Shoes— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the response more natural and concise by using one clear topic sentence and adding a short specific reason or detail. Avoid repeating similar phrases (e.g., "I do like" and "I'm really into it"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes — I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair every two months because I like updating my wardrobe and different shoes suit different outfits.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer and then give one concise, specific reason. Use linking words (because / and) correctly and avoid awkward phrasing like "in the reality stores."

Exemplo: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I'm worried about scams, and I prefer trying shoes on in physical stores to check the fit and comfort.

Sugestão: Correct number formatting and grammar (e.g., "$30 to $40" or "$300 to $4000" — clarify the currency and amount). Use one clear topic sentence and a short reason. Avoid grammar mistakes like "is has been guaranteed."

Exemplo: I usually spend around $30 to $40 on a pair of shoes because I prefer branded items; I find that well-known brands offer more reliable quality and comfort.

Sugestão: Keep the answer direct and concise. Use one topic sentence then a brief reason. Remove repetition and fix grammar (e.g., "I would I wouldn't").

Exemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because if a pair is expensive but uncomfortable, I simply won't wear them.

× No, I never bought shoes online before because I'm really afraid of scams and also I enjoy looking at the shoes in the reality stores.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I am really afraid of scams and I also enjoy looking at shoes in real stores.

The student uses simple past 'bought' with 'never...before' which requires present perfect (Grammar problem type 5). Also use 'have never bought' to indicate experience up to now. 'I'm' should be expanded to 'I am' consistently; 'the shoes' and 'in the reality stores' are incorrect articles and word choice: use 'shoes' (no article) and 'real stores' or 'physical stores'. Suggestions: use present perfect for life experiences, remove unnecessary 'before', and use 'real/physical stores'.

× I usually spend 3000 to $4000 on a shoe because I prefer to buy shoes with brands so the quality is has been guaranteed.

✓ I usually spend $3,000 to $4,000 on a pair of shoes because I prefer to buy branded shoes, so the quality is guaranteed.

Multiple errors: number and currency formatting and article use (Grammar problem type 22). 'on a shoe' is incorrect; use 'on a pair of shoes'. 'with brands' is awkward — use 'branded shoes' or '品牌-name shoes'. 'the quality is has been guaranteed' is ungrammatical: choose either 'is guaranteed' (present passive) or 'has been guaranteed' (present perfect passive). Here 'is guaranteed' fits. Suggestions: use correct currency format, 'pair of shoes', 'branded shoes', and 'is guaranteed'.

× I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable shoes because if I spend a lot of money on my shoes and it is uncomfortable then I would I wouldn't want to have them on my feet.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because if I spend a lot of money on shoes and they are uncomfortable, I wouldn't want to wear them.

The original contains redundant and conflicting words and pronoun agreement issues (Grammar problem type 26). 'fashionable shoes' can be shortened to 'fashionable ones'. The subordinate clause 'if I spend... and it is uncomfortable' mixes singular and plural: 'shoes' is plural, so use 'they are uncomfortable'. Also there is duplication 'I would I wouldn't'. Finally, use 'wear them' instead of 'have them on my feet' for natural phrasing. Suggestions: ensure pronoun agreement with plural nouns, remove duplicated words, and use concise expressions.