time.

Sugestão: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear estimate or range and avoid unnecessary repetitions. Also, organize your answer logically with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

Exemplo: I usually spend around $100 to $150 on shoes. For example, I bought a pair of basketball shoes a few months ago that I still wear today.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant but contains filler words and some awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas and express them more naturally and fluently.

Exemplo: It depends on the situation. For sports shoes, I prioritize comfort over style because I need to perform well. However, for social events, I prefer fashionable shoes that look good.

× I really enjoy buying shoes because they are the easiest for me among uh, any other clothing, uh, to buy because they are very.

✓ I really enjoy buying shoes because they are the easiest for me among any other clothing to buy.

The phrase 'easiest for me among uh, any other clothing' contains unnecessary filler words 'uh' and an awkward preposition 'for me among'. The correct preposition is 'among' to compare shoes with other clothing items. Removing fillers and redundant words improves clarity.

× they are very. Easier to put on and have a test, but there is also the risk of not knowing what it happens after wearing it for a long time.

✓ They are much easier to put on and have a test, but there is also the risk of not knowing what happens after wearing them for a long time.

The sentence incorrectly uses a period after 'very' and the phrase 'have a test' is unclear. Also, 'what it happens' is incorrect; it should be 'what happens'. 'Them' is the correct pronoun for plural 'shoes'. The correction clarifies meaning and fixes grammatical errors.

× I have never and I don't think I ever will ever will because, uh, shoes are really, uh, delicate to buy due to all its variations and just seeing how it's, it looks on you really matters.

✓ I have never, and I don't think I ever will, because shoes are really delicate to buy due to all their variations, and just seeing how they look on you really matters.

The sentence repeats 'ever will' unnecessarily and uses 'its' and 'it's' incorrectly for plural 'shoes'. The modal verb phrase is corrected for clarity and grammar. 'Their' and 'they' are the correct pronouns for plural nouns.

× Uh, and of course it's just fits your feet so it doesn't get annoying after time.

✓ And of course, it just fits your feet so it doesn't get annoying over time.

The phrase 'it's just fits' is incorrect; 'it just fits' is correct. Also, 'after time' is better expressed as 'over time'. Removing filler 'uh' improves fluency.

× I don't have an exact number, but if I had to guess, I bought my last shoes again, this is a long time ago, but if I were to guess, it was about uh, 2,000,000 two months, uh, back then I bought basketball shoe, uh, I still wear it today.

✓ I don't have an exact number, but if I had to guess, I bought my last shoes a long time ago. If I were to guess, it was about 2,000,000 two months ago. Back then, I bought basketball shoes, which I still wear today.

The original sentence is run-on and confusing. 'Again, this is a long time ago' is awkward; better to say 'a long time ago'. 'Basketball shoe' should be plural 'basketball shoes'. Adding commas and breaking into sentences improves clarity and corrects tense usage.

× If I were to guess, it was about uh, 2,000,000 two months, uh, back then I bought basketball shoe, uh, I still wear it today.

✓ If I were to guess, it was about 2,000,000 two months ago. Back then, I bought basketball shoes, which I still wear today.

The phrase '2,000,000 two months' is unclear and missing 'ago' to indicate time. Also, 'basketball shoe' should be plural. Correct quantifiers and time expressions are necessary for clarity.

× If you're after, uh, sports shoe, so you definitely have to consider its comfort over its looks.

✓ If you're after sports shoes, you definitely have to consider their comfort over their looks.

The phrase 'If you're after, uh, sports shoe, so' is incorrect; 'so' is unnecessary and 'sports shoe' should be plural 'sports shoes'. Also, 'its' should be 'their' to agree with plural noun. Removing filler 'uh' improves fluency.

× But uh, some other occasions like a gathering or, uh, a special outgoing, you should pay real good attention to how it looks on you.

✓ But on some other occasions like a gathering or a special outing, you should pay close attention to how it looks on you.

'Outgoing' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'outing'. 'Real good attention' is informal; 'close attention' is better. Also, 'uh' fillers are removed. The pronoun 'it' refers to 'shoe' implicitly, which is acceptable here.