Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I'm obsessed with buying shoes every month because I like to have a different collection, such as flat heels and sneakers." Also, avoid filler words like "umm" and be more concise.

Exemplo: Yes, I love buying shoes and usually buy a new pair every month. I enjoy collecting different types, like flat heels and sneakers, to match various occasions.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and clarity. For example, say "Yes, I have bought most of my shoes online from a popular shopping site called SHE. About 90% of my shoes, including heels, sneakers, and sports shoes, come from there." Avoid confusing phrases like "famous stage for shopping."

Exemplo: Yes, I have bought most of my shoes online from a popular shopping website called SHE. Around 90% of my shoes, including heels, sneakers, and sports shoes, are from there.

Sugestão: Clarify your answer and use correct expressions. For example, say "I usually buy shoes every month, and I spend about 10 rials on each pair. Sometimes, if the brand is more expensive, I might spend up to 20 rials." Avoid unclear phrases like "10 rounds for each shoes I put."

Exemplo: I usually buy shoes every month and spend about 10 rials on each pair. However, if the brand is more expensive, I might spend up to 20 rials.

Sugestão: Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural. For example, say "It depends on the occasion. For school and everyday work, I prefer comfortable shoes. However, for weddings, I choose fashionable shoes even if they are less comfortable."

Exemplo: It depends on the occasion. For school and everyday work, I prefer comfortable shoes. However, for weddings, I choose fashionable shoes even if they are less comfortable.

× I'm a person who obsessed with buying shoe for every month I need to have a new shoes.

✓ I'm a person who is obsessed with buying shoes every month; I need to have new shoes.

The verb 'obsessed' needs the auxiliary verb 'is' to form the correct present continuous passive structure 'is obsessed'. Also, 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' to match the context, and 'for every month' is better expressed as 'every month'.

× I'm a person who obsessed with buying shoe for every month I need to have a new shoes.

✓ I'm a person who is obsessed with buying shoes every month; I need to have new shoes.

The noun 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' because it refers to multiple items. Also, 'a new shoes' is incorrect because 'a' is singular and 'shoes' is plural; it should be 'new shoes' without 'a'.

× So for example I enjoy to have a different collection of shoes, for example, umm, flat heels, sneakers and whatever.

✓ So for example, I enjoy having a different collection of shoes, such as flat heels, sneakers, and so on.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by the gerund form '-ing', so 'enjoy to have' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy having'.

× Actually yes, because most of my shoes I bought it from the famous stage for shopping SHE and so I think about 90% of my old shoes, whatever they are, heels, sneakers or sport, I get it from SHE instead online.

✓ Actually yes, because I bought most of my shoes from the famous shopping site SHE, so I think about 90% of my old shoes, whether they are heels, sneakers, or sports shoes, I got them from SHE online.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect pronoun use. 'I bought it' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; 'it' should be omitted or replaced with 'them'. Also, 'get' should be past tense 'got' to match 'bought'. 'Instead online' is incorrect; 'from SHE online' is better.

× Actually yes, because most of my shoes I bought it from the famous stage for shopping SHE and so I think about 90% of my old shoes, whatever they are, heels, sneakers or sport, I get it from SHE instead online.

✓ Actually yes, because I bought most of my shoes from the famous shopping site SHE, so I think about 90% of my old shoes, whether they are heels, sneakers, or sports shoes, I got them from SHE online.

The word 'sport' should be 'sports shoes' to correctly refer to the plural noun. Also, pronouns should agree in number with their antecedents.

× Actually, as I mentioned before that I bought shoes for every month, so it's about 10 rounds for each shoes I put and sometimes depends on the brand of the shoes.

✓ Actually, as I mentioned before, I buy shoes every month, so I spend about 10 riyals for each pair of shoes I buy, and sometimes it depends on the brand of the shoes.

'Bought shoes for every month' is incorrect; present tense 'buy shoes every month' fits better. '10 rounds' should be '10 riyals' (assuming currency). 'Each shoes' is incorrect; 'each' should be followed by singular noun or use 'each pair of shoes'. Also, 'I put' is unclear; 'I buy' is better.

× Actually, as I mentioned before that I bought shoes for every month, so it's about 10 rounds for each shoes I put and sometimes depends on the brand of the shoes.

✓ Actually, as I mentioned before, I buy shoes every month, so I spend about 10 riyals for each pair of shoes I buy, and sometimes it depends on the brand of the shoes.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. Since the habit is ongoing, present tense 'I buy' and 'I spend' are appropriate. Also, 'sometimes depends' needs a subject 'it' to be correct.

× So it's maybe more expensive, about 20 reals.

✓ So it may be more expensive, about 20 riyals.

'Maybe' is an adverb meaning 'perhaps' and is incorrectly used here; 'may be' is the correct modal verb phrase to express possibility. Also, 'reals' should be 'riyals' if referring to currency.

× Actually that depends on the occasion that I have to choose what to choose is a fit with that event.

✓ Actually, that depends on the occasion; I have to choose what fits that event.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'What to choose is a fit with that event' is incorrect; it should be simplified to 'what fits that event' for clarity and correctness.

× So for example, for the schools, for the everyday works I need to choose and go with the comfortable.

✓ So for example, for school and everyday work, I need to choose and go with comfortable shoes.

'For the schools' should be 'for school' (no article). 'Everyday works' is incorrect; 'everyday work' is better. Also, 'go with the comfortable' is incomplete; 'comfortable shoes' is needed.

× However, for weddings I need to look for the fashionable shoes rather than comfortable.

✓ However, for weddings, I need to look for fashionable shoes rather than comfortable ones.

'Rather than comfortable' is incomplete; it should be 'comfortable ones' to correctly compare shoes. Also, a comma after 'weddings' improves clarity.